From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Destiny"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Vance
It is very special spiritual pome written in archaic format. It seems like this poem should be listed.
I think it is a most excellent poem! It says so much!
Thank you for sharing .
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Hello Vance
It is very special spiritual pome written in archaic format. It seems like this poem should be listed.
I think it is a most excellent poem! It says so much!
Thank you for sharing .
Gert
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you Gert..BTW what do you mean should be listed? Vance
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Listed on the front page of Fanstory.
Gert
Comment from Kingsland
I'm not much for poetry with a religious tone, but then again. This poem seems more on the spiritual side then it being religious. This was a well written and has a very well delivered poetic voice... John
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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I'm not much for poetry with a religious tone, but then again. This poem seems more on the spiritual side then it being religious. This was a well written and has a very well delivered poetic voice... John
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Dear Kingsland: thanks for the kind review... it is much appreciated: His Grayness ... Vance
Comment from fluffnstuff
nice write....a very good prayer that many now have in their minds and hearts. is definitely spiritual i do say. fluff
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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nice write....a very good prayer that many now have in their minds and hearts. is definitely spiritual i do say. fluff
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Hello Fluffnstuff..Glad to meet you and .love your name! Thanks so much for your kind review and hope to see you again soon! HIS GRAYNESSS: Vance
Comment from val fitchie
classic oldschool His Greyness. great parallelism with the "where is..." repeated throughout. ELOQUENT metaphors here. NOW-"WHERE IS" A POETRY BOOK WITH YOUR AUTHORSHIP? You would be recognized and respected by the audience AND the critics
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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classic oldschool His Greyness. great parallelism with the "where is..." repeated throughout. ELOQUENT metaphors here. NOW-"WHERE IS" A POETRY BOOK WITH YOUR AUTHORSHIP? You would be recognized and respected by the audience AND the critics
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Dear Val....your encouragement hits directly on the base drum of my life's parade..endlessly thumping "do it do it dum dum" I promise I shall commit to the writing of the book and you shall be the editor.....so is that a deal or what??? GRAYNESS
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woah.....it would be the deal of the century. It would be one of my personal highest honors, given my admiration and respect for YOUR talent.....you have always been attentive at not carelessly repeating any words unless it was for a "point"(this is the common mistake of the lesserthans)thus I probably wouldn't do too much in THAT way of editing (if I do spot anything else that is awkward upon rereads, I will run it by you-I think I did thst once...)To do at least one of the "forewards" would be a thrill.....one thing I'd like to do is categorize by "friendship" "love" "time" "God" "deeds" etc.(I'm wondering if any "promo" that might include the word "metaphysics" would "wile up" Christian bookstore owners? anyways, lots to talk about/lots to do/I need assistance in getting my country songwriting/singing in gear(26 songs-several are hits)
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Val: thanks for the encouraging and spirited reply. I'm excited to get on down this path so please have wonderful holidays and I'll start pumping some material to you asap! All the best! Vance
Comment from Eleanor Buron
A pouring forth of poetry and prayer - You have written beautifully descriptive lines; I mention only a few:
"Beyond fields of dusty sorrows"
"Turn the ripples of my regrets
Into rivers of hope"
Nature has a way of speaking to us, if we listen, and you mention fields, rivers, wings, winds, sky - you are a listener and you incorporate nature in your poetry which lends a special beauty.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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A pouring forth of poetry and prayer - You have written beautifully descriptive lines; I mention only a few:
"Beyond fields of dusty sorrows"
"Turn the ripples of my regrets
Into rivers of hope"
Nature has a way of speaking to us, if we listen, and you mention fields, rivers, wings, winds, sky - you are a listener and you incorporate nature in your poetry which lends a special beauty.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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AH DEAR ELEANOR....YOUR WORDS AND YOUR INSPIRATIONS ARE MY SPECIAL BEAUTY!! I never post anything without thinking how you might reflect upon it! Bless you dear one for you brilliance and your profound guidance...and the honor of those wonderful sixes
Have a wonderful holiday season.. Vance
Comment from michaelcahill
Wow. This is stellar. Original in every way. Just a rousing use of language here. One of those pieces that makes a fellow writer want to shout!! One of your very best. Standing ovation. Makes me want to write. mikey
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Wow. This is stellar. Original in every way. Just a rousing use of language here. One of those pieces that makes a fellow writer want to shout!! One of your very best. Standing ovation. Makes me want to write. mikey
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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MIKEY...I RESPONDED TO YOU BEFORE BUT SOMEHOW, THE RESPONSE BOUNCED BACK SO MAYBE I DID NOT SAVE IT PROPERLY. IN MY FIRST MESSAGE BACK TO YOU, I CHALLENGED YOU TO GO WRITE AHEAD AND WRITE ABOUT THE SUBJECT OF "WORRY" THANKS SO MUCH FOR YOU KIND AND MEANINGFUL REVIEW
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Worry it is. No worries!! I assume I can't use the word "worry". mikey
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Mikey...no limits...you can use any word any way you want and the old faithful "who, what'where, when why" questions all apply..cheers....vance
Comment from J. Dark
I really enjoy the flow and the use of older style language in this one, Vance. It is a strong free verse and I particularly like the alliteration of "ripples of my regrets". Awesome picture selection too.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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I really enjoy the flow and the use of older style language in this one, Vance. It is a strong free verse and I particularly like the alliteration of "ripples of my regrets". Awesome picture selection too.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Thanks so much Julie and hope you have wonderful Holidays. Vance
Comment from tbacha58
Oh destiny
Wherefore art thou
Oh hope when shall thee awaken me
Oh love my most cherished dream
When shall you carry me
Beyond fields of dusty sorrows
Oh Vance, what a beautiful poem of wishing to lay down your past and your now into the hands of The Almighty. Vance, your amazing poem made my heart beat for you, and my eyes teary, I pray for you,
that your destiny now, now, would change immediately to live a hopeful life full of hope and love, and what your heart desires would come true. Thinking of you, Hugs Love, Terry xoxo
I am in Los Angeles, with my eldest son and his family. First poem that I read was your . xoxoxo
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Oh destiny
Wherefore art thou
Oh hope when shall thee awaken me
Oh love my most cherished dream
When shall you carry me
Beyond fields of dusty sorrows
Oh Vance, what a beautiful poem of wishing to lay down your past and your now into the hands of The Almighty. Vance, your amazing poem made my heart beat for you, and my eyes teary, I pray for you,
that your destiny now, now, would change immediately to live a hopeful life full of hope and love, and what your heart desires would come true. Thinking of you, Hugs Love, Terry xoxo
I am in Los Angeles, with my eldest son and his family. First poem that I read was your . xoxoxo
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Dear Terry: glad you are safely with your son and I will be driving to LA tomorrow afternoon to Long Beach. Let me know your phone number and I will call you: I'm 702-305-7041 Love and Hugs! Vance
Comment from ragamuffin
A very nice overall presentation. It's an uplifting piece that offers a hope filled plea for peace and understanding for both self and all others. Must say your thought of "destiny" being Heaven is something to ponder. Makes me wonder how far off the narrow path we can stray before that destiny is no longer destined but only a desire of the Creator. A lovely piece.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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A very nice overall presentation. It's an uplifting piece that offers a hope filled plea for peace and understanding for both self and all others. Must say your thought of "destiny" being Heaven is something to ponder. Makes me wonder how far off the narrow path we can stray before that destiny is no longer destined but only a desire of the Creator. A lovely piece.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Hi ragamuffin...many thanks for your comments and please have a wonderful and safe holiday season...Vance
Comment from kiwijenny
Turn the ripples of my regrets..........into rivers of hope........
My favorite lines.....well done..............?.this
is a great thought to contemplate.....well done
God bless
Merry Christmas
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Turn the ripples of my regrets..........into rivers of hope........
My favorite lines.....well done..............?.this
is a great thought to contemplate.....well done
God bless
Merry Christmas
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Jenny....thanks for your kind remarks and blessings to you as well for the holidays and ALWAYS! VANCE
