Scribed Relief
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Inspire Me"Poetry about poetry
23 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Yes, I think both! I admired your use of alliteration and the "bleed" hyperbole to intensify the feelings. The "pen/well" imagery is quite evocative, and the artwork is striking. Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
  |
Yes, I think both! I admired your use of alliteration and the "bleed" hyperbole to intensify the feelings. The "pen/well" imagery is quite evocative, and the artwork is striking. Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
Thank you, Joan!
Comment from DonandVicki
I think both as well, you certainly have created art with words and you have certainly talked to me with your poem. I sense a certain sensual feel to the Free verse. I'm glad you did not use punctuation as it frees the reader up. Don and Vicki
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
|
I think both as well, you certainly have created art with words and you have certainly talked to me with your poem. I sense a certain sensual feel to the Free verse. I'm glad you did not use punctuation as it frees the reader up. Don and Vicki
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
I thank you so much for stopping in!
Comment from Kingsland
This is an excellent piece of poetic artistry. The picture is quite colorful and relates to the message quite well. I enjoyed reading this well written piece of poetic artistry... John
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
|
This is an excellent piece of poetic artistry. The picture is quite colorful and relates to the message quite well. I enjoyed reading this well written piece of poetic artistry... John
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
Nice to hear from you,John.
Comment from Helvi2
Inspire me is just what you did with this gorgeous poem. My new poem "Creative Whispers" was inspired by the elegant words of your poem. I can't express myself nearly as well as you, but I am thankful for the lovely inspiration. YOU have such depth in the words you write.
Love Every Verse in this poem My Friend!
:o) Helvi
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
 |
Inspire me is just what you did with this gorgeous poem. My new poem "Creative Whispers" was inspired by the elegant words of your poem. I can't express myself nearly as well as you, but I am thankful for the lovely inspiration. YOU have such depth in the words you write.
Love Every Verse in this poem My Friend!
:o) Helvi
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
you rock sister! Love you...I gotta go see your poem now!
Comment from Spitfire
I can connect with this. A poem should be more than just words and images. It should prick the skin and dip into a reader's heart. If the poet feels it, the reader should too.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
|
I can connect with this. A poem should be more than just words and images. It should prick the skin and dip into a reader's heart. If the poet feels it, the reader should too.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
you GOT IT! Thank you so much!
Comment from adewpearl
Gorgeous presentation of your poem
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
good alliteration in succulence saturates
strong verb choices add intensity of emotion
I like the imperative statements in this invitation to passionate love
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
|
Gorgeous presentation of your poem
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
good alliteration in succulence saturates
strong verb choices add intensity of emotion
I like the imperative statements in this invitation to passionate love
Brooke
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
Thank you!
Comment from Gungalo
Dip
into my heart
Cause my mind
to bleed
in raw Truth
Prick
the skin of my soul
then beseech
for more
Offhand I'd say that you are already drawn girl. This is a wonderful write. Love the phrase "Prick the skin of my soul".
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
|
Dip
into my heart
Cause my mind
to bleed
in raw Truth
Prick
the skin of my soul
then beseech
for more
Offhand I'd say that you are already drawn girl. This is a wonderful write. Love the phrase "Prick the skin of my soul".
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
Thank you my poetic friend!
-
Smile.
Comment from Patti R.
Hey this is very cool! The presentation is beautiful and I like the way you've laid out the words and phrases of your poem. May I suggest, replacing the word 'drench/drenched' with something else as it is almost conspicuous in its repetition in such a short piece. (although it is a fabulous word!). Also second last line, I would add 'me' after beseech.
Hm, the Great Poet (is he/she related to the Great Pumpkin?!), or your Muse - I say your Muse is teasing you into writing more.
Patti
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
|
Hey this is very cool! The presentation is beautiful and I like the way you've laid out the words and phrases of your poem. May I suggest, replacing the word 'drench/drenched' with something else as it is almost conspicuous in its repetition in such a short piece. (although it is a fabulous word!). Also second last line, I would add 'me' after beseech.
Hm, the Great Poet (is he/she related to the Great Pumpkin?!), or your Muse - I say your Muse is teasing you into writing more.
Patti
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
Did I use drench twice? That's a pet peeve. lol
I posted this fast after composing.I appreciate your suggestion!
-
OOOH I am SO glad you pointed that out. I wanted to say "quench" in that spot! whooohoo. Thank you. It is now edited.
-
You're welcome!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Jewel, This has such lovely images flowing through this piece popping up in my mind. A soft and yet seductive piece - I've missed your writing and enjoyed this one. A lovely expressive work, well penned.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
|
Dear Jewel, This has such lovely images flowing through this piece popping up in my mind. A soft and yet seductive piece - I've missed your writing and enjoyed this one. A lovely expressive work, well penned.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
thank you Maureen. You are such a blessing.
-
You are too:)
x
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
If you are dipping and drawing, that sounds like masterful artistic calling to me, although these words you paint are masterful as well. Beautiful, Jewell
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
|
If you are dipping and drawing, that sounds like masterful artistic calling to me, although these words you paint are masterful as well. Beautiful, Jewell
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
-
thanks darlin!
