One Christmas Night
A simple story in iambic pentameter.40 total reviews
Comment from cleo85
You sure know how to set words and tell your story convincingly in metaphors. More, you bring in your message for everyone to understand. I am not enough of a writer to provide technical advice, but clearly see your talent. Thank you for illustrating your poem with my painting.
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You sure know how to set words and tell your story convincingly in metaphors. More, you bring in your message for everyone to understand. I am not enough of a writer to provide technical advice, but clearly see your talent. Thank you for illustrating your poem with my painting.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from forestport12
I'm glad I read this before I retired for the evening. I enjoyed how you incorporated nature, since I love to take solitary walks in the woods and also often hunt alone and have done so in the snow. It is often a time when I commune with God and feel his presence in the delicate balance of nature. You brought that out in no uncertain measure with the sounds of the bird, as often that will be one thing I will hear when the whole woods are still. Wonderful reminder of how through the birth of the savior, he reminds there is hope in a lost world too. Stan
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I'm glad I read this before I retired for the evening. I enjoyed how you incorporated nature, since I love to take solitary walks in the woods and also often hunt alone and have done so in the snow. It is often a time when I commune with God and feel his presence in the delicate balance of nature. You brought that out in no uncertain measure with the sounds of the bird, as often that will be one thing I will hear when the whole woods are still. Wonderful reminder of how through the birth of the savior, he reminds there is hope in a lost world too. Stan
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from Trybuck
It has all the ingredients to be a winner, and so I sincerely hope it does very well in the contest for you.
Our transformation is God's dream for us. Well done, Buck
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It has all the ingredients to be a winner, and so I sincerely hope it does very well in the contest for you.
Our transformation is God's dream for us. Well done, Buck
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from MERRY1
What an inspired wonderful poem. It touched my heart. the rhythm and the flow are both easy to follow and the dream has bought you many hours of happiness I am sure. Well done
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What an inspired wonderful poem. It touched my heart. the rhythm and the flow are both easy to follow and the dream has bought you many hours of happiness I am sure. Well done
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from GracieAnn
MissMerri, this Christmas Poetry contest entry is well written with solid and smooth in the a-a-b-b and so forth rhyming scheme. The message is strong about the Savior's call and our response. Dream or no, "God works in mysterious ways". Inspirational! All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
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MissMerri, this Christmas Poetry contest entry is well written with solid and smooth in the a-a-b-b and so forth rhyming scheme. The message is strong about the Savior's call and our response. Dream or no, "God works in mysterious ways". Inspirational! All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from Ben Colder
Bravo! Well done poet. A beautiful ode to the King of Kings. really enjoyed this poem .Merry Christmas and blessings to you and your family. I will meet you at the voting booth.
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Bravo! Well done poet. A beautiful ode to the King of Kings. really enjoyed this poem .Merry Christmas and blessings to you and your family. I will meet you at the voting booth.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from Frankeddy
Lovely very sincere poem of a magical dream.
Beautiful accompanying picture, sweet and gentle.
Graceful rhyming scheme lets poem flow smoothly.
Presented in a clear and colourful setting.
Well done. Frankeddy
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Lovely very sincere poem of a magical dream.
Beautiful accompanying picture, sweet and gentle.
Graceful rhyming scheme lets poem flow smoothly.
Presented in a clear and colourful setting.
Well done. Frankeddy
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from Glasstruth
A beautiful Christmas poem. Your quatrains flow smoothly with rhyming that just glides across the screen. The message in: "the night the Savior came" comforts me with awe as I read it. Well done! Les
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A beautiful Christmas poem. Your quatrains flow smoothly with rhyming that just glides across the screen. The message in: "the night the Savior came" comforts me with awe as I read it. Well done! Les
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from RodG
This is a lovely story told in rhyme. I especially like how you set the scene of the dream and take us with the Speaker on his stroll through this wintry wonderland. It is a moving story because of his epiphany once he awakes. Not a forced rhyme in the whole poem and the cadence enhances the mood/ atmosphere of the poem.
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This is a lovely story told in rhyme. I especially like how you set the scene of the dream and take us with the Speaker on his stroll through this wintry wonderland. It is a moving story because of his epiphany once he awakes. Not a forced rhyme in the whole poem and the cadence enhances the mood/ atmosphere of the poem.
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2013
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, Adonna
I am so glad I found your poem before turning in this evening. It is a beautiful Christmas poem that reminds the reader of the true meaning of the season--the birth of Christ. I admire the dual meaning of the last line, "the night the Savior came". I read this as both the birth of Christ as well as his awakening in you.
Your quatrains are perfect in form, meter and end rhyme. It was a delight to read and has put me in a good mood for rest.
Well done, my friend, and best luck to you in the contest.
Ray
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Good Evening, Adonna
I am so glad I found your poem before turning in this evening. It is a beautiful Christmas poem that reminds the reader of the true meaning of the season--the birth of Christ. I admire the dual meaning of the last line, "the night the Savior came". I read this as both the birth of Christ as well as his awakening in you.
Your quatrains are perfect in form, meter and end rhyme. It was a delight to read and has put me in a good mood for rest.
Well done, my friend, and best luck to you in the contest.
Ray
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2013
