Addiction
When the drug is craved by every fiber of your body28 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
demons has control
soul lost by craving desire
absolute power
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is correct. Good alliteration with control/craving. Good, clear message that is short, sweet and to the point.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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demons has control
soul lost by craving desire
absolute power
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is correct. Good alliteration with control/craving. Good, clear message that is short, sweet and to the point.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your review and comments. RJ
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is excellent, rj. you did an excellent job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the nature of the beast when it comes to addition, no matter what it is for, food or drugs, love and acceptance, being thin at any cost. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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this is excellent, rj. you did an excellent job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the nature of the beast when it comes to addition, no matter what it is for, food or drugs, love and acceptance, being thin at any cost. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your review and comments. JR
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
demon has control Many are the devil's slaves
soul lost by craving desire addiction is a curse
absolute power there is no escape
Loved the piece. My step-daughter was an addict. Ok now.
Regards:
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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demon has control Many are the devil's slaves
soul lost by craving desire addiction is a curse
absolute power there is no escape
Loved the piece. My step-daughter was an addict. Ok now.
Regards:
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your review and sharing comments. RJ
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Dear RJ: My pleasure. Do drop by. Merry Christmas!!
XX Steve C
Comment from wadamani
An abundance of truth rings with this poem, I felt this 5-7-5 is whole in that you managed to capture the sentiment by emphasizing the tone with your word choice. Well done.
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An abundance of truth rings with this poem, I felt this 5-7-5 is whole in that you managed to capture the sentiment by emphasizing the tone with your word choice. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your review and comments. RJ
Comment from livelylinda
RJ: the picture, alone, tells a hell of a story! But, add the colors scheme and your right-on words, and you have a good contender for the contest. You go girl, livelylinda
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RJ: the picture, alone, tells a hell of a story! But, add the colors scheme and your right-on words, and you have a good contender for the contest. You go girl, livelylinda
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your review and nice comments. RJ
Comment from ragamuffin
The picture is an excellent accompaniment to the poem, which fits well into the requirements of a 5-7-5. A very strong thought and message is conveyed. "Addiction;" it can be identified with so much making your piece quite relatable. Well chosen words to drive home your point. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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The picture is an excellent accompaniment to the poem, which fits well into the requirements of a 5-7-5. A very strong thought and message is conveyed. "Addiction;" it can be identified with so much making your piece quite relatable. Well chosen words to drive home your point. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your review and comments. RJ
Comment from Benny Beeharry
The addiction is really the demon, which one has to avoid or get rid of.
But the craving is not easy to control. It harder trying to get rid of it than beginning it.best thing is avoid the demon from the beginning than fighting him after,
Benny Bedharry
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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The addiction is really the demon, which one has to avoid or get rid of.
But the craving is not easy to control. It harder trying to get rid of it than beginning it.best thing is avoid the demon from the beginning than fighting him after,
Benny Bedharry
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your review and comments. RJ
Comment from Nuad1
Each and every one of us is addicted to something or someone; you clearly spelled out the hold it owns over us with minimal words but POTENT message. I liked this work very much and the message you are putting out "here".
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Each and every one of us is addicted to something or someone; you clearly spelled out the hold it owns over us with minimal words but POTENT message. I liked this work very much and the message you are putting out "here".
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your review and the six star. RJ
