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I'm pretty sure Jesus' son would not be killing people off because of overpopulation lol sounds like a rant from an absolute lunatic who takes over human thought due to an apocalyptic future



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Dr. Smrkovsky, I have spent some time tonight in the reading of your post - multiple times. I am not able to discover much merit in it. I have awarded three stars because I believe there is effort here. I cannot rate it higher, as there is no rhyme, no rhythm, no discernible message or theme, and it is laden with errors of punctuation and convoluted concepts. Your title of 'Slam Poet of Laureate' seems a nonsense phrase.





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Hi,Richard,
"Expanding My Horizon" excellent free verse poetry primarily because of its fantastic figurative language and and imagery (her soul of sullen shame. It has good flow and excellent unconventional structure. It is marred by grammar problems. See note below.
Preston
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reckoning/reckon
thrust/trust?
command/commanded
As owrite?
Thy bleed/Thou bled not/not be
Let,all/Let all
woman's/women



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Hi, Richard,
In my opinion "Prologue 2 Disturbing Thoughts" is excellent free verse because of the amount of figurative language which some what slows down the flow as the reader seeks to understand it. It has good unconventional structure. There are a few minor problems listed in the notes below.
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ferviously/feverously solution's/solutions Satan's'/Satan's
AA/A Whom/Who
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This is so gory and I love every graphic detail that's poured through this entire chapter. You were so bold and direct but playful at the same time



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Well I am glad you got all this down before you died. It is a stark warning to all would be addicts and it is very kind of you to take the time to send out warnings. As a self improvement poem it should work. Just a poem thank goodness but reading your author notes there is a lot of it going on out there. Regards Dorothy



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Hi,Richard,
"Expanding My Horizon" excellent free verse poetry primarily because of its fantastic figurative language and and imagery (her soul of sullen shame. It has good flow and excellent unconventional structure. It is marred by grammar problems. See note below.
Preston
Note
reckoning/reckon
thrust/trust?
command/commanded
As owrite?
Thy bleed/Thou bled not/not be
Let,all/Let all
woman's/women

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'Painting Sculptures with YOUR'Planet Janet!''Shattered is thy Planet of Earth!'Sir Alexander!''Surrender.'The Abduction of the Pooh!'The Gift of Warmth.''Visceral Beauty.***!Humble Stew!******'The Purification of Christ ******((((((((((Vigilant}}}}}}}}}******* Doulble Dose of Me!**************Mittens!*******************Lunar Ellipse?****************A New Age.*****************Blurred Lines.***************Choices***********Flowering Love from Above!**********Heaven***********How Blue are You?********Almost An Angel**********Although.**********Bleeding Red!!!!**********Door to Your Dreams**********Heart on a Vine**********INTRODUCTION**********J.J.**2003 and J.J. 2014************Jason's Wish**********LIFE**********The Elusive of ME!!*********The Sun Sets in Heaven**********To All Whom Dream>*********To Be the Very Best!*********A Mothers Love! C. 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I'm pretty sure Jesus' son would not be killing people off because of overpopulation lol sounds like a rant from an absolute lunatic who takes over human thought due to an apocalyptic future



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Dr. Smrkovsky, I have spent some time tonight in the reading of your post - multiple times. I am not able to discover much merit in it. I have awarded three stars because I believe there is effort here. I cannot rate it higher, as there is no rhyme, no rhythm, no discernible message or theme, and it is laden with errors of punctuation and convoluted concepts. Your title of 'Slam Poet of Laureate' seems a nonsense phrase.





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Hi,Richard,
"Expanding My Horizon" excellent free verse poetry primarily because of its fantastic figurative language and and imagery (her soul of sullen shame. It has good flow and excellent unconventional structure. It is marred by grammar problems. See note below.
Preston
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reckoning/reckon
thrust/trust?
command/commanded
As owrite?
Thy bleed/Thou bled not/not be
Let,all/Let all
woman's/women



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Hi, Richard,
In my opinion "Prologue 2 Disturbing Thoughts" is excellent free verse because of the amount of figurative language which some what slows down the flow as the reader seeks to understand it. It has good unconventional structure. There are a few minor problems listed in the notes below.
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ferviously/feverously solution's/solutions Satan's'/Satan's
AA/A Whom/Who
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This is so gory and I love every graphic detail that's poured through this entire chapter. You were so bold and direct but playful at the same time



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Well I am glad you got all this down before you died. It is a stark warning to all would be addicts and it is very kind of you to take the time to send out warnings. As a self improvement poem it should work. Just a poem thank goodness but reading your author notes there is a lot of it going on out there. Regards Dorothy



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Comment from Angels27

Excellent

Extremely profound thoughts on life and living. Your writing makes we want to sit back and ponder. There is positivity, faith, hope, determination. Loved the read.

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Thanks Angels27.
Follow me and learn....
Follow me and my gifts you see....
And I Will amaze you and all...
"For Yes!"
I may be no "Jesus' but tested,
bested, requested, to do...
Exactly...
In living form...
What He, would want you and me...
To do.
Thanks,
24.