Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
"Culture Clash" is a truly magnificent and complex poem. I award it six virtual stars which would have been more if I had them. Its rhythm and meter are truly grand. Its figurative language and imagery are beautiful especially the alliteration and repetition ("lead by lessons learned long ago") It follows the requirements of the form.
Preston

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thanks Preston, I appreciate your comments and gladly accept a virtual six with joy.

Btw:
I hated that poem about Jesus and the Rigden King. I thought it was offensive and saw no purpose in it. The rhyming was ok. The rhythm wasn't great, but rather than trash it, I skipped it.

reply by Preston McWhorter on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you for your negative feedback. I will keep it in mind. I appreciate your not giving it a low rating.
Preston

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a powerful piece. The form enhances the poem. The word choice paints a vivid picture. The rhyming scheme is strong.
Barbara

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you Barbara.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Tom, even before looking at the technical side of this work it is powerful. Makes me stop and pause at such devastation man imposed on such a proud people. Shame should fall as our tears. Excellent form and far beyond my expert level. But I did enjoy how you penned it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thanks again Maureen for yor wonderful review and comments.