The Project ( Pt 2)
a poem..it doesn't rhymerisate... projection..13 total reviews
Comment from in777wr#
This was a well written poem. The loss of personal identity was what I saw in this poem. The poem reads well. The last stanza stands out to me in this poem. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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This was a well written poem. The loss of personal identity was what I saw in this poem. The poem reads well. The last stanza stands out to me in this poem. Nicely written.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi there,
thanks for the cool thoughts and understanding eye.
cheers
grant
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You're welcome.
Comment from Delores J. Howard
I absolutely loved this piece, until, I read the end (the clincher, the climax). And then I said, "Whaaat?" I re-read the poem putting the "two" as "one" and that still didn't make sense to me--as in, ("I" photoshopped my essence, then I let me down by being me.)and so on with each verse. If you had left that last verse off--it would have been a perfect piece for me. Read it w/o it--isn't it wonderful?
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I absolutely loved this piece, until, I read the end (the clincher, the climax). And then I said, "Whaaat?" I re-read the poem putting the "two" as "one" and that still didn't make sense to me--as in, ("I" photoshopped my essence, then I let me down by being me.)and so on with each verse. If you had left that last verse off--it would have been a perfect piece for me. Read it w/o it--isn't it wonderful?
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi delores,
that last part isn't literal, it's more metaphorical relating to people projecting themselves..I hope that helps in the read. :D
cheers and thank you for the great review.
grant
Comment from James Dooney
Once again bloke you have done really well here. I like your styling. It free verse in way yet it gels together nicely. Good job !
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Once again bloke you have done really well here. I like your styling. It free verse in way yet it gels together nicely. Good job !
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi again James,
I like poetry to flow regardless of the format or style.
Thanks for the great thoughts!
cheers
grant
