I'm Just Sick About It
A day in the life of Travis15 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with dishes/wishes...melted/pelted. Good description and alliteration. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message that contains no errors.
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Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with dishes/wishes...melted/pelted. Good description and alliteration. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message that contains no errors.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
Comment from Mark Valentine
Travis has it right - ya gotta gather ye snowflakes while ye may. Because I tend to read several of your poems at one sitting, I love that you throw in some occasional comic relief, a la Shakespeare, amidst your weightier stuff. And you write thsi stuff every bit as well as your more serious reflections. 87th ranked poet? I think not - I've not seen anyone better on this site.
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Travis has it right - ya gotta gather ye snowflakes while ye may. Because I tend to read several of your poems at one sitting, I love that you throw in some occasional comic relief, a la Shakespeare, amidst your weightier stuff. And you write thsi stuff every bit as well as your more serious reflections. 87th ranked poet? I think not - I've not seen anyone better on this site.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. I can feel the little guy's pain. The tone is wonderful for the subject matter. The word choice paints a vivid picture.
Barbara
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This is a wonderful poem. I can feel the little guy's pain. The tone is wonderful for the subject matter. The word choice paints a vivid picture.
Barbara
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Heh, heh...mothers can be so incredibly thoughtless at times, can't they? Opportunity lost. How many children could sympathise with your words, and lament the cruelty of the world! A lovely little story. Thank you.
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Heh, heh...mothers can be so incredibly thoughtless at times, can't they? Opportunity lost. How many children could sympathise with your words, and lament the cruelty of the world! A lovely little story. Thank you.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Sylvia Page
The snow is all fun and games for children. I think they should be allowed to go out and play so long as they are properly dressed to fight the cold. I can imagine the slushy ground after the rain. That is no fun. Anyone can be sick about it.
Cheers
Sylvia
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The snow is all fun and games for children. I think they should be allowed to go out and play so long as they are properly dressed to fight the cold. I can imagine the slushy ground after the rain. That is no fun. Anyone can be sick about it.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Jackarrie
A great humorous poem getting into the mind of a child, and the cute way he relates to his mom. I see these antics in my own grandson.
It rhymed well and was enjoyable to read. Even though I hate the snow,
Well done, Mary
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A great humorous poem getting into the mind of a child, and the cute way he relates to his mom. I see these antics in my own grandson.
It rhymed well and was enjoyable to read. Even though I hate the snow,
Well done, Mary
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from krys123
I enjoyed your home very much and with its inner limerick rhyming and exceptional imagery which was really to the forefront. Your picture complement did your poem very much and vice a versa, as the kid in your poem was written just like the child in your picture, looking for precarious. Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex/AK
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I enjoyed your home very much and with its inner limerick rhyming and exceptional imagery which was really to the forefront. Your picture complement did your poem very much and vice a versa, as the kid in your poem was written just like the child in your picture, looking for precarious. Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex/AK
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from GWHARGIS
I feel kind of bad for the kid. I will happily throw my kids out when it snows. My mother used to do it to me. Liked the visual of the woman preparing dinner and the stink eye she gives the whining kid. Nicely done.
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I feel kind of bad for the kid. I will happily throw my kids out when it snows. My mother used to do it to me. Liked the visual of the woman preparing dinner and the stink eye she gives the whining kid. Nicely done.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Ben Colder
so typical with children especially in the rules areas. Your poem sings a nice song about true feelings of a child wanting to play outside in the snow. Well done. Blessings
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so typical with children especially in the rules areas. Your poem sings a nice song about true feelings of a child wanting to play outside in the snow. Well done. Blessings
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from DionysusDeVille
Who are you telling , i'm sick of this snow too. Very humorous poem indeed and that picture really puts it all together very well
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Who are you telling , i'm sick of this snow too. Very humorous poem indeed and that picture really puts it all together very well
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
