Farewell
The end of depression37 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
Amen to dispelling depression Farewell.... despair .i love this poem but Farewell means fare well...so adieu despair....? Or be gone despair...never to reappear. I love the rondeau form. Beautiful imagery
God bless
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Amen to dispelling depression Farewell.... despair .i love this poem but Farewell means fare well...so adieu despair....? Or be gone despair...never to reappear. I love the rondeau form. Beautiful imagery
God bless
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Well actually farewell does indeed mean goodbye and is synonymous with adieu, goodbye, adios. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review. God Bless you as well.
Comment from Cybertron1986
One of the very few pieces that I can genuinely say is deserving of SIX stars. I LOVED the rhyme, the flow, the relativity of the unwasted choice of words. Very inspirational. A great combination of both genuine insight and creativity.
An enjoyable and motivating piece overall. I especially liked how you wrote, "Depression, drown in calm's deep sea!"
A pleasant infusion of nature and human spirit!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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One of the very few pieces that I can genuinely say is deserving of SIX stars. I LOVED the rhyme, the flow, the relativity of the unwasted choice of words. Very inspirational. A great combination of both genuine insight and creativity.
An enjoyable and motivating piece overall. I especially liked how you wrote, "Depression, drown in calm's deep sea!"
A pleasant infusion of nature and human spirit!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Awwww thank you so much for the wonderful review and that extra shiny star, your words mean a lot. I really appreciate the time you took in reading and reviewing. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from lindalcreel
Depression can be such a debilitating illness because no one really understands what those poor people go through. Giving up most of the things and people who once brought joy to their life, it offers a lonely existence, yet it is easy to fall in it's grasps. Love can help one climb out and begin anew. Thanks so much for sharing a heartfelt poem. And I do appreciate the explanation as I am not familiar with all of the types of poetry.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Depression can be such a debilitating illness because no one really understands what those poor people go through. Giving up most of the things and people who once brought joy to their life, it offers a lonely existence, yet it is easy to fall in it's grasps. Love can help one climb out and begin anew. Thanks so much for sharing a heartfelt poem. And I do appreciate the explanation as I am not familiar with all of the types of poetry.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Yes it can be. It's very hard to break away from, it really grabs on that's for sure. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.
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It was my pleasure:)
Comment from Peter@Poole
True to form, well rhymed and metered, and enriched with alliteration. I'm sorry if this is real, but they do say write about what you know, and you've done that graphically. Peter
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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True to form, well rhymed and metered, and enriched with alliteration. I'm sorry if this is real, but they do say write about what you know, and you've done that graphically. Peter
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Well it is real. I've had a terrible time since my sister passed. She was my best friend and it has been really hard but I have a family who needs me so I must press onward. Thanks for that lovely extra star, very much appreciated as are you. Hugs and love, JL
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Women are generally better than men at moving on, and I pray that you'll receive the strength you need. The Holy Spirit is known as the Comforter, as I'm sure you know, and he sure is helping me at the moment.
Comment from Carrie Carson
Great job with this. If only it could be dismissed by command. Certainly fleeting glimpses of hope stand out during its reign.
No spag, good form and flow.
I especially like feeling the roots of peace expand and the gift of serenity. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Great job with this. If only it could be dismissed by command. Certainly fleeting glimpses of hope stand out during its reign.
No spag, good form and flow.
I especially like feeling the roots of peace expand and the gift of serenity. :) Carrie
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much for your gracious review, really appreciate you taking the time to read.
Comment from emrpoems
Written as a Rondeau. A form of poem with 15 lines of eight or ten syllables arranged in three stanzas, the first stanza is five lines (quintet), the second four lines (quatrain), and the final stanza six lines (sestet). The first part of the first line becomes the rondeau's rentrement (refrain) when it is repeated as the last line of each of the two succeeding stanzas.
Superb presentation
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Written as a Rondeau. A form of poem with 15 lines of eight or ten syllables arranged in three stanzas, the first stanza is five lines (quintet), the second four lines (quatrain), and the final stanza six lines (sestet). The first part of the first line becomes the rondeau's rentrement (refrain) when it is repeated as the last line of each of the two succeeding stanzas.
Superb presentation
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, really appreciate your time.
Comment from Marillion
Great stuff, Dawn!!! Although I do think we should form a pact to jettison the 'thee's' from our work, it actually kind of works here. Every word is perfect, I think.
My only suggestion would be to put a comma before and after "flee" in the first line.
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Great stuff, Dawn!!! Although I do think we should form a pact to jettison the 'thee's' from our work, it actually kind of works here. Every word is perfect, I think.
My only suggestion would be to put a comma before and after "flee" in the first line.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Okay, I will insert right now. I will attempt, my friend, to get rid of the thee's from now on. Can't really promise that though. But I will try.
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Ah, it's up to you. That's just my own take, and remember that I used to do the same thing. Considering our favorite and influential poets, it's no wonder we liked the archaic wording.
