From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "A few minutes left in forever"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from MelissaBickel
Your whole poem is beautiful, but I truly enjoy these last words..."Love and its promise is a kite on God's own tether
So there are more than a few minutes left in our forever"
Thanks for sharing these lines with us Vance
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Your whole poem is beautiful, but I truly enjoy these last words..."Love and its promise is a kite on God's own tether
So there are more than a few minutes left in our forever"
Thanks for sharing these lines with us Vance
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Dear Melissa...so wonderful to hear from you and thank you so much for your lovely and generous review! I'm so honored that you found this to be beautiful and enjoyable as it came from a dream so I guess it was a mission in a way. Blessings to you and thank you again: Vance
Comment from michaelcahill
Oh, my my!! This is just outstanding. Line after line of emotional revelation that touches the reader to the core. Goodness that last couplet is just wonderful. Classic right there. What a treat to run across this and open my weary eyes. Thank you for sharing this excellent piece! mikey
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Oh, my my!! This is just outstanding. Line after line of emotional revelation that touches the reader to the core. Goodness that last couplet is just wonderful. Classic right there. What a treat to run across this and open my weary eyes. Thank you for sharing this excellent piece! mikey
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Mikey: you made my day dear friend with such a wonderful and uplifting review. I'm so delighted that this poem had meaning and impact for you. Blessings and thanks: Vance
Comment from Glasstruth
Death is feared. Why? The unknown even with faith scares us. Love the title to this. Just begged me to read it. The ending line: "So there are more than a few minutes left in our forever" is just truly awesome. A songwriters dream line. A couple of forever thumbs up! Les
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Death is feared. Why? The unknown even with faith scares us. Love the title to this. Just begged me to read it. The ending line: "So there are more than a few minutes left in our forever" is just truly awesome. A songwriters dream line. A couple of forever thumbs up! Les
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Wow Les: thanks so very much for this wonderful, uplifting and encouraging review! From you, this is a great honor..Vance
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My pleasure :)
Comment from Petriesan
great lines: 'm grateful for both you and for God
I've kept my word and He's spared the rod
die momentarily. We kind of do this every time we sleep.
we wake to a new life every morning.
nice poem
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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great lines: 'm grateful for both you and for God
I've kept my word and He's spared the rod
die momentarily. We kind of do this every time we sleep.
we wake to a new life every morning.
nice poem
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Petriesan: thanks so much for your kind review and glad to hear from you....hope to see you back again soon! HIS GRAYNESS Vance
Comment from Sam Mendonca
This is a beautiful poem using such emotional wording of how one can love so deeply.
A small typo. :-)
But as I lay her(here) now being told my life's done
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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This is a beautiful poem using such emotional wording of how one can love so deeply.
A small typo. :-)
But as I lay her(here) now being told my life's done
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Dear Sam: thanks for catching that error...it' a bit rough so I shall fix it pronto. Nice to hear from you and hope to see you often. Blessings and thanks; HIS GRAYNESS...Vance
Comment from Darkhorse555
amazing picture of words Love and its promise is a kite on God's own tether So there are more than a few minutes left in our forever very beautifully penned dear friend
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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amazing picture of words Love and its promise is a kite on God's own tether So there are more than a few minutes left in our forever very beautifully penned dear friend
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Dear Darkhorse: thank you sincerely for this wonderful and very encouraging review. It is always a joy to hear from you and I'm honored by your six stars and your gracious comments! Vance
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, His Grayness,
This a very good poem with every other line rhyming. The rhymes are of high quality, It has good figurative language and imagery."on God's own tether".
her/e
Preston
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Hi, His Grayness,
This a very good poem with every other line rhyming. The rhymes are of high quality, It has good figurative language and imagery."on God's own tether".
her/e
Preston
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Preston: Thank you so much for your generous comments and meaningful feedback. It's always a pleasure to hear from you. All the best, Vance
Comment from DonandVicki
I really enjoyed the unusual construction of your poem, Lots of Whittman influence I think. Nice rhyme and meter. Good structure and a tribute to love. Don
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I really enjoyed the unusual construction of your poem, Lots of Whittman influence I think. Nice rhyme and meter. Good structure and a tribute to love. Don
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Dear DonaldandVicki: thanks for your prompt and kind review. I apologize that this was actually incomplete in posting as I was trying to add art and it posted while I was searching for an appropriate photo. I appreciate your review and thanks, Vance
