Little Poems
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Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Treischel,
When Waters Dance - A live picture beautifully depicted!
It's a marvelous piece of Romance Poetry in the form of an Octogram fulfilling all the desired norms.
Praiseworthy structure as well as the Artwork.
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Spontaneous and enchanting flow throughout the poem resembling the natural fountain.
Lovely rhyming scheme with lively imagery and pictorial quality.
Superb!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
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Hello Treischel,
When Waters Dance - A live picture beautifully depicted!
It's a marvelous piece of Romance Poetry in the form of an Octogram fulfilling all the desired norms.
Praiseworthy structure as well as the Artwork.
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Spontaneous and enchanting flow throughout the poem resembling the natural fountain.
Lovely rhyming scheme with lively imagery and pictorial quality.
Superb!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much RPSaxena, for a detailed review and award of all those lovely stars.
Comment from Bobby Jo
When waters dance, awesome poem. Thanks so much for showing us how romantic water really is. I have always loved water, in a pond or ocean. Great write.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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When waters dance, awesome poem. Thanks so much for showing us how romantic water really is. I have always loved water, in a pond or ocean. Great write.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you Bobby Jo.
Comment from ruminative scribbler
Your poem is beautifully presented, with a lovely picture.
The words flow and dance in this poem - an Octogram is a form I have never heard of, so thank you for introducing it - I shall have to try one someday :)
Best wishes,
Donna.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Your poem is beautifully presented, with a lovely picture.
The words flow and dance in this poem - an Octogram is a form I have never heard of, so thank you for introducing it - I shall have to try one someday :)
Best wishes,
Donna.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you Donna.
Comment from marliss222
Rhyming flows off the tongue very nicely, a smooth poem! I enjoyed it, and the feeling of wonder that came with it. The picture at the beginning is a wonderful start of the poem and gives the reader a feel for what the poem will be about. Although a bit vague in the message of the poem, it was quite interesting overall! Excellent job!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Rhyming flows off the tongue very nicely, a smooth poem! I enjoyed it, and the feeling of wonder that came with it. The picture at the beginning is a wonderful start of the poem and gives the reader a feel for what the poem will be about. Although a bit vague in the message of the poem, it was quite interesting overall! Excellent job!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you marliss222.
Comment from TamzinWhite
What a lovely way of bringing words to life on paper. 'When water dances' does it. 'Upon a pond where waves will prance' - I love it. I heard, recently, that to walk near water encourages meditative thought and is extremely uplifting. This poem is beautiful. Thank you.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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What a lovely way of bringing words to life on paper. 'When water dances' does it. 'Upon a pond where waves will prance' - I love it. I heard, recently, that to walk near water encourages meditative thought and is extremely uplifting. This poem is beautiful. Thank you.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you TamzinWhite. Yes, you can take that advice to the bank. I am so p,ease with the review and your award of stars.
Comment from tfawcus
The somewhat jerky rhythm of the octagram is an ideal vehicle for the dancing movement of the water. You also capture this beautifully in the alliteration and verb choice in your closing lines:
Will see the rising ripples flash,
Then throw the drops that make a splash
Upon a pond where waves will prance,
When waters dance.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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The somewhat jerky rhythm of the octagram is an ideal vehicle for the dancing movement of the water. You also capture this beautifully in the alliteration and verb choice in your closing lines:
Will see the rising ripples flash,
Then throw the drops that make a splash
Upon a pond where waves will prance,
When waters dance.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you tfawcus.
Comment from emjaihammond
This is definitely a favorite. I love the words to the poem and it certainly speaks to me in a rhythm one could enjoy dancing to. Such a fine rhythmic piece.
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This is definitely a favorite. I love the words to the poem and it certainly speaks to me in a rhythm one could enjoy dancing to. Such a fine rhythmic piece.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you emjaihammond.
Comment from KG Writes
Treischel This is a lovely piece. You have done yourself proud with your illustration. Your verse itself is so visual. The reader can almost imagine it right before their eyes. I too, would enjoy such a pleasant walk. Thank you for sharing. KG Writes
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Treischel This is a lovely piece. You have done yourself proud with your illustration. Your verse itself is so visual. The reader can almost imagine it right before their eyes. I too, would enjoy such a pleasant walk. Thank you for sharing. KG Writes
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you. So much KG.
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Treischel You are most welcome. Enjoy your day. KG Writes
Comment from TOMORAL
Upon a pond where waves will prance! What a lovely image that line brings to mind. Another of your fine pieces of poetry that bring beautiful thoughts and soothe the soul!
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Upon a pond where waves will prance! What a lovely image that line brings to mind. Another of your fine pieces of poetry that bring beautiful thoughts and soothe the soul!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much Tomoral. What wonderful thoughts expressed in your review. I am excited by your award of so any stars.
Comment from vapros
My very best grade this morning for a pleasant and lyrical verse about a pond in motion. The fountain provides constant changes on the surface, and you have written about it very well. Good work.
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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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My very best grade this morning for a pleasant and lyrical verse about a pond in motion. The fountain provides constant changes on the surface, and you have written about it very well. Good work.
v
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much Vapros. I am very pleased by your review and enthusiastic response as reflected in the award of stars.
