Marillion Rocks Pandora's Box
The box is cracked29 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
I don't want to get in a war because I don't care. I love men and women too So before we get all out of sorts just know we are all fantastic poetic cohorts. Do not be averse ...stop before it gets verse and verse....say this with a German accent.... :o)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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I don't want to get in a war because I don't care. I love men and women too So before we get all out of sorts just know we are all fantastic poetic cohorts. Do not be averse ...stop before it gets verse and verse....say this with a German accent.... :o)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Hi Jenny. No real war here, just a few people transferring their pasts onto me...and I'm not talking about the ladies who are posting the ripostes. The misunderstandings between men and women, or the way they view things, has been an issue since time immemorial. It's been fun, and I have several poems good to go, but I may hold off until another time when we feel like the site needs a little pep in its step again. I have a lot of other topics I'd like to cover. Thanks.
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You are such a good poet . I am excited to see what else you have to offer :o)
Comment from A Jesterstear
Another gem my friend. there is a good chance you've broken the hinges and the box will never close again. Favourite lines...
...For naughty boys are pleasing toys
until you deign to make us slaves.
Keep it up... no pun intended... AJ.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Another gem my friend. there is a good chance you've broken the hinges and the box will never close again. Favourite lines...
...For naughty boys are pleasing toys
until you deign to make us slaves.
Keep it up... no pun intended... AJ.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Nice innuendo-laced review, AJ. Thanks so much!!!
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good internal rhyming. Good description and alliteration. The photo fits the piece perfectly. The message is clear and contains no errors. Good work.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good internal rhyming. Good description and alliteration. The photo fits the piece perfectly. The message is clear and contains no errors. Good work.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, RR.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is hilarious Byron dear, but I guess there is much truth what you say. Love your form, the poetry that is. I hope that your threats to cease and desist fire are simply you shooting blanks because there is so much more, so very much more ground to cover.
You are inspiring,
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This is hilarious Byron dear, but I guess there is much truth what you say. Love your form, the poetry that is. I hope that your threats to cease and desist fire are simply you shooting blanks because there is so much more, so very much more ground to cover.
You are inspiring,
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Gloria! Oh, I could go on and on and on...as I'm sure you can. I appreciate it, and you're equally inspiring, m'lady.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bravo! Love it! Makes perfect sense... and I believe it's largely true. Most women want everything and are never satisfied. As one of their kind, I've spent plenty of time behind your enemy's lines, hearing what they say is wrong with their husbands, putting them down to the point you wonder why they married the poor fools. Frankly, I have little respect for women in general..bunch of would-be princesses that want it both ways and expect YOU to provide it. About time they were told to their overly made-up faces! :)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Bravo! Love it! Makes perfect sense... and I believe it's largely true. Most women want everything and are never satisfied. As one of their kind, I've spent plenty of time behind your enemy's lines, hearing what they say is wrong with their husbands, putting them down to the point you wonder why they married the poor fools. Frankly, I have little respect for women in general..bunch of would-be princesses that want it both ways and expect YOU to provide it. About time they were told to their overly made-up faces! :)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Phyllis. Unfortunately, I know many women who were so easily taken in, and wouldn't listen to a man who knew what he was talking about (me) when he warned them exactly what was happening. It wasn't satisfying being right. As always, I appreciate your perspective, my friend.
Comment from hobopoet
One of the best so far. That last line is frocking brilliant, by the way.
Good job, my friend. No suggestions that I can see; you nailed (heh) this one.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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One of the best so far. That last line is frocking brilliant, by the way.
Good job, my friend. No suggestions that I can see; you nailed (heh) this one.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks, brother. To be honest, I'm getting a little tired of it, and I think the Muse wants to move on to more important things. I think your sonnet made me want to express myself in a different way. I appreciate it.
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Always room for more important things. And hey, a rogue won't document his every conquest, will he? Hell, he probably won't even remember half of them.
Good luck, whatever you decide to do. :)
Comment from rama devi
As usual, a masterful write with superb musicality, well timed internal rhymes, awesome artistic alliteration, flawless meter, effective innuendo (well effective on some level, anyway! LOL) and tons of WIT!
In terms of phonetics, I especially enjoyed the first and second stanza read aloud:
Pandora's Box has cracked its locks
A little more with each retort,
And I admit, with wicked wit,
To roguery, my sordid sport.
The honesty you glean from me
May shock, disgruntle, or disgust,
But realize, through widened eyes,
The impetus behind my thrust.
Brilliant:
So I inspect your intellect
To craft the rogue your need creates.
HA HA HA-
And well beyond your cell phone range.
Well voiced:
Mistakes beget the deep regret
Of falling to my dulcet tone;
Funny twist from box to bin:
The ills within Pandora's bin
Funny closing twist as well:
For I seduced Pandora, too.
I'd give a six if I had one for the clever crafting, in spite of being a 'strong' woman.
Winks,
rd
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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As usual, a masterful write with superb musicality, well timed internal rhymes, awesome artistic alliteration, flawless meter, effective innuendo (well effective on some level, anyway! LOL) and tons of WIT!
In terms of phonetics, I especially enjoyed the first and second stanza read aloud:
Pandora's Box has cracked its locks
A little more with each retort,
And I admit, with wicked wit,
To roguery, my sordid sport.
The honesty you glean from me
May shock, disgruntle, or disgust,
But realize, through widened eyes,
The impetus behind my thrust.
Brilliant:
So I inspect your intellect
To craft the rogue your need creates.
HA HA HA-
And well beyond your cell phone range.
Well voiced:
Mistakes beget the deep regret
Of falling to my dulcet tone;
Funny twist from box to bin:
The ills within Pandora's bin
Funny closing twist as well:
For I seduced Pandora, too.
I'd give a six if I had one for the clever crafting, in spite of being a 'strong' woman.
Winks,
rd
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Yes, you are, Rama dear, and I truly do love strong women who WILL put a rogue like this in his place. I think it's about time to get back to the real again, but I appreciate your wonderful review. Have a great weekend!
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Ah, but your wit is bringing out all the witty women on site and I'm enjoying it! I hope none of them think this is your actual style, as I know better. That's part of what makes your rogue 'digestible'- (no pun intended).
Have a great weekend too.
Warm hugs,
rd
Comment from pipersfancy
Not much satire I find in this one, David. Hits the truth on many levels, and your alter ego has begun to tread on painful ground left over from my own 3 years of life with a true rogue. Obviously, I invited the devil in. And, somehow I soothed myself into accepting that it was only right that I should support my man while he sorted through his painful past, providing him with free room and board and my bed, so privileged was I that he had entered my life. It wasn't until I was contacted by a financial company out on the east coast that I knew for certain how badly I was being played - he had applied for a loan to purchase a home with one of his girlfriends and my name came up on the credit check. I know! I know! I should have known better! He was the proverbial 'sailor with a girl in every port' (literally... he is a Navy man) and perhaps my spidey senses should have tingled a little sooner... or (more likely) maybe I should have listened to them sooner... whatever. But, the locks on the door were changed that day 2 years ago, and other than an email confession (no apology!) from him... I have not heard since. Good riddance!
So, it is with troubled heart that I must bid your rogue adieu!
Christina
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Not much satire I find in this one, David. Hits the truth on many levels, and your alter ego has begun to tread on painful ground left over from my own 3 years of life with a true rogue. Obviously, I invited the devil in. And, somehow I soothed myself into accepting that it was only right that I should support my man while he sorted through his painful past, providing him with free room and board and my bed, so privileged was I that he had entered my life. It wasn't until I was contacted by a financial company out on the east coast that I knew for certain how badly I was being played - he had applied for a loan to purchase a home with one of his girlfriends and my name came up on the credit check. I know! I know! I should have known better! He was the proverbial 'sailor with a girl in every port' (literally... he is a Navy man) and perhaps my spidey senses should have tingled a little sooner... or (more likely) maybe I should have listened to them sooner... whatever. But, the locks on the door were changed that day 2 years ago, and other than an email confession (no apology!) from him... I have not heard since. Good riddance!
So, it is with troubled heart that I must bid your rogue adieu!
Christina
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Actually, it's funny you bring that up, Christina, because this "character" was inspired by a college professor I had to investigate while doing work for the UNC system. He was sleeping with grad students, using his position and his charm to woo them, and they didn't know that they were one of many. Sorry to hit a nerve with this one. It's one I wrote early in the "game", and posted it because it was different than so many of the responses I was getting, which were more or less the same thing, albeit well done. I was about to move on earlier this week, but the responses kept coming, so I continued on. I actually have five more ready to go, and get behind because by the time I post one, I've got a bunch more replies out there. It's been fun, but I don't want to be the one some of the ladies "transfer" their past hurts to. I've known too many "real" women harmed by "real" rogues, rather than these tongue-in-cheek commentaries. There IS a fine line between the real and the imagined.
Sorry that happened to you, my friend.
David
Comment from nancy_e_davis
The ills within Pandora's bin
Should smite me for disgracing you,
But don't depend upon my end,
For I seduced Pandora, too.
I don't know about that! Pandora's wrath might be devastating!
This is too funny Rogue. You are indeed a rapscallion and a rake. Pitty the poor women who come in contact with you!
:-) Nancy
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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The ills within Pandora's bin
Should smite me for disgracing you,
But don't depend upon my end,
For I seduced Pandora, too.
I don't know about that! Pandora's wrath might be devastating!
This is too funny Rogue. You are indeed a rapscallion and a rake. Pitty the poor women who come in contact with you!
:-) Nancy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Nancy. Yes, I know the whole Hell hath no fury thing. ;)
I appreciate it. Have a great weekend.
David
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Is it Marillion rocking Pandora's box or the Rogue, his alter ego? Your title confuses. As long as you merely rock the box you are safe - open it and you are in trouble. Even M or R are not impervious to the contents of her box - or to be correct her 'jar' - in Greek mythology there is no mention of a box - it's a jar. But be warned whatever - you could be in dire danger. 'I only serve what you deserve' - that does not sound like the words of The Rogue or any rogue - they are totally ruthless. I detect a soft spot within the psyche - yours or yours LOL. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Is it Marillion rocking Pandora's box or the Rogue, his alter ego? Your title confuses. As long as you merely rock the box you are safe - open it and you are in trouble. Even M or R are not impervious to the contents of her box - or to be correct her 'jar' - in Greek mythology there is no mention of a box - it's a jar. But be warned whatever - you could be in dire danger. 'I only serve what you deserve' - that does not sound like the words of The Rogue or any rogue - they are totally ruthless. I detect a soft spot within the psyche - yours or yours LOL. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Dorothy. I only used Marillion because that's who the Rogue is posting under...and it's in perfect meter that way. If the term were Pandora's Jar, I could easily have used that, too. :) No trouble here, though. The rogue doesn't stick around long enough to meet with such trouble. He's already on to the next.
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So he is a coward as well a a rogue - is there no end to this man's treachery. Stop him using your name. LOL Dorothy
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Of course he is, silly! Rogues ARE cowards, and liars. I'm just enjoying the game of watching the hens all lining up to take him down...when they were already taken down.
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You really are pushing your luck! I see you floundering - those little dots ... you showed you had an afterthought - that you are not sure are you!!! Your pause was too long - 3 little dots gave you away. You are on rocky ground my friend. D
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No, an ellipsis is just a pregnant pause, not an afterthought, Madame Freud. ;-)
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And what is a pregnant pause but a sign of uncertainty Mr Cleverclogs!!!!
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It's for the recipient to absorb. Sort of a "wait for it" moment.
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Do you ever give up? I have a feeling not ... A sort of, a sort of - Oh dear, even that has an air of uncertainty about it. Excuses, excuses, tut! (Note the ellipsis - just 3 pretty little dots nothing more) D
