To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "When Love Died, I Died"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from tbacha58
Deep
Inside...
Everything's
Dying
That is such a beautiful deep sad poem ABOUT LOVE. PENNED IN A BEAUTIFUL WAY, WORDS THAT EACH READER WOULD FEEL WITH YOU. ITS THE PAST, TO BE FORGOTTEN. HUGS TERRY
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Deep
Inside...
Everything's
Dying
That is such a beautiful deep sad poem ABOUT LOVE. PENNED IN A BEAUTIFUL WAY, WORDS THAT EACH READER WOULD FEEL WITH YOU. ITS THE PAST, TO BE FORGOTTEN. HUGS TERRY
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Way in the past, all gone! mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
to loose one is rough when they walk away and don't look back iy breaks you heart but you still go on regardless of the out come you have to
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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to loose one is rough when they walk away and don't look back iy breaks you heart but you still go on regardless of the out come you have to
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Always forward, you are so correct. But, makes for something to write about!
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WELCOME
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WELCOME
Comment from rhonny
A very sad tale of the effects of love denied. Your words flow effectively to draw us into your world of pain. The colours you chose are a perfect choice.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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A very sad tale of the effects of love denied. Your words flow effectively to draw us into your world of pain. The colours you chose are a perfect choice.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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I am so pleased you enjoyed this especially the colors which I thought might help make it easier to read. Thank you!! mikey
Comment from Smoothiecool
a very clever Acrostic put together in this poem
your words have strength to make the reader feel the journey
also the images give insight to your feelings as you walk through this death of love one walks with you
Cheers SC
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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a very clever Acrostic put together in this poem
your words have strength to make the reader feel the journey
also the images give insight to your feelings as you walk through this death of love one walks with you
Cheers SC
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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What a nice review. Very complimentary and most appreciated. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from GracieAnn
michaelcahill, this is a powerfully emotive free verse write that expresses sorrow, anger, and the feeling of being used by someone who's love was shallow, if it could be called love. It is well done.
The only suggestion is that the white lettering bleeds over into your picture and whatever is on the right side of the page for the review's view. I had to highlight it with my cursor in order to see to read. I'm not sure how to format it for reading ease.
:0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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michaelcahill, this is a powerfully emotive free verse write that expresses sorrow, anger, and the feeling of being used by someone who's love was shallow, if it could be called love. It is well done.
The only suggestion is that the white lettering bleeds over into your picture and whatever is on the right side of the page for the review's view. I had to highlight it with my cursor in order to see to read. I'm not sure how to format it for reading ease.
:0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Oh. It doesn't do that when I call up the authors view. I will try to make it less wide or something. I just figured out how to make the layout larger. Well, I appreciate your wonderful review and compliments though. And very much appreciate you going to all that trouble to read it. I'll see if I can fix it. Thank you so much, mikey
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Cool. :0 GracieAnn
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I think i made it better though i am not sure. If you get a moment take a peak. mikey
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Oh dang, it still is literally all over your face. :( It's difficult if you never have the view that the review gets. I know you don't want to change your bio pic and info. This may ruin your lines in their balance if you shorten the length of each one - not dropping words, but returning the enter key sooner on your keyboard for each thought. It may be something that you'll need to ask FS about. I don't use that kind of format, but I have noticed it on other people's writes, like "reconciled". Wish I could help more, but I'm stumped. :0 GracieAnn
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it should be way down the page. on reconciled's pieces that is where it is on my screen when I call them up. maybe it is some strange thing on your computer maybe. does Reconciled's pieces come up that way? Cause they show up on mine way down the screen below everything. mikey
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Yes, his does and I told him once, but he may not have known how to fix it either. Let me look again.
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No change. Time to call the expert, Tom, on FS. Triechel, I think is his handle. :0 GracieAnn
Comment from Thatguypk
This is a very clever Acrostic, but more significantly, it's a piece resonating with a sense of loss and betrayal. It's so true that a broken relationship leaves one wondering if the relationship was EVER sincere.
Very well written.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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This is a very clever Acrostic, but more significantly, it's a piece resonating with a sense of loss and betrayal. It's so true that a broken relationship leaves one wondering if the relationship was EVER sincere.
Very well written.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Yes, good point. It gives you the feeling that you don't even know what is in your own brain let alone someone else's. Great insights, mikey
Comment from trevorletang
Wow what an incredible acrostic poem. You have mastered this sometimes very difficult style of poetry. Your message is strong and not lost by trying to retain the acrostic. well done this is truly magnificent.
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Wow what an incredible acrostic poem. You have mastered this sometimes very difficult style of poetry. Your message is strong and not lost by trying to retain the acrostic. well done this is truly magnificent.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Wow. That is one encouraging review. Thank you most kindly. Very much appreciated. mikey
Comment from CR Delport
In some relationships I think we kid ourselves in thinking that it is love, but if it dissipates after a while, I don't think that is love. Thanks for sharing another insightful poem.
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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In some relationships I think we kid ourselves in thinking that it is love, but if it dissipates after a while, I don't think that is love. Thanks for sharing another insightful poem.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Very true. I think you are on the money there. Thank you, mikey
