Existing Only in a Shell
Struggling with pain and the reality of life.20 total reviews
Comment from SusanMaryMichelle
this is an excellent description of pain and what I mean by that is simply that it takes you to the dark place this poem is about and makes you feel it. We all have felt some type of despair in our lives and since I surely have I can relate to this in ways except the end - and think you succeeded in capturing despair and acceptance of one form of resolution.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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this is an excellent description of pain and what I mean by that is simply that it takes you to the dark place this poem is about and makes you feel it. We all have felt some type of despair in our lives and since I surely have I can relate to this in ways except the end - and think you succeeded in capturing despair and acceptance of one form of resolution.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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WOW! Thank you so very much for stopping by and reading this piece. I appreciate it with all of my heart...dark lord
Comment from L.A.Matthies
Dark and yet so beautifully penned at the same time!
As my life support slowly falters, I rest my head on a soft pillow.
Closing my eyes one last time, I think of those that have left me.
The reaper slowly covers me with a blanket of black roses.
Once in control of life, now, existing only in a shell.- WOW!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Dark and yet so beautifully penned at the same time!
As my life support slowly falters, I rest my head on a soft pillow.
Closing my eyes one last time, I think of those that have left me.
The reaper slowly covers me with a blanket of black roses.
Once in control of life, now, existing only in a shell.- WOW!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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I thank you so very much for the awesome review. I am so very pleased that you enjoyed this write of my...dklrd
Comment from rouskin
Extremely original and effective write
Great story here my friend, with a beautiful picture to match
May this year bring new happiness, new goals, new achievements and a lot of new inspirations on your life. Wishing you an year fully loaded with happiness.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Extremely original and effective write
Great story here my friend, with a beautiful picture to match
May this year bring new happiness, new goals, new achievements and a lot of new inspirations on your life. Wishing you an year fully loaded with happiness.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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I thank you so very much for the kind review and good wishes. Happy New Year to you as well...dklrd
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
I thought I had already reviewed this - but it is another of yours in similar vein. Four good stanzas in free verse. Good use of metaphor 'Existing only in a shell'. The repetition of this line is very effective and makes a sad poem sound even more sombre. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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I thought I had already reviewed this - but it is another of yours in similar vein. Four good stanzas in free verse. Good use of metaphor 'Existing only in a shell'. The repetition of this line is very effective and makes a sad poem sound even more sombre. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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I thank you so very much for the kind review, much appreciated...dklrd
Comment from trevorletang
Hello DK - how do you expect your readers to not be afraid when you shoot us straight from the hip. Such comfort with morbidity surely wins you the prize in this genre. Very real - I at first thought you were speaking for yourself, but in fact you speak for the gravest of us all.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Hello DK - how do you expect your readers to not be afraid when you shoot us straight from the hip. Such comfort with morbidity surely wins you the prize in this genre. Very real - I at first thought you were speaking for yourself, but in fact you speak for the gravest of us all.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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I thank you for the time you took to read and review my poem. Thank you from the bottom of my heart...dklrd
Comment from kiwijenny
So sad and hard,,, a reality to face....existing only in a shell....where life was once vibrant....this is hard .....existing only in a shell......
Great art work for this
God bless
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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So sad and hard,,, a reality to face....existing only in a shell....where life was once vibrant....this is hard .....existing only in a shell......
Great art work for this
God bless
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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I thank you for the kind review, Happy New Year...dklrd
Comment from jadapenn
This is a very sad poem. It would appear that this person has finally given up on the world and the grim reaper is here to gather his soul. Very well written portraying a gruesome story of drugs. luv jada
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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This is a very sad poem. It would appear that this person has finally given up on the world and the grim reaper is here to gather his soul. Very well written portraying a gruesome story of drugs. luv jada
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Once again, thank you for stopping by and understanding where I am coming from within this piece...dklrd
Comment from Erik McGinley
Hard to decide if this is about drug addiction or the fading of a life perhaps wasted in other manner.
Sadly maybe, that last stanza had me almost wishing to be in that position myself. I think the built up made the end seem like it must be desireable.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Hard to decide if this is about drug addiction or the fading of a life perhaps wasted in other manner.
Sadly maybe, that last stanza had me almost wishing to be in that position myself. I think the built up made the end seem like it must be desireable.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Once again, thank you for the continued support of my writing..dklrd
Comment from words
I found this descriptive piece reminescent of Poe.
You paint the dark side of life in vivid colors.
Nicely done.
Wishing you the best in the new year.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I found this descriptive piece reminescent of Poe.
You paint the dark side of life in vivid colors.
Nicely done.
Wishing you the best in the new year.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I thank you so very much for the kind review and comparison. I appreciate the time you took to read my piece...dklrd
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi my friend this certainly lets me feel the deeper pain and your emotional depth is powerful.
Thanks for sharing, a dark and strong work.
Happy New Year!
Maureen
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Hi my friend this certainly lets me feel the deeper pain and your emotional depth is powerful.
Thanks for sharing, a dark and strong work.
Happy New Year!
Maureen
"The once radiant skin tone , ..." // remove extra space before comma.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Once again, thank you for the kind review and words..dklrd
