To Cherish Thorns
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Comment from Pili Pubul
This a fabulous poem that believe me both genders can relate to that shy awkward feeling that you expressed so magnificently. Yes it is a bit sad, yet inspire a certain tenderness that bit of shyness. Good style, imagery and alliteration. Pili
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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This a fabulous poem that believe me both genders can relate to that shy awkward feeling that you expressed so magnificently. Yes it is a bit sad, yet inspire a certain tenderness that bit of shyness. Good style, imagery and alliteration. Pili
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Hi. I am so happy you enjoyed this. I love your comments and insights. You are right on the money. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the picture i will not say what that head looks like these words just tickled me how silly you feel when you wave your hand and then bend your arm awkwardly to scratch your head pretending that your intentions were always so beautifully penned as always dear friend
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from the picture i will not say what that head looks like these words just tickled me how silly you feel when you wave your hand and then bend your arm awkwardly to scratch your head pretending that your intentions were always so beautifully penned as always dear friend
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Hahaha. Yep. I know what you mean. Glad you liked this my friend. That wave thing is bad. But, saying something you think is a good comeback and having it come out wrong is worse. mikey
Comment from SValencia0178
I couldn't wait to see the words that could possibly go with the picture Mike selected to accompany his poem. I'd say he nailed it! Brilliant! Thanks for the yucks! Steve
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I couldn't wait to see the words that could possibly go with the picture Mike selected to accompany his poem. I'd say he nailed it! Brilliant! Thanks for the yucks! Steve
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Yucks are my game. I choose the picture from my "blue period" of snapshots. Once the acne cleared up, I was a chick magnate. But, society never understood the love of poultry. Bigots!! mikey
Comment from Dawn Munro
OH! How I wish I still had a six for this wonderful free verse! It is so sad, and yet sweetly funny too. Your alliteration is great - "doltish dullard dancing dervish you are not...".
Just so you know, that dandy feeling happens to the fairer sex too, btw *grin*.
Kudos on a fabulous poem! I enjoyed every word! (Great artwork too! LOL)
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OH! How I wish I still had a six for this wonderful free verse! It is so sad, and yet sweetly funny too. Your alliteration is great - "doltish dullard dancing dervish you are not...".
Just so you know, that dandy feeling happens to the fairer sex too, btw *grin*.
Kudos on a fabulous poem! I enjoyed every word! (Great artwork too! LOL)
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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So pleased you enjoyed it. I hope I never did that to a girl unknowingly. I was a real quiet loner type though or so I thought. That is not how the folks I run into remember me. Thank you for the great review. Big smiles!! Happy New Year, mikey
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Big smiles right back. I'm sure you didn't. :) Happy New Year!
Comment from Domino 2
LOL at your notes, Michael - that's happened to me too.
Of course, smiling can sometimes be a sign of nervousness or even self-denial, as in your 'scratching your head' awkward motion.
Very vivid imagery in excellent and 'real' word usage. Deep-thinking observations on human nature too.
Excellent free verse.
Best wishes, Ted
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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LOL at your notes, Michael - that's happened to me too.
Of course, smiling can sometimes be a sign of nervousness or even self-denial, as in your 'scratching your head' awkward motion.
Very vivid imagery in excellent and 'real' word usage. Deep-thinking observations on human nature too.
Excellent free verse.
Best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Glad you liked it. I was pretty happy it turned out so well. Those nervous smiles are the worst. Not as bad as the fake ones though. Thank you much. Have a great New Year!! mikey
Comment from Nosha17
One can be invisible to some, yet we are insecure and self conscious and think the whole world is laughing at us. I know the feeling. Your imagery and use of language are good and have conveyed your message well. It flowed very peacefully and was enjoyable to read. Faye
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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One can be invisible to some, yet we are insecure and self conscious and think the whole world is laughing at us. I know the feeling. Your imagery and use of language are good and have conveyed your message well. It flowed very peacefully and was enjoyable to read. Faye
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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I feel like that from time to time. In between thinking I am wonderful!! Ha! But, I think it crosses everyone's mind from time to time. I know every time I post something I have a moment when I think that it is terrible and no one will like it. mikey
Comment from nancy_e_davis
No one likes to feel foolish and awkward. Smiling is a good defense but most of the time one can spot a nervous insincere smile. Love the remark about the polka and how everyone quits making fun when you turn around and the belly flop that didn't happen so you could get them back!. Really the way it is sometimes. LOL Nancy
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No one likes to feel foolish and awkward. Smiling is a good defense but most of the time one can spot a nervous insincere smile. Love the remark about the polka and how everyone quits making fun when you turn around and the belly flop that didn't happen so you could get them back!. Really the way it is sometimes. LOL Nancy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Oh yes, it sure can be. Those brilliant comeback lines that don't come out quite the way you thought they would. The worst! mikey
Comment from fastdigits
You have a style that is unique
and mesmerizing as one looks
deep into the words and is able
to associate with your thoughts
that you spread upon the screen.
Well done
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You have a style that is unique
and mesmerizing as one looks
deep into the words and is able
to associate with your thoughts
that you spread upon the screen.
Well done
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Glad you liked it. Looking forward to the new year. Hope you have a great New Years. mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
The poor man in the picture. He is so ugly he is cute. He reminds me of those wrinkled pups. It is hard to read smiles for other people. I have used smiles as a defense. Some one makes me angry or I don't want to me around them. I smile and back away. I smile when strangers see me glancing at them. A smile can be a tool or a weapon. Great work.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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The poor man in the picture. He is so ugly he is cute. He reminds me of those wrinkled pups. It is hard to read smiles for other people. I have used smiles as a defense. Some one makes me angry or I don't want to me around them. I smile and back away. I smile when strangers see me glancing at them. A smile can be a tool or a weapon. Great work.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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So very true. I have been known to smile when I am really mad. They say it is scary. hahaha. I love that picture. He is cute poor guy. He would end up at my lunch table in high school under my protection. mikey
Comment from amanda98653
Wow! truly poetic, Mikey!
Your poem reminds me of how I laugh at myself for laughing along with others when it comes to not funny jokes..okie another random thing.
I fell in luv with this cute boy in fourth grade..he didn't even know I existed. lol.
very well-written:)
hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Wow! truly poetic, Mikey!
Your poem reminds me of how I laugh at myself for laughing along with others when it comes to not funny jokes..okie another random thing.
I fell in luv with this cute boy in fourth grade..he didn't even know I existed. lol.
very well-written:)
hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Yes!!! That is a big part of it. Laughing at jokes made at your expense when it isn't all that funny to you. Sometimes I make the joke first. That's a cute picture of me huh? mikey
