From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Hatred"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from Darkhorse555
now these words dazzled But from the rotten bowels of dead spirits Creating excrement to fertilize the devil's own garden
extremely beautifully penned happy new year to you
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2014
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now these words dazzled But from the rotten bowels of dead spirits Creating excrement to fertilize the devil's own garden
extremely beautifully penned happy new year to you
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2014
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Dear Darkhorse555 I genuinely appreciate your generous rating and encouraging review. I hope to see more of your work and you to see more of mine this coming year! ALL THE BEST..Vance
Comment from lakeport
Hatred,indeed there to much in this world,that's why some mankind will never live in peace. that's a very heartfelt expressed poem,nice flow, thanks for sharing it, God bless you. Lakeport,
Best wishes for the New Year!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2013
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Hatred,indeed there to much in this world,that's why some mankind will never live in peace. that's a very heartfelt expressed poem,nice flow, thanks for sharing it, God bless you. Lakeport,
Best wishes for the New Year!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2013
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Thanks for you kind review and meaningful comments! Always a pleasure to hear from you and Blessings in return and also HAPPY AND SAFE NEW YEAR: Vance
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Your welcome,lakeport.
'Happy New Year 2014!
Comment from Eleanor Buron
You express your feelings with passion; there is nothing mediocre in your poetry. You arrange your written thoughts with intelligent precision and I determine your thoughts spring from a beautiful mind.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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You express your feelings with passion; there is nothing mediocre in your poetry. You arrange your written thoughts with intelligent precision and I determine your thoughts spring from a beautiful mind.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Dearest Eleanor: Your review filled me with encouragement, hope and inspiration, that I might master this art of poetry with enough skill and passion to change this world for the better by also gifting others with what you just gifted me! I hope I can inspire, enlighten, enrich, empower, and stimulate positive passions in others that they might seek to do the same and pay it all forward. Bless you for being out there doing this and may we keep the love and the passion alive as long as we are! Vance
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;) - I'm for that arrangement, my friend. You say it better than I can ever express but I feel as you do. Bless you always dear friend. Eleanor
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Happy New Year..Love and everlasting Joy! Vance
Comment from pugwash
hi gray,
i found this poem both engaging and fascinating - the language and the tone is very scripture-like, brilliantly done, which gives the piece added authority and pathos.
but what really blew me away was the anger expressed toward the end, climaxing with
'For thee cometh neither from God nor it's light
But from the rotten bowels of dead spirits
Creating excrement to fertilize the devil's own garden
Be gone, you scum upon the windows of salvation
if these are not terms of hatred i don't know what is - which leaves the poem kind of self-referential.
but i wouldn't change a thing, it's brilliant as it is -
thanks for sharing.......P
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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hi gray,
i found this poem both engaging and fascinating - the language and the tone is very scripture-like, brilliantly done, which gives the piece added authority and pathos.
but what really blew me away was the anger expressed toward the end, climaxing with
'For thee cometh neither from God nor it's light
But from the rotten bowels of dead spirits
Creating excrement to fertilize the devil's own garden
Be gone, you scum upon the windows of salvation
if these are not terms of hatred i don't know what is - which leaves the poem kind of self-referential.
but i wouldn't change a thing, it's brilliant as it is -
thanks for sharing.......P
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Hi Pugwash: Great to meet you and thanks for the great review! I'm glad this poem captured your attention and consideration and I hope you will come back around more often as your insight is exceptional! Happy New Year to you: HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from Glasstruth
Very interesting take on mirrors which I think makes this poem unique and brings the meaning forward by reflecting it. I think this part really ties things together:
"But you live in a house of mirrors
And your energy comes back upon you
To fuel the death of your very origin
To exhaust the fire of your own being
To shame you for the heart of your purpose
To mark you as a sinner without salvation"
Very upbeat energy, especially the way you end it:
"Be gone, you scum upon the windows of salvation
And leave us to know only joy and mirrors of love
And never ending lives of GRATITUDE for missing you!"
Happy Holidays! Les
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Very interesting take on mirrors which I think makes this poem unique and brings the meaning forward by reflecting it. I think this part really ties things together:
"But you live in a house of mirrors
And your energy comes back upon you
To fuel the death of your very origin
To exhaust the fire of your own being
To shame you for the heart of your purpose
To mark you as a sinner without salvation"
Very upbeat energy, especially the way you end it:
"Be gone, you scum upon the windows of salvation
And leave us to know only joy and mirrors of love
And never ending lives of GRATITUDE for missing you!"
Happy Holidays! Les
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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lES: it is always and honor to get your perspectives and these comments are very encouraging and helpful. Thanks and have a great New Year! Vance
Comment from val fitchie
gulp......classic old school in it's format......AND also in it's HELL and Damn Nation vocabulary......leaves the scholars AND casual observers both talking AND speechless(accomplishing the impossible! Again I say: HOW DO YOU DO THIS?!?!)
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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gulp......classic old school in it's format......AND also in it's HELL and Damn Nation vocabulary......leaves the scholars AND casual observers both talking AND speechless(accomplishing the impossible! Again I say: HOW DO YOU DO THIS?!?!)
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Dear Val: Thanks for your really encouraging review and I'm always excited to hear from you. This one is pretty much off the wall but as I saw all the poems of greetings and blah blah for the holidays, I wanted to throw some strong herbs into the sugar stew of reality and get the haters in the audience to stand up and take their bloody emmeys in front of the other life actors. It's a tough gig to watch haters do their thing so I wanted to hold up mirrors during this season of Love, and shame them out of the theatre! Thanks a million for your great review and know my gratitude for your guidance and inspiration is GENUINE!VANCE
Comment from reconciled
Hey Dad...hatred comes through the hearts of men... plotted in mind and enforced through action...which then becomes sin. Then those who are sinned against hate them....it will never stop ...this cycle of sin...until we see ourselves responsible for hidden evil motivation given life....you see most...I've found....do not really believe He is...or that they will be held accountable....if they did....they would believe when He says..."if your brother has aught against you...go to him and make it right...before you place your gift on the alter"...paraphrasing....no most see their life as all important and that which surrounds them less significant...unworthy of their concern and certainly not considered by God as redeemed....but yes perhaps for a couple hours at least we could stop plotting to hurt each other.....amen. love you michael
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Hey Dad...hatred comes through the hearts of men... plotted in mind and enforced through action...which then becomes sin. Then those who are sinned against hate them....it will never stop ...this cycle of sin...until we see ourselves responsible for hidden evil motivation given life....you see most...I've found....do not really believe He is...or that they will be held accountable....if they did....they would believe when He says..."if your brother has aught against you...go to him and make it right...before you place your gift on the alter"...paraphrasing....no most see their life as all important and that which surrounds them less significant...unworthy of their concern and certainly not considered by God as redeemed....but yes perhaps for a couple hours at least we could stop plotting to hurt each other.....amen. love you michael
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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MICHAEL dear son...your words and thoughts are profound on this subject and much appreciated for their very truth. Should the day arrive when the emotion of hatred would have exhausted it's energy in the universe.....the sun would probably never set! Dad
Comment from michaelcahill
Well spoken my friend. Why now at this time does hatred show its face? For it surely does. I am with you. The joy is too beautiful to allow anything to distract our eyes from it. Well done. Bravo. mikey
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Well spoken my friend. Why now at this time does hatred show its face? For it surely does. I am with you. The joy is too beautiful to allow anything to distract our eyes from it. Well done. Bravo. mikey
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Mikey: Thanks so much for your excellent commentary which I agree with fully! I hope you have a wonderful new year full of love and avoiding any form of hate from any directions! Vance
Comment from ProjectBluebook
A long spiritual poem, just in a Nick of time for X-mas, what better day. There will always be hatred, as long as there is a devil. But God needs the devil, because if there is no bad, there would be no good. Nether less, he will be bound in hell for a thousand tears then releashed again. Maybe, when heaven comes in glory on Earth for a thousand years. Merry X-mas, great poem, spread your messages and save someone? wackydo
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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A long spiritual poem, just in a Nick of time for X-mas, what better day. There will always be hatred, as long as there is a devil. But God needs the devil, because if there is no bad, there would be no good. Nether less, he will be bound in hell for a thousand tears then releashed again. Maybe, when heaven comes in glory on Earth for a thousand years. Merry X-mas, great poem, spread your messages and save someone? wackydo
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Dear Wackydo: Thanks for your great review and generous comments! Yeah, I thought the balance of reality was off a bit when everybody's sending out CHRISTMAS LOVE and cards, etc. but so much hatred is pouring out in every dimension of communication so I just wanted to put up the contrast. Best wishes for the New Year and hoping to hear from you again soon! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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Thanks for input, gracious reply, wackydo
Comment from Spitfire
Except for the fact that you are not celebrating a subject, this could pass for an Ode.
How doest thou amass such energy
To gather clouds of angry will
That spit the sour rains of vengeance
Upon our blossoms of hope and love
A powerful image above. I like the use of old English.
Excellent use of parallel structure: to fuel, to exhaust, to shame, to mark.
scum upon the windows of salvation --a perfect description.
Your author's notes are so right.
It takes more energy to hate than to love.
Kisses to you,
Shari
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Except for the fact that you are not celebrating a subject, this could pass for an Ode.
How doest thou amass such energy
To gather clouds of angry will
That spit the sour rains of vengeance
Upon our blossoms of hope and love
A powerful image above. I like the use of old English.
Excellent use of parallel structure: to fuel, to exhaust, to shame, to mark.
scum upon the windows of salvation --a perfect description.
Your author's notes are so right.
It takes more energy to hate than to love.
Kisses to you,
Shari
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Hugs and Kisses back to you dear Shari!!! I appreciate your kind reviews as always and just had to throw some balance out there to mitigate all the negatives provided by those energy forces that inhibit gratitude and love etc. etc. Lets have a FABULOUS NEW YEAR!! Vance
