Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is quite lovely in form and content. I am continually amazed by all the cool formats you produce and you are certainly broadening my education by always providing an explanation of the rules behind the style. I wish I had a six since you incorporated rhyme into a format that typically does not require it - such challenges deserve bonus points. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2013

Thank you Mystic Angel, your review is as glowing as a sixth star to me.

Comment from Tina McKala

Excellent

beautiful whitney - both rhymes and flow. You played with the langueage and it made for a very good effect. it had energy and ambiance. I loved it.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2013

Thank you Tina.

Comment from words

Excellent

Love the sentiment you have expressed in this well-crafted verse.

A day is certainly worry of a cherub toast.

Here on the West Coast, people sitting in restaurants on the beach often raise their classes to toast the sunset then the whole restaurant applauds the sinking sun.

Hugs,d

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2013

Thank you d, a wonderful way to do it. I have experienced that in both La Jolla, and San Francisco.

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

A very delightful Whitney poem. See, I learned something today. Never heard of a Whitney poem before. Great imagery throughout. Love the phrase, "Twilight Toasting". Very well done!

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2013

Thank you Marietta. Glad you liked it.

Comment from marycec

Excellent

A sweet and whimsical Whitney celebrating Good use of alliterartion in 'twilight toasting'. Dusk's revelries introduce the theme of darkness when the angels depart.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2013

Thank you Marycec. Yes, darkness will then prevail.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

You could very well be right. Lol.
A delightful Whitney poem with the perfect picture choice to back up the poem's sentiments.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2013

Thank you Shirley.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

Delightful imagery in this great party and adventure, I have not heard of a "Whitney" poem. Rhyme scheme was excellent in such a tight short poem. Well done.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013

Thank you Rod.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

A lovely Whitney;
Nice audio imagery: Cherubs sing";
Nice alliteration also as we learn of cherub's fine activities of sundown.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013

Thank you Margaret. They look like they're having fun.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent Whitney poem. It has good flow, rhyme, and figurative language and imagery. Twilight toasting is good alliteration.
Preston

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 Comment Written 05-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013

Thanks again Preston.

Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER

Excellent

Dance and play
The day away
Cherubs sing
As angels may
Wine tasting
Twilight toasting wasting
Dusk's revelries underway

Never heard of a Whitney. Was a delight to read.

Regards:

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 Comment Written 05-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013

Thank you Stephen, I like it jaunty cadence.