Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

The visual imagery as energizing. The photo is nice. And that is the life of a lion. Good poetic form. And you met the syllable count. Great poem.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thank you Alicia.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

I adore cats, large and small;
I've never heard a lion's roar--I have heard a tiger's growl, however;
Good audio imagery;
Good alliteration presented in a well-penned zoological poem.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thank you Margaret. Very similar roars. A lions is a bit deeper.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

A very effective 5/7/5 poem and great choice of topic.
I'd imagine that dawn at the zoo would be quite a noisy time indeed.
The image and words work well together and combine to tell of the lions mighty roar at dawn.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014

Thank you Shirley. I appreciate your comments.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

I think I would be running at a hundred miles an hour away from that mighty roar. It is a good thing it was a nearby zoo as you do hear tales of tigers and lions escaping into our habitat, so beware. Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you rod. The park rangers should warn you. I did visit the zoo later in the day.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Trischel,
"Let'er Rip" is excellent 5-7-5 poetry following the line/syllable requirements of the form with excellent figurative language and imagery (excellent alliteration(still silence shattered).
Preston

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thank you Preston, I want it to be a Haiku, but that alliteration rejects it, so it's only a 5-7-5.

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

I can hear the roar! Would not want to wake up to that sound. Good thing it was a zoo. Camping was never my thing. A little too much with nature.
An enjoyable write, as always. Be well, Smiles, Robin :)

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thank you Robin. Thanks for the input.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

Well captured here the aural impact of the King of the Jungle with flowing alliteration -one can almost 'hear' the silence before it is broken by a regal force of Nature

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thank you Zanya. So true.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Tom, Oh boy I would have been out of my sleeping bag just as quick.
Excellent format and so sorry but I did laugh....
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

"Still silence shattered 5
With the lion's mighty roar 7
It's dawn at the zoo " 5

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thanks Maureen, good! I can laugh now too?

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

A lion's roar for an alarm clock would put a fella to running, and I'm afraid that if he were there for real, he'd find only a measly meal, of poop and tennis shoes. Thanks for the cute poem and notes.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thank you Ric. now there a vision!