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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Winter's Concubine"
Free Verse Poetry

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Comment from RYME4U
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Very clever depiction of Winter.The narrative of the poem is well done and the language is realistic. Your free verse style fits well with your words. Great job

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much. Excellent encouraging review! mikey
Comment from christianpowers
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Great imagery, and the personification of Winter as a lecherous perv was definitely a different take for the contest.

I loved the presentation, too, with the pic and the black and white lettering.

Good luck in the contest.

Christian

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
    Glad you liked it. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
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This is creative and original, with a rather steamy personification of Winter as something of a lecher. The poem is well done. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much. Most pleased that you enjoyed it, mikey
Comment from rouskin
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Excellent artwork and vivid imagery throughout the poem.Nice contest entry I wish you all the best in your contest. Really well done

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much. Appreciate the positive words, mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Terrrrific job, Mikey! You've nailed the idea of personification perfectly.... the wind can be pretty nasty, and now I know why! LOL!

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much. I don't do well in contests, but I will cross my fingers! I certainly will be happy to accept this review as my prize though. smiles
reply by Phyllis Stewart on 02-Feb-2014
    Well, I just voted for you and now you are in first place, but it just started, so that may well change.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Thank you! I think I will take a picture of it and retire. Hahaha. It is getting to me already. I am looking at my cat like I think I am better than him. He doesn't agree.
reply by Phyllis Stewart on 02-Feb-2014
    LOL! Cats all think that about us. :)
Comment from His Grayness
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DEAR AUTHOR: This is a truly delightful and very creative work with perfect packaging and delivery and gripping message flow. All around a great work deserving praise.HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
    Thank you so very much. I am delighted you enjoyed this. Wonderful encouraging words, mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
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The best by far of the bunch. This is the brst piece using personification that i have ever read. Winter is a hhorrible abusive cad!!! This has my vote. If it doesn't win, something is wrong. NG

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
    Wow. What an encouraging review. I will take this as my prize win or lose. Thank you so very much! mikey
Comment from Fandoodle
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Everything sounded good until you threw in that last line. Concubine after all the descriptions of an icy bitch? It just didn't seem to fit with the rest but thanks for sharing it.

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 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Must not have been clear all the way through it seems. Winter is teasing and harassing the tree. Blowing up its branches, covering it with snow etc. The tree is the concubine to winter. Thanks for the input. Not sure how to fix it if it is that far off the mark.
Comment from dancerwriter
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How amazing is this to present Winter as a lover or concubine.The details of the first two verses are lovely and revealing in their description, and the mood of the possessor is triumphant. Very unusual and I like all of it. I have never seen a tree look so feminine, but alone. Lesley.J.Mooney. (Dancerwriter)

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 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much. What a thoughtful and insightful review. I am delighted that you enjoyed it! mikey
reply by dancerwriter on 03-Feb-2014

    For you, a man with so much capabilities to enjoy my review, I am honoured. Lesley(Dancerwriter)