Studying Rodin
Life imitating art...26 total reviews
Comment from Casscat97
Very well-written - the rhymes are excellent and don't seem at all forced, and the poem flows nicely. The imagery you used was very vivid and allowed me to picture the scene. The implementation of French was nice, and while I had to look up what an "Id" is, once I did, it fit very nicely with the meaning you were conveying. The last two lines were absolutely perfect and the picture ties the whole thing together. Very nice; great work!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Very well-written - the rhymes are excellent and don't seem at all forced, and the poem flows nicely. The imagery you used was very vivid and allowed me to picture the scene. The implementation of French was nice, and while I had to look up what an "Id" is, once I did, it fit very nicely with the meaning you were conveying. The last two lines were absolutely perfect and the picture ties the whole thing together. Very nice; great work!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Casscat97. :)
Comment from queenv
I love the poem, it speaks of romance and love. The statue is indicative of just being there. I love the word sashayed. I used it in one of my poems. The poem floes well. Great job!
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I love the poem, it speaks of romance and love. The statue is indicative of just being there. I love the word sashayed. I used it in one of my poems. The poem floes well. Great job!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, queenv! :)
Comment from 24chas
The ending was as priceless as the statue. Also loved the way you documented the "ugly American." Sweat pants and a baseball cap in the Rodin museum, indeed. Really special writing.
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The ending was as priceless as the statue. Also loved the way you documented the "ugly American." Sweat pants and a baseball cap in the Rodin museum, indeed. Really special writing.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Chas!
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with she/strolled...grace/goddess...holding/handbag...to/turn...sneakers/slick...the/thinker/there...man's/mood...she/stood...absorbed/art/admiring...bundled...bronzed...set/state...touched/tipped...sleek/smirked/scoff...she/shook...her/head...slumped/sit. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
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Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with she/strolled...grace/goddess...holding/handbag...to/turn...sneakers/slick...the/thinker/there...man's/mood...she/stood...absorbed/art/admiring...bundled...bronzed...set/state...touched/tipped...sleek/smirked/scoff...she/shook...her/head...slumped/sit. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you, RR. I like the alliteration of your name, too. ;)
Comment from Roo4U
I can imagine you there as I lived in Paris myself and love the Rodin gardens! Your poem had good flow. Although I wonder why you wrote "(without his clothes)" as I didn't feel this added to your overall theme nor the flow.
The ending was quite cute, despite the sad rejecton. Good job! KS
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I can imagine you there as I lived in Paris myself and love the Rodin gardens! Your poem had good flow. Although I wonder why you wrote "(without his clothes)" as I didn't feel this added to your overall theme nor the flow.
The ending was quite cute, despite the sad rejecton. Good job! KS
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you, KS. The "without his clothes" was just a pithy little addition. I appreciate the review. :)
Comment from judiverse
This is great. Excellent rhyme and flow. Great description of the woman wearing fur and holding a champagne flute in contrast to the narrator in his warm-up suit and sneakers. Excellent details about them. Great art like The Thinker is accessible to all! What a line "Could this be fate?" The lady takes off with a "Non." Love the irony of the couplet, with the narrator pondering, posed like The Thinker. Now we know what The Thinker had on his mind! Engaging work. judi
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This is great. Excellent rhyme and flow. Great description of the woman wearing fur and holding a champagne flute in contrast to the narrator in his warm-up suit and sneakers. Excellent details about them. Great art like The Thinker is accessible to all! What a line "Could this be fate?" The lady takes off with a "Non." Love the irony of the couplet, with the narrator pondering, posed like The Thinker. Now we know what The Thinker had on his mind! Engaging work. judi
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Judi! :)
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You're so welcome. judi
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You're so welcome. judi
