The Animal Doctor
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Unclaim My Heart"Love Among the Thorns
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Comment from Schalk Jacobs
Firstly I have to apologise for missing your posts in the interim. Due to medical and other obligations I have been pre-occupied with other issues in my life. I am thus catching up.
Secondly, this chapter follows excellently from the previous ones and continues with the threat that Margaret poses to the Daniels household. Excellent writing, my friend.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Firstly I have to apologise for missing your posts in the interim. Due to medical and other obligations I have been pre-occupied with other issues in my life. I am thus catching up.
Secondly, this chapter follows excellently from the previous ones and continues with the threat that Margaret poses to the Daniels household. Excellent writing, my friend.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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I really love the fact that you've taken such an interest in this book. I hope you're not disappointed with the end chapter.
Comment from chasennov
The Animal Doctor 'Unclaim My Heart.' I found chapter fifteen very constructive, as well as descriptive. The story reads well. Good job.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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The Animal Doctor 'Unclaim My Heart.' I found chapter fifteen very constructive, as well as descriptive. The story reads well. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from emjaihammond
I'm so excited to get into this story again. I've had to spend a little time away, at least unable to get on as often. I've always liked the way you write the chapters and the characters remain very interesting. It is easy to get lost in the story, always a good sign for me when reading.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I'm so excited to get into this story again. I've had to spend a little time away, at least unable to get on as often. I've always liked the way you write the chapters and the characters remain very interesting. It is easy to get lost in the story, always a good sign for me when reading.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for saying that. I'm so glad I've written something you really enjoy.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I enjoyed the read, Amahra. It drew me in right
away and held my interest thoughout.
Margaret's not a character to be trusted, it seems - a scheming woman - It will be interesting to see whether
Nath falls victim.
Your welcome, darlin' - You're
stood a radient - radiant
Margaret
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I enjoyed the read, Amahra. It drew me in right
away and held my interest thoughout.
Margaret's not a character to be trusted, it seems - a scheming woman - It will be interesting to see whether
Nath falls victim.
Your welcome, darlin' - You're
stood a radient - radiant
Margaret
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you Margaret. I missed those errors. I corrected them.
Comment from comanalbert
Your story is more complicated than mine and surely more elaborated. It will make for a nice saga, if that is your plan.
I am glad I've found you!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Your story is more complicated than mine and surely more elaborated. It will make for a nice saga, if that is your plan.
I am glad I've found you!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this fine review. I am so flatter that you liked it. And so grateful for the six star rating.
Comment from Barbara Anne
I am new to this novel but was instantly caught up in it. The easiness of the domestic situations overriding the hidden stresses of the main character are well written and very intriguing. I like the description of the very weighty dog, it adds just a hint of humour. A classic love triangle with just the right angles. Already I am on Grace's side!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I am new to this novel but was instantly caught up in it. The easiness of the domestic situations overriding the hidden stresses of the main character are well written and very intriguing. I like the description of the very weighty dog, it adds just a hint of humour. A classic love triangle with just the right angles. Already I am on Grace's side!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Barbara Anne. You have captured the essence of this plot. I'm so glad you liked it. I didn't intend the humor, it just came out like that.
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You're welcome
Comment from Liandra
Reading your story is like watching a movie, you describe everything so perfectly.
The sentence - and Chester stood over in the far corner farting and eating pork sausages and jam smeared biscuit's, completed the picture. Thanks for sharing.
Liandra
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Reading your story is like watching a movie, you describe everything so perfectly.
The sentence - and Chester stood over in the far corner farting and eating pork sausages and jam smeared biscuit's, completed the picture. Thanks for sharing.
Liandra
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Wow, thank you so much, Liandra for the fine review and for the wonderful stars. I'm glad you liked it.
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You're very welcome
Liandra :)
Comment from abbasjoy
I can see, to every happy marriage, there is always a schemer waiting to break it up. Margaret is the one, and if Nate is not careful, she'll do just that.
Usually the unsuspecting wife is the last to know of the goings on. In this case, Grace is there thanking her lucky stars, not knowing of the 'fox that is waiting to enter the hen house,' so to speak.
The question is, whether Nate will succumb to Margaret's charm and break up his lovely little family?
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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I can see, to every happy marriage, there is always a schemer waiting to break it up. Margaret is the one, and if Nate is not careful, she'll do just that.
Usually the unsuspecting wife is the last to know of the goings on. In this case, Grace is there thanking her lucky stars, not knowing of the 'fox that is waiting to enter the hen house,' so to speak.
The question is, whether Nate will succumb to Margaret's charm and break up his lovely little family?
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Wow, thank you. You really got swiped up in the plot. I'm flattered. I'm so pleased to have you has a reviewer.
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Actually, I have to go back and read some of the previous chapters to get some background.
Loved this post.
Comment from Katzintx
The flow of the story is smooth. the unfamiliar reader (me) is quickly able to follow the scene without difficulty. I like the details with description of characters. Katz
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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The flow of the story is smooth. the unfamiliar reader (me) is quickly able to follow the scene without difficulty. I like the details with description of characters. Katz
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Katzintx.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Consider:
"While still in his heart, she scared him to death."
Break this up..for ex:
"As he hurried up the staircase, he squinted at the sight of the thick white slime. With a thumb and index finger, he held the shirt away from his body. It was as if the spit-up was acid eating through to his skin."
Add little details=increases reader interest, for ex:
"On a long table lay platters of scrambled eggs, bacon, sausage, and a large bowl of spiced apple sauce. Seemingly placed beside it as a culinary counterpoint, a small bowl of grape jam idled beside a white wicker basket. Peaking out over the rim from beneath a cotton cooler, were a dozen scratch biscuits soaked with sweet home-made butter."
See what you can do with the rest of the piece.
Regards:
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Consider:
"While still in his heart, she scared him to death."
Break this up..for ex:
"As he hurried up the staircase, he squinted at the sight of the thick white slime. With a thumb and index finger, he held the shirt away from his body. It was as if the spit-up was acid eating through to his skin."
Add little details=increases reader interest, for ex:
"On a long table lay platters of scrambled eggs, bacon, sausage, and a large bowl of spiced apple sauce. Seemingly placed beside it as a culinary counterpoint, a small bowl of grape jam idled beside a white wicker basket. Peaking out over the rim from beneath a cotton cooler, were a dozen scratch biscuits soaked with sweet home-made butter."
See what you can do with the rest of the piece.
Regards:
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you Stephen. I will look it over and see what I can do. Thank you for your suggestions.
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Dear Amahra: So nice to hear from you again. Well deserved.Just posted 'Time For Love?' Thanks.
XXOO Steve C
