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Words to pass on to my children

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Comment from Tomes Johnston
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This is a very apt and fitting piece of writing from the author in this post. This sad and brutal story is one that we hear far too often in this world. These evil men need to be found and taken out of society so we can rest easier in our beds. I hope nobody I know ever has to face anything like this. Good job.

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Yes Tomes, it is happening far too often. Thanks for the encouragement. I will keep exposing the perpetrators every chance I get. Mary
reply by Tomes Johnston on 22-Feb-2014
    Good on you.
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Quite a sad piece, Jackarrie. I loved the rhyme, rhythm and flow of it. Unfortunately, rape victims are often times treated like criminals themselves, being asked questions like, "What were you wearing?", or, "Did you do anything to provoke your attacker?" Really?! The last time I checked, this was a free country, and no one should have the right to violate someone's person, regardless of the circumstances.

Nicely done, I just hope the Godmother followed through on the request, whatever it was...

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 Comment Written 22-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Hi Dean, I am pleased you like the poem, it is something that I feel so strong about. The young boys and girls in Orphanages subjected to horrible abuse. It does need to be highlighted and if I can create awareness I am happy.

    Mary
reply by Dean Kuch on 22-Feb-2014
    You're very welcome, Mary...
Comment from James Dooney
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I like the rhythm and rhyme that you show here. It fits well and shows nice complexity underlying a simple message in your work. Good job. I hope to read more.

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 Comment Written 22-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Thanks James for your kind comments on my poem. I appreciate it. Mary