The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "It is a Dog's Life Sometimes"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is another gritty piece of writing from the author. This is a little piece of history being recorded for posterity in this post.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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This is another gritty piece of writing from the author. This is a little piece of history being recorded for posterity in this post.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thanks mate
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My pleasure.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent anecdotes, and as always your story-telling voice is marvelous. Those are some unusual experiences you had with your students. With their problems, that must have been challenging for you. Your description of your job at Grace Brothers must have been interesting when you promoted the day's specials over the PA system. I thought at once of the BritCom that I loved, "Are You Being Served?" and the Grace Brothers Department Store. Very charming all the way through. Checking a few things, in first paragraph, different from might sound better than different to. Third paragraph "an (not a) organ concert." Don't know what I can add after the first review. judi
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Excellent anecdotes, and as always your story-telling voice is marvelous. Those are some unusual experiences you had with your students. With their problems, that must have been challenging for you. Your description of your job at Grace Brothers must have been interesting when you promoted the day's specials over the PA system. I thought at once of the BritCom that I loved, "Are You Being Served?" and the Grace Brothers Department Store. Very charming all the way through. Checking a few things, in first paragraph, different from might sound better than different to. Third paragraph "an (not a) organ concert." Don't know what I can add after the first review. judi
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks for your wonderful review as I said this is already as 4th Edit appreciate the spag pickups get to it later after the shops. Actually the Brit Grace Bros would have been more like when I worked at Penfolds in the seventies as they were all definitely of the British Grace Bros bent or the main star anyway hehe. Quite queer hehe.
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You're so welcome. I believe the "Are You Being Served?" series was in the '70s, so maybe Penfolds would have been more like Grace Brothers. judi
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading all of this.
Other times she coiuld be very pleasant to deal with. (could?)
eventually outlawed in our state, I believe. it involved treatment with, some times, barbiturates (comma after believe OR keep the period and capitalize it)
I have kept in touch with he and his Mother, (because of his, mother has a lower case 'm')
Obviously they were'nt coming across with that. (weren't)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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I enjoyed reading all of this.
Other times she coiuld be very pleasant to deal with. (could?)
eventually outlawed in our state, I believe. it involved treatment with, some times, barbiturates (comma after believe OR keep the period and capitalize it)
I have kept in touch with he and his Mother, (because of his, mother has a lower case 'm')
Obviously they were'nt coming across with that. (weren't)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks Barbara been a real problem with Spags on this one this will be a third edit. Thanks for the great review.
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Corrections have been made and some more information added.
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. It was nice to meet your people. It sounds as though you liked your work and the people you served.
Public service is a hard choice.
Do you still teach?
May you well.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Hello. It was nice to meet your people. It sounds as though you liked your work and the people you served.
Public service is a hard choice.
Do you still teach?
May you well.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Hi friend been retired on Disability as you will see in the early chapters of my book, now for 17 years. I quit teaching not all that long after we retired from our full time jobs. Thanks for coming by.
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Comment from jmdg1954
Somehow, I stumbled into this posting. I see its chapter 8 I think, so I already missed a bunch. I found your writing interesting and the story, interesting as well. I may come back for more...
Thanks for good writing making for good reading. John
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Somehow, I stumbled into this posting. I see its chapter 8 I think, so I already missed a bunch. I found your writing interesting and the story, interesting as well. I may come back for more...
Thanks for good writing making for good reading. John
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Hi this is the newly inserted Chapter 14 glad to have you along thanks for the review There are 25 chapters to my book plus a whiole lot of other Poems and so on around.
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Thanks very much I just went back in and fixed some glaring errors pointed out to me and made some kmore small additions if you care to look again.
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Corrections have been made and some more information added.
Comment from amanda98653
Hey S:)
I enjoyed reading that immensely.
Here are some suggestions to keep in mind:
1. would often listen to the students tell about problems at home or or school.
Get rid of the extra "or"
2. His wife was a real strange lady, and I some times wonder
Should be "sometimes" no gap
3. the Viral Pneumonia had also reuslted in some Gangrine and the necessary resultant amputation of one leg.
"Reuslted" should be "resulted"
4. During this time (,)I was being interviewed with the possibility
Add in comma
Hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Hey S:)
I enjoyed reading that immensely.
Here are some suggestions to keep in mind:
1. would often listen to the students tell about problems at home or or school.
Get rid of the extra "or"
2. His wife was a real strange lady, and I some times wonder
Should be "sometimes" no gap
3. the Viral Pneumonia had also reuslted in some Gangrine and the necessary resultant amputation of one leg.
"Reuslted" should be "resulted"
4. During this time (,)I was being interviewed with the possibility
Add in comma
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Wow I made a mess thanks for all the spag picking appreciate the 5 anyway hehe.
Some of the errors came from additions to the story thanks heaps.
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Hi Amanda I missed the some times but apart from that..Thanks very much I just went back in and fixed some glaring errors pointed out to me and made some more small additions if you care to look again..
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Okiedokie!
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1.As I continued teaching music
Space bar error between "I" and "continued"
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1.As I continued teaching music
Space bar error between "I" and "continued"
2. I would often listen to the students, tell about problems at home or at school
I would often listen to the student as they tell me about their problems at home or at school
3. Other times she coiuld be very pleasant to deal with.
"Coiuld" should be "could"
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Corrections have been made and some more information added.
Comment from michaelcahill
Yes, I did recognize some of this. The opening of this was new to me. The first thing that struck me was and interest in hearing some examples of the behavior that you mention. It would be most interesting to hear some of the antics of the bi polar lady. Also the deep sleep therapy, maybe a little bit on that. Especially the gentleman playing with his left hand and left leg. That I would like to hear more about and I am sure anyone that reads this would too!! By the way, I never did mention what I great title I think this has. Very clever and engaging. Good to see some more material on this. Well done, mikey
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Yes, I did recognize some of this. The opening of this was new to me. The first thing that struck me was and interest in hearing some examples of the behavior that you mention. It would be most interesting to hear some of the antics of the bi polar lady. Also the deep sleep therapy, maybe a little bit on that. Especially the gentleman playing with his left hand and left leg. That I would like to hear more about and I am sure anyone that reads this would too!! By the way, I never did mention what I great title I think this has. Very clever and engaging. Good to see some more material on this. Well done, mikey
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks mate this is a first edit of a new chapter incorporating some other chapter's stuff as well as additions full of spags too as someone pointed out Duh! Must be someone's influence what!
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Thanks very much I just went back in and fixed some glaring errors pointed out to me and made some kmore small additions if you care to look again.
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Corrections have been made and some more information added.
Comment from c_lucas
Most of my working career, I had to be self employed because of a hereditqry crippling bone disease. I would have been much happier if I started writing at an earlier age. This is very well written with a simple flow of words. Good job.
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Looking Good.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Most of my working career, I had to be self employed because of a hereditqry crippling bone disease. I would have been much happier if I started writing at an earlier age. This is very well written with a simple flow of words. Good job.
****
Looking Good.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks mate lots of spags but oh me! Please all come back yahea!
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You're welcome, Sankey. Charlie
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Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Your memoirs are so very detailed, Sankey! It is clear that you are putting much thought into your writing, so ten points for that. You have had a full and interesting life. I wonder if a few stories of 'fun' things that no doubt happened along the way would make it even more compelling? Watch those italics! and the use of inverted comas. They can be overdone quite easily.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Your memoirs are so very detailed, Sankey! It is clear that you are putting much thought into your writing, so ten points for that. You have had a full and interesting life. I wonder if a few stories of 'fun' things that no doubt happened along the way would make it even more compelling? Watch those italics! and the use of inverted comas. They can be overdone quite easily.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Ah the "expression marks huh. Yes I do have a sense of humour need to think of some funny stories and one just comes to mind as I write so will work on getting that extra review point up ok :P Haven't seen much of your stuff up in a while I think we are still fans of each other?
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We are indeed still fans! I'm not posting as frequently as I once did. Time issues...
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Hey mate looks like you and I missed a pile of spags in there oh me! Thanks for being kind hehe.
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No humour yet sorry... I just went back in and fixed some glaring errors pointed out to me and made some more small additions if you care to look again.
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Corrections have been made and some more information added.
