Comment from Marillion

Exceptional

You deserve a sixer for this one, my friend, and I'm so pleased that you're writing again. The slant and near rhymes are fine because they're part of the fabric of the poem, which is weaved beautifully. My last sixer of the week!

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Wow, a six from you means a great deal to me, and your last one, good thing it is Friday and the week is almost at an end. I really appreciate this and I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from GWinterwin

Excellent

Great poem with a good picture. Your word flow is very good and rhyming excellent. Your story of a cold and harsh winter and a grieving sun of summer.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thanks so very much for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from joeakeefe

Excellent

"As detrimental winds appear" the chilling cold is what I fear. So to my bed I swiftly take or make hot toddy for to take.

I think you work is splendid. I had so much fun "visualizing" the situation that you so apt described. At the moment, my outdoor thermometer reads four degrees above zero. And the wind is coming from the northwest.

It is COLD.
joeakeefe

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Yeah I heard you. We have a wind chill of -12 this morning. Thanks so much for the little offering. I fear that chilling cold myself.

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Your kyrielle is a very good format for this poem. Natural scenes depicted in beautiful language as you have here, has been enhanced by the repeated last line. I love: beguiling winter's fingers tease. Great artwork.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thanks so much for the grand review.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is a brilliant poem with the perfect rhyme and rhythm! the imagery is exquisite! and the picture goes well with the poem!
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

I like this Kyrielle Sonnet it is written so well with great rhyme. there is no denying that it is winter, with the fab image. Very good authors notes making everything so clear.

well done Mary

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Reading he Author's notes I see that you have fulfilled all he requirements of the Kryielle sonnet.
Fastastic presentation.
Easy flow of words
alliterations
an enjoyable read

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thank you so much, I appreciate your time to read and review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I really like this lament of a " grieving sun and summer", it conjures up images of things that " were" not only in nature, but also in our day to day lives as well! The rhyming and rhythm live up to this poetic discipline, well! It flows beautifully from beginning to end. Well done with this one. Roy.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thank you so much for your grand review. I truly appreciate it.

Comment from hobopoet

Excellent

Never heard of a Kyrielle sonnet...but it's an interesting format from what I can tell by reading your poem. I like the refrain -- very cool -- and I like how the couplet at the end ties back to the beginning, which is, as your AN informs us, normal for the form.

I wonder, though: is it eight syllables, or iambic tetrameter? Yours is tetrameter, which will be eight syllables...but in true iambic verse, it's about stresses and iambs, not syllables.

Does it matter with this form?

Anyway...good imagery, good rhythm and meter. I really enjoyed this. :)

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Well the information on it says eight so probably who ever wrote that maybe doesn't care either way. I would always write it in iambic tetrameter because that's the way I write and have a hard time reading rhyming poetry that is not metered. Thanks for the great review.

reply by hobopoet on 24-Jan-2014

I'd always write it in tetrameter, too...just curious. :)

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

This was really beautiful, JL. I really love the mind painting you composed with this bit of verse. A truly wonderful work.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

OH thank you Charles. I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you for your constant support.