Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Perfect rhythm in this limerick. That ain't as easy as it looks. Talking three hours! It's a wonder he didn't damage his brain cells. LOL

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014

Thank for the giving this a look. Bill

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello Bill Schott, A fun Limerick which made me smile and laugh, so you've accomplished your goal. Of note:

Until he came down with pneumonia.

(The laugh line - that will teach 'em ...
and now his wife is in hysteria--just had
to share that - lol.)

As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014

Thank you, LB, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from Daedalia

Good

This was a good attempt. The rhyming seemed a bit forced, and I think it's the first time I've encountered a made up word (phonia) in a limerick. But the message was funny and exactly what a limerick is all about!

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you for the positive review.

Comment from MagKing

Good

A fine poem with great conceptual idea. I suspect could even win the contest if only it stuck by the rules.
The rules says 9-9-6-6-9 syllables. But that's not what you have written here. I apologize, but I must review using the rule method before anything else.

MagKing

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Cycler

Excellent

LOoved the photo and loved the poem. They matched wonderfully and this felt like a good limerick ... Livonia is in Ireland, right? Smiling ... great job

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you for the positive review.

Comment from in777wr#

Excellent

This was a well written Limerick poem. Your 9-9-6-6-9 syllable count is in good order. Your rhyming scheme is correct. I had to look up the word phonia, and found that it is one syllable. Nicely written poem that meets all requirements for this contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you for the positive review.

Comment from 4hisglory

Excellent

Well I think you made up some words here, but still a well written limerick. I don't think there is much that will stop some people from talking on there cell phones.

Blessings, LaVonne

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you for the positive review.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Extremely clever rhyming words
Excellent inflection for the limerick form so that this reads well
and you definitely left me with a laugh!
Brooke

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you, Brooke, for the kind review.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Great limerick and social commentary. Makes a person wonder what has to be said that requires constant phone conversations. You've touched upon a trend that's so common these days--it's called "phone-stuck-to-earitis."

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you for the positive review.

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

I really rate the last 3 lines, though I found then first 2 rather forced.

I'm all for fun rhymes, but where the heck is 'Livonia'? Unless I'm missing something subtle (and also my geography isn't that hot), isn't there a REAL place you could substitute?

Anyway, the limerick meter is excellent, and it is a fun read.

Good luck, Ted

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Livonia is a town in Michigan near Detroit. Thank you for the positive review.

reply by Domino 2 on 24-Jan-2014

I apologise for that. My excuse is I'm a Brit and have never visited the States. Your limerick is now much better in my eyes.

Thanks for your gracious reply. Ted.