Invincible
Free verse18 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
wow what a picture right here mikey I have spent a long time, mirror bound, angle obsessed, profile processing
tilting my head on a lovability axis, neck sore, (but on board) anticipating-- excellently penned dear friend
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wow what a picture right here mikey I have spent a long time, mirror bound, angle obsessed, profile processing
tilting my head on a lovability axis, neck sore, (but on board) anticipating-- excellently penned dear friend
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
Comment from Spitfire
The narrator appears to be not only invincible but obsessed! Practicing all kinds of masks in front of the mirror so as to ready for any occasion. My sister did that. LOL
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The narrator appears to be not only invincible but obsessed! Practicing all kinds of masks in front of the mirror so as to ready for any occasion. My sister did that. LOL
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from Sankey
Interesting poem again friend. Great flow interesting structure. Almost thought someone was looking in the mirror at themselves. Good work mate as usual.
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Interesting poem again friend. Great flow interesting structure. Almost thought someone was looking in the mirror at themselves. Good work mate as usual.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
This is very powerful, with evocative use of language, but frankly it's not one of my favorites of yours. Usually, I like the way you so uniquely blend free verse and rhyme, but somehow in this one everything from "color wheels" to the end seems out of place in the original poem. I'm probably being too picky; it's really a matter of personal taste, and it's still a very powerful poem.
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This is very powerful, with evocative use of language, but frankly it's not one of my favorites of yours. Usually, I like the way you so uniquely blend free verse and rhyme, but somehow in this one everything from "color wheels" to the end seems out of place in the original poem. I'm probably being too picky; it's really a matter of personal taste, and it's still a very powerful poem.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. I take the poem as you caught your self. But you know you will survive. You talk to yourself and decide you are invincible Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I take the poem as you caught your self. But you know you will survive. You talk to yourself and decide you are invincible Great work.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent free verse, Mikey, had to giggle at the end, ...
like a ...never mind! LOL, That expression has been around a long time now. I think your contest entry is brilliant, and could easily be a winner. Good luck! xsx sandra
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Excellent free verse, Mikey, had to giggle at the end, ...
like a ...never mind! LOL, That expression has been around a long time now. I think your contest entry is brilliant, and could easily be a winner. Good luck! xsx sandra
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from 24chas
I liked this, mikey. It had an off kilter kind of rhythm which I can appreciate. Good flow and imagery as well. Nice job.
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I liked this, mikey. It had an off kilter kind of rhythm which I can appreciate. Good flow and imagery as well. Nice job.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Thank you for the "never mind"- snug as a bug in the rug would be far too cutesy. Maybe I'm a bit thick this morning, but I don't understand what you are satirising. Maybe poking fun at yourself for putting on Lancelot armor. Your third and fourth stanzas- very well-written, by the way- suggest a poke at narcissism or trying to be all things for all people, but who or what is the target? If the graphic is essential to understanding , I don't know who that dude is.
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Thank you for the "never mind"- snug as a bug in the rug would be far too cutesy. Maybe I'm a bit thick this morning, but I don't understand what you are satirising. Maybe poking fun at yourself for putting on Lancelot armor. Your third and fourth stanzas- very well-written, by the way- suggest a poke at narcissism or trying to be all things for all people, but who or what is the target? If the graphic is essential to understanding , I don't know who that dude is.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from robina1978
I love the artwork that complements your free verse. A girl might fall but not for real. And you love her, I think. I liked the last bit best. Best wishes for the contest.
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I love the artwork that complements your free verse. A girl might fall but not for real. And you love her, I think. I liked the last bit best. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from madhatter1977
Very powerful feelings expressed here! There's a small typo in the title. I really like the split lines and the subject matter, but I would beware of such feelings - they may cause you to do something daft. Then again, life is daft! Great to feel invincible as long as you're not angry at the same time! Fly my friend but don't crash! Pete :)
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Very powerful feelings expressed here! There's a small typo in the title. I really like the split lines and the subject matter, but I would beware of such feelings - they may cause you to do something daft. Then again, life is daft! Great to feel invincible as long as you're not angry at the same time! Fly my friend but don't crash! Pete :)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
