The Heat is On.
The time clock tics....save the world.17 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
In reviewing your portfolio, I found that you used this artwork more than once--an appropriate choice, since it is so evocative. Your free verse matched the feeling. I admired your energetic verbs and your use of "treason". Your last two lines say it all--save all planet! Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2017
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In reviewing your portfolio, I found that you used this artwork more than once--an appropriate choice, since it is so evocative. Your free verse matched the feeling. I admired your energetic verbs and your use of "treason". Your last two lines say it all--save all planet! Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2017
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thanks Joan :) I wrote this one for our news letter where I do my volunteer work.....the summer was hot we had 40- 46 degree Celsius heatwave on average that lasted 3 weeks....the emphasis at the time was staying alive and looking after our old disabled and children.....our climate has changed in Australia a lot..hottest place on the planet at times and our storms lately are fierce and terrifying and causing serious damage...Despite evolution and other theories..I do believe Mother Nature is not happy....we cannot take and take from our precious earth and give nothing back and pollute the land seas and skies with no repercussions and yet to see regrets...yes big sighs.....yet we still continue in our folly....what man does in the name of money....hugs
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I read that last year was the hottest year in history for the planet. I did not realize that climate change has hit Australia so hard. Thank you again for focusing attention on this critical issue. More sighs- Joan
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Hi Joan was just reading this from few yrs ago now. Australia really has had a dose this year of radical weather..Broken heat records from scratch ie beginning of records here ...floods and farmers and all now wearing impact....On the other side of the world freezing temperatures and other natural disasters..mother nature is sure rebelling...tae care..sue x
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Yes, mother nature certainly seems to be rebelling. We need to heed her tantrums and protect the planet from our abuses. More sighs- Joan
Comment from crzypnter
Thank you, for this powerful and meaning full message that you convey so well in your poem. A fast paced poem that keeps your attention and every word speaks the truth. I like the last two verses the best(personally of course) Great job. This should be sent to the Global Warming Committee. With all respect August:)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Thank you, for this powerful and meaning full message that you convey so well in your poem. A fast paced poem that keeps your attention and every word speaks the truth. I like the last two verses the best(personally of course) Great job. This should be sent to the Global Warming Committee. With all respect August:)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Thanks August for your review comments and thoughts on my poem..as I said before you are quite welcome to use it....gov closed down our global warming in Australia when new govt took over....shame on them...sue
Comment from Dougspoetry
Definitely some powerful words here. No doubt humanity has done a poor job with the world God entrusted to us. Hopefully one day we will get it right. Nice work! Great picture!
God Bless!
Doug
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Definitely some powerful words here. No doubt humanity has done a poor job with the world God entrusted to us. Hopefully one day we will get it right. Nice work! Great picture!
God Bless!
Doug
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Thank you Doug for your thoughtful review..much appreciated....revelations? me thinks says "man will pollute the world" and of course we also contend with evolution...thanks again..sue
Comment from rouskin
Excellent free verse poem with attractive artwork and thought provoking message:Mother Nature won't repent
Until we do
Best of luck in your contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Excellent free verse poem with attractive artwork and thought provoking message:Mother Nature won't repent
Until we do
Best of luck in your contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for your review and too input..much appreciated..sue
Comment from lynnkah
powerful words, and truthfully said also. thank you for the honor of using my panting for this hard hitting poem. it is truly an honor
thank you
lynnkah from fan art
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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powerful words, and truthfully said also. thank you for the honor of using my panting for this hard hitting poem. it is truly an honor
thank you
lynnkah from fan art
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Dear Lynnkah..Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful work..it is our privilidge here at Fanstory.....your picture enhanced my sentiments...the very best to you...sue
Comment from hobopoet
A powerful poem with a powerful message. The last line is the one that draws my attention, though, and maybe that's the point. On the one hand, it jars because it's not in rhythm with the rest of the poem. On the other hand, because it's out of sync with everything else, it really stands out. I mean, I'm writing about it right now, which means it clearly caught my attention, right?
In any case, a good write. I enjoyed this.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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A powerful poem with a powerful message. The last line is the one that draws my attention, though, and maybe that's the point. On the one hand, it jars because it's not in rhythm with the rest of the poem. On the other hand, because it's out of sync with everything else, it really stands out. I mean, I'm writing about it right now, which means it clearly caught my attention, right?
In any case, a good write. I enjoyed this.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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thank you Hobopoet..you are absolutely right ..my line at end was to catch attention....I really appreciate your thoughtful comments..sue
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
I don't know what to say - I know the clock ticks and it will affect us but I think the world will go on a bit longer. Your last two lines are its saving grace and I breath a sigh of relief. I'll repent, OK? LOL. An interesting free verse. Good luck in the contest Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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I don't know what to say - I know the clock ticks and it will affect us but I think the world will go on a bit longer. Your last two lines are its saving grace and I breath a sigh of relief. I'll repent, OK? LOL. An interesting free verse. Good luck in the contest Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Thank you Dorothy..I appreciate your thoughtful comments..made me smile...sue
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhyming
Cull/plunder/starve - effective use of high-impact verbs to begin your imperative statements
strong social commentary - powerful and thought provoking
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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strong rhyming
Cull/plunder/starve - effective use of high-impact verbs to begin your imperative statements
strong social commentary - powerful and thought provoking
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Thank you Brooke...always appreciate your review..sue
Comment from kiwijenny
I wish I had a six for this...the earth groans....Romans 8
For we know that the whole creation has been groaning together in the pains of childbirth until now.
We need to wake up.repent
God bless
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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I wish I had a six for this...the earth groans....Romans 8
For we know that the whole creation has been groaning together in the pains of childbirth until now.
We need to wake up.repent
God bless
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Thank you Jenny for your thoughtful comments..always appreciated..sue..God Bless...sue
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with reason/treason...burning/turning. Good alliteration with tossing/turning...extreme/events...won't we. Good fast paced message that holds my attention from start to finish.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with reason/treason...burning/turning. Good alliteration with tossing/turning...extreme/events...won't we. Good fast paced message that holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review..muchly appreciated...sue
