I Release all to Vapor
An addicts first hit.11 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good descriptive word use that creates a clear image in my mind.. Good alliteration with stars/soul...weight/world...before/being...what/waited...sensation/senses...continue/connection. Good thought provoking message that holds my attention from start to finish.
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Good descriptive word use that creates a clear image in my mind.. Good alliteration with stars/soul...weight/world...before/being...what/waited...sensation/senses...continue/connection. Good thought provoking message that holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
Comment from 24chas
I liked the feel of this dark poem. The complete abandonment of the narrator was haunting. The imagery and flow were good as well. Nice job.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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I liked the feel of this dark poem. The complete abandonment of the narrator was haunting. The imagery and flow were good as well. Nice job.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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WOW! Thank you so very much for the fab review, much appreciated...dark lord
Comment from kiwijenny
There is a hook to your release to vapor....it will suck you in and waste you. That's the part I hate the most about addiction....the waste....
It only provides escape not solution.
God bless
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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There is a hook to your release to vapor....it will suck you in and waste you. That's the part I hate the most about addiction....the waste....
It only provides escape not solution.
God bless
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thank you for visiting my work, much appreciated...dark lord
Comment from hobopoet
Are you, perchance, from Colorado? :P
Good stuff. Nice imagery, a little darker than I like but hey, who's to say I've got perfect taste? Still...you carried me through this one easily, and I enjoyed it.
Good write. :)
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Are you, perchance, from Colorado? :P
Good stuff. Nice imagery, a little darker than I like but hey, who's to say I've got perfect taste? Still...you carried me through this one easily, and I enjoyed it.
Good write. :)
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Funny, I used to live in colorado. Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from adewpearl
Stunning presentation of your poem
good alliteration in weight of the world
Inhaling the fragrance of a revolution - I particularly like that line
a powerful depiction of this addict releasing all to the vapor
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Stunning presentation of your poem
good alliteration in weight of the world
Inhaling the fragrance of a revolution - I particularly like that line
a powerful depiction of this addict releasing all to the vapor
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thank you so very much for this awesome review, I appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
I wonder how you interpret freedom by the number of 'hits' you have. What you write about it not the way to make contact with your inner sanctum - it is a very temporary contact. To take a fix and lie in comfort thinking of when your next fix will come from is hardly living. As this is biographical I feel sorry for you - the more fixes you take the more you will need. Have a long think before it is too late. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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I wonder how you interpret freedom by the number of 'hits' you have. What you write about it not the way to make contact with your inner sanctum - it is a very temporary contact. To take a fix and lie in comfort thinking of when your next fix will come from is hardly living. As this is biographical I feel sorry for you - the more fixes you take the more you will need. Have a long think before it is too late. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for stopping by and reviewing my work, much appreciated...dark lord
Comment from dancerwriter
I have rated this with a five because the first verses are so beautifully expressed. Bit it took until reading to the end to realise what he is talking about. The first strange thing- I take a knee- curious??what does that mean? So this is how drugs or whatever else can affect one! I understand the release of feelings after any medical drug is given to help one sleep, but this is more powerful. You are game to express this in your own way, and I hope I have not misread the story. Lesley.J.mooney
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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I have rated this with a five because the first verses are so beautifully expressed. Bit it took until reading to the end to realise what he is talking about. The first strange thing- I take a knee- curious??what does that mean? So this is how drugs or whatever else can affect one! I understand the release of feelings after any medical drug is given to help one sleep, but this is more powerful. You are game to express this in your own way, and I hope I have not misread the story. Lesley.J.mooney
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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I appreciate you taking the time to review my work. You are free to interpret my writing any way you want. This poem is about what it feels like to take a first hit of heroin. Taking a knee is a comment on how powerful a drug it is. Thank you for taking time to read this...dark lord
Comment from DALLAS01
Ahhh escape. Poetically, the formatting and wording projects appealing images. Just to bad, that for some, that illusion eventually turns into a nightmare. The red on black adds power.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Ahhh escape. Poetically, the formatting and wording projects appealing images. Just to bad, that for some, that illusion eventually turns into a nightmare. The red on black adds power.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you so ery much for reading my work...dark lord
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You're welcome.
Comment from allborn66
This is a very interesting poem. Your word choice is quite vivid. You communicate your theme very well. The color choice enhances the piece.
Barbara
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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This is a very interesting poem. Your word choice is quite vivid. You communicate your theme very well. The color choice enhances the piece.
Barbara
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Dark Lord, I've never ventured into the way of drugs, but I can well imagine that it allows a person a temporary sense of freedom from you worries and environment. Pity their effect does not linger longer. I loved the poem, it takes a person step by step into this vapour world. Yet the time comes when you consider where the next fix will come from.
The vastness of it all is fearful and emotionally baron (should this word not be barren?) :) just asking
Well done. luv jada
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Hi Dark Lord, I've never ventured into the way of drugs, but I can well imagine that it allows a person a temporary sense of freedom from you worries and environment. Pity their effect does not linger longer. I loved the poem, it takes a person step by step into this vapour world. Yet the time comes when you consider where the next fix will come from.
The vastness of it all is fearful and emotionally baron (should this word not be barren?) :) just asking
Well done. luv jada
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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I thank you so very much for the kind words and continued support. I appreciate your loing kindness...dklrd
