A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "~Delicious~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
65 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Dean,
You certainly are the master of the macabre write. It flows, it drips blood, and in the end it grabs you by the throat and squeezes. You are lyrical, but in a diabolical way.
Do you think humans are also capable of good or in your mind does evil win most of the time?
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Dear Dean,
You certainly are the master of the macabre write. It flows, it drips blood, and in the end it grabs you by the throat and squeezes. You are lyrical, but in a diabolical way.
Do you think humans are also capable of good or in your mind does evil win most of the time?
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Heh, thank you, Winslow. I don't know about being the "master", but I'm certainly happy that you feel that way.
Much obliged, my friend!
Comment from BeasPeas
There are many good lines in your poem. Last stanza is particularly good, although there are no slip ups in your story or progression thereof. "Mangled mess" and "knotted skein" are descriptive and unique. Author's note is informative, telling me something I didn't know, which is that Mary was rumored to be a vampiress and that her body disappeared from the morgue. Good write!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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There are many good lines in your poem. Last stanza is particularly good, although there are no slip ups in your story or progression thereof. "Mangled mess" and "knotted skein" are descriptive and unique. Author's note is informative, telling me something I didn't know, which is that Mary was rumored to be a vampiress and that her body disappeared from the morgue. Good write!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thanks for an exemplary review, as always, BP. I really appreciate it!
Comment from victor 66
The poem makes me wonder if 'Jack' just stopped, just died or just ran into another predator. The poem flows very well; to the point where I read faster the deeper I got into it. I also appreciate your information in the Author's notes. Fascinating. I'm also glad you don't live next door. You're kind of scary. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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The poem makes me wonder if 'Jack' just stopped, just died or just ran into another predator. The poem flows very well; to the point where I read faster the deeper I got into it. I also appreciate your information in the Author's notes. Fascinating. I'm also glad you don't live next door. You're kind of scary. Best wishes.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Hah, yeah, I am a little scary, but in a nice, serial killer sort of way. Ted Bundy was nice. Hannibal Lecture, Gary Ridgway...
Anyhow, thanks for such a wonderfully delightful review, Vic!
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Oh my gosh! Those guys are my heroes too. Go figure.
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Leering & Smiling
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Looking for your address on the internet.
Comment from faragon
You paint each scene so vividly, I could picture it in my mind as I was reading. I love the twist at the end where the hunter becomes the hunted...the offender now the victim. Excellent as always...a modern Poe!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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You paint each scene so vividly, I could picture it in my mind as I was reading. I love the twist at the end where the hunter becomes the hunted...the offender now the victim. Excellent as always...a modern Poe!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, faragon. Most appreciated!
Comment from darla1977
This is dark, creepy, and very interesting! I love it!!! Great presentation, and rhyming! Nice descriptions, so easy to visualize it as you read it! Well done!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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This is dark, creepy, and very interesting! I love it!!! Great presentation, and rhyming! Nice descriptions, so easy to visualize it as you read it! Well done!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing it for me, Darla. Much obliged!
Comment from Leineco
Pretty creepy Dean. . .as if Jack wasn't scary enough, you had to go and make him a vampire! Still out there roaming the seedier side of towns (good thing I have a "respectable" job, at least I can breath a little easier).
Nice job updating the creepy!!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Pretty creepy Dean. . .as if Jack wasn't scary enough, you had to go and make him a vampire! Still out there roaming the seedier side of towns (good thing I have a "respectable" job, at least I can breath a little easier).
Nice job updating the creepy!!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Hah ha, well, let's hope he's not still out there...somewhere.
Thanks so much for the excellent review, Leineco. It's appreciated!
Comment from ravenblack
Ahh, so that's how Jack came to hid end. A perfect mash- up, the transition from falling asleep to waking up bound seamless. Have you read Anno Dracula?
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Ahh, so that's how Jack came to hid end. A perfect mash- up, the transition from falling asleep to waking up bound seamless. Have you read Anno Dracula?
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, RB, and no, I haven't read that one. I'll be sure to look it up...
Comment from Petriesan
sometimes, it is the evil of man's past that intrigues us more
cannot copy and paste the way you did this, so the last stanza dropped in very well, I especially liked its first phrase
nicely done
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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sometimes, it is the evil of man's past that intrigues us more
cannot copy and paste the way you did this, so the last stanza dropped in very well, I especially liked its first phrase
nicely done
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, Petriesan. Yes, all of the poems in the pictapoem© series are unable to be copied. It's just the way they're formatted, sorry 'bout that!
Thanks so much again!
Comment from Alan K Pease
I think you have added a great deal to the story beyond the redoubts of Poe and Arthur Conan Doyles' Sherlock Homes characters. A ruby lipped Vanpire was she.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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I think you have added a great deal to the story beyond the redoubts of Poe and Arthur Conan Doyles' Sherlock Homes characters. A ruby lipped Vanpire was she.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Hah, thanks a bunch, Alan. Much obliged!
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. Okay this way seriousl scary and chilling and ell...fun. But, then i have my odd ways. It is so Hitchcock...King.. do you slepp at night, do you...should you
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Hello. Okay this way seriousl scary and chilling and ell...fun. But, then i have my odd ways. It is so Hitchcock...King.. do you slepp at night, do you...should you
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Hah ha, thanks, padumachitta. I appreciate the very kind review.
Yes...I sleep like a baby...for about two hours a night, heh-heh.
