From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Dreamwriter"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from seaglass
This poem is beautiful. The five line stanzas with rhyming lines #2-#5, is most interesting. The wording creative. As an active dreamer (we're talking way---crazy) I feel the sense of expectancy for the dream to unfold. I also study my dreams, there are meshed with hidden meanings to understanding myself.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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This poem is beautiful. The five line stanzas with rhyming lines #2-#5, is most interesting. The wording creative. As an active dreamer (we're talking way---crazy) I feel the sense of expectancy for the dream to unfold. I also study my dreams, there are meshed with hidden meanings to understanding myself.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Dear seaglass: thanks so much for you very kind review!! So glad you enjoyed this and hope to see you often....Blessings! Vance
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you are welcome
Comment from adewpearl
lovely use of alliteration
and beautiful imagery
nice touches of alliteration
strong rhymes
excellent illustrative examples of the types of dreams we have and the limitless possibilities of the person we can become :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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lovely use of alliteration
and beautiful imagery
nice touches of alliteration
strong rhymes
excellent illustrative examples of the types of dreams we have and the limitless possibilities of the person we can become :-) Brooke
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Dear Brooke; thank you so much for you encouraging review, I'm honored by your feedback and always delighted to hear from you!
All my best wishes and thanks again. Vance
Comment from Eleanor Buron
You pose a good question in your author notes. I do feel one should always have a dream - but that's a bit different, right? ;) I love the first stanza of your poem - so beautiful how you carry the metaphor/message through:
"Hush, hush now mind meadow
Soften thy breath of wind words
Let thy quill be still
And soon shall come
The wings of thought birds"
Incredibly beautiful. As with all your work, this poem is alive with images, hopeful direction and some lines leave a memorable impression on heart and mind.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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You pose a good question in your author notes. I do feel one should always have a dream - but that's a bit different, right? ;) I love the first stanza of your poem - so beautiful how you carry the metaphor/message through:
"Hush, hush now mind meadow
Soften thy breath of wind words
Let thy quill be still
And soon shall come
The wings of thought birds"
Incredibly beautiful. As with all your work, this poem is alive with images, hopeful direction and some lines leave a memorable impression on heart and mind.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Dear Eleanor; I truly appreciate your comments and my heart and mind both fly when I learn that my work has impressed you as you are truly a rich and golden mirror of poetry. I'm honored! Vance
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Thank you for your warm compliment, my friend.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hush, hush now mind(-)meadow
Soften thy breath of wind(-)words
Let thy quill be still ...( beautiful line - great internal rhyme)
And soon shall come
The wings(-)of(-)thought birds ... a lovely, lovely stanza .. what do you think about hyphenating?
What's in our mind is what we become ... amen! I agree!!
Happy New Year, Vance,
I love the surreal feel of this poem. A great personal exhortation for me.
May all our writing dreams come true in 2014. :)
Sonali
With (its) genius of informality .. how about personifying your Dreamwriter ... as a male or female .. his/her ..?
You could fly like (S)uperman
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2014
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Hush, hush now mind(-)meadow
Soften thy breath of wind(-)words
Let thy quill be still ...( beautiful line - great internal rhyme)
And soon shall come
The wings(-)of(-)thought birds ... a lovely, lovely stanza .. what do you think about hyphenating?
What's in our mind is what we become ... amen! I agree!!
Happy New Year, Vance,
I love the surreal feel of this poem. A great personal exhortation for me.
May all our writing dreams come true in 2014. :)
Sonali
With (its) genius of informality .. how about personifying your Dreamwriter ... as a male or female .. his/her ..?
You could fly like (S)uperman
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2014
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Dear Sonali: thank you very much for your kind review and good recommendations...they are much appreciated. Please stay tuned...it's always great to hear from you ! Vance
Comment from michaelcahill
Oh, this is so appealing to me in every way. The tone and the wording is so original and yet it has the feel of a work that was written long ago. But, it is so contemporary. Perhaps your muse is an old one that has a bit of the classics rummaging around. Awesome piece. Really enjoyable read. mikey
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2014
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Oh, this is so appealing to me in every way. The tone and the wording is so original and yet it has the feel of a work that was written long ago. But, it is so contemporary. Perhaps your muse is an old one that has a bit of the classics rummaging around. Awesome piece. Really enjoyable read. mikey
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2014
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Hey Mikey...so great to hear from you and thanks for your very meaningful and encouraging review! I'm always delighted to hear from you and hope you have a wonderful 2014 Vance
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, His Grayness,
This an exceptional poem with superior flow, rhyme, and an abcdc rhyme scheme consistently followed in a cinquain structure. It has a creative and original theme. Is the "informality of R.E.M. stage sleep" real or poetic license?
Preston
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Hi, His Grayness,
This an exceptional poem with superior flow, rhyme, and an abcdc rhyme scheme consistently followed in a cinquain structure. It has a creative and original theme. Is the "informality of R.E.M. stage sleep" real or poetic license?
Preston
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Dear Preston: I'm certainly honored by your exceptional review as your poetic skills are well admired by me. I assumed many or perhaps most would know the acronym so I did not want to extend it with full words. What do you think may have worked best here? Thanks so much for the kind review and gracious six stars. Vance
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I understand R.E.M. Stage of sleep to mean rapid eye movement stage of sleep but I am not knowlegble enough about the science of sleep to understand how informality applies
Comment from tbacha58
The Dreamwriter has no limitations
But seeks to teach a lesson so true
What's in our mind is what we become
And the proof is in your dreams each night
Because the real Dreamwriter is always YOU!
Whoa Vance, amazing true feeling poem of dreams. I think our subconscious has a lot to do with our dreams, I enjoyed so much reading through your dream. Life as long as we are alive, always brings another day with other dreams. Keep writing you enlighten our hearts. Much love Terry from LA. xoxo
This poem deserves my first six. Please don't give me a six now, as all my poems are old, I had no time to write yet, leave the six for later, OK? because I know you. xoxoxo
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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The Dreamwriter has no limitations
But seeks to teach a lesson so true
What's in our mind is what we become
And the proof is in your dreams each night
Because the real Dreamwriter is always YOU!
Whoa Vance, amazing true feeling poem of dreams. I think our subconscious has a lot to do with our dreams, I enjoyed so much reading through your dream. Life as long as we are alive, always brings another day with other dreams. Keep writing you enlighten our hearts. Much love Terry from LA. xoxo
This poem deserves my first six. Please don't give me a six now, as all my poems are old, I had no time to write yet, leave the six for later, OK? because I know you. xoxoxo
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Dear Terry: thanks so much for your wonderful review and generous six stars!! I'm so glad that especially YOU really liked this on as I think you are a true dreamer. Hugs! Vance
Comment from Darkhorse555
loved the image drawn with these words Floating upon today's emotions Dimming down the light of reality So the Dream writer may soon arrive Upon the R.E.M. stage of sleep With its genius of informality very beautifully penned dear friend
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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loved the image drawn with these words Floating upon today's emotions Dimming down the light of reality So the Dream writer may soon arrive Upon the R.E.M. stage of sleep With its genius of informality very beautifully penned dear friend
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Darkhorse: so many thanks to you for this kind and meaningful review. Much appreciated...Happy New Year...Vance
Comment from rouskin
Very enjoyable read and perfect artwork.
Each one of us is like:
The Dreamwriter has no limitations
But seeks to teach a lesson so true
What's in our mind is what we become
And the proof is in your dreams each night
Because the real Dreamwriter is always YOU!
May this year bring new happiness, new goals, new achievements and a lot of new inspirations on your life. Wishing you an year fully loaded with happiness.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Very enjoyable read and perfect artwork.
Each one of us is like:
The Dreamwriter has no limitations
But seeks to teach a lesson so true
What's in our mind is what we become
And the proof is in your dreams each night
Because the real Dreamwriter is always YOU!
May this year bring new happiness, new goals, new achievements and a lot of new inspirations on your life. Wishing you an year fully loaded with happiness.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Dear rouskin: Great to meet you and so many thanks for you kind review. I'm delighted that you found this inspiring and hope to see you often. Blessings: HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from reconciled
I remember when I was in boot camp......I wrote a letter to my Dad. My grandfather...my step mothers dad...died.....and I was allowed to leave to go to the funeral.....when I came home...at some point she...said..."you didn't write this"......I remember being confused at first...then hurt. Even Jesus was .....placed....by His own.....not willing to believe in Him.....yes, if all around you sees only zero....you better think ten...or you will become what they see. great read Dad....love you Michael
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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I remember when I was in boot camp......I wrote a letter to my Dad. My grandfather...my step mothers dad...died.....and I was allowed to leave to go to the funeral.....when I came home...at some point she...said..."you didn't write this"......I remember being confused at first...then hurt. Even Jesus was .....placed....by His own.....not willing to believe in Him.....yes, if all around you sees only zero....you better think ten...or you will become what they see. great read Dad....love you Michael
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Michael...in your most famous words: whoooooohooooo!! Thanks son, for such a great review and glad you liked it! I hope your dreams come true this year and life is better that the best it's ever been. Love you too son!! Dad
