To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Stardust in Her Eyes"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from Sasha
This is marvelous. I love the change in color, really adds to the power of this one. It is amazing how our love sees us and how we see ourselves. Beautiful poem, superbly written. Definitely a 6 as far as I am concerned.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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This is marvelous. I love the change in color, really adds to the power of this one. It is amazing how our love sees us and how we see ourselves. Beautiful poem, superbly written. Definitely a 6 as far as I am concerned.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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I don't plan on removing her blindfold anytime soon! I am so delighted that you liked this. I enjoyed using the colors and thought it would help separate the two points of view. I am thrilled you thought it worded so well. What a wonderful review. Big smiles!! mikey
Comment from brentman99
A very nice poem, Michael. I love the change of colour from line to line as I think it does a nice job of adding emphasis or something more to the verse than if it were just plain old white on black. The image is a bit hard to see, but it is very fitting. I thought that the first part was talking about comets! Nice effort, as always. One small point bright-eyed. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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A very nice poem, Michael. I love the change of colour from line to line as I think it does a nice job of adding emphasis or something more to the verse than if it were just plain old white on black. The image is a bit hard to see, but it is very fitting. I thought that the first part was talking about comets! Nice effort, as always. One small point bright-eyed. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. I am just starting to figure out how to use some of the edit features a little better. Yeah, the image is a little hard to make out, I know. Good catch on bright-eyed, will fix that. thanks again, mikey
Comment from Meta4ors
Mcahill,
Super Free Style! Little boy's got mad skills, Ha-Ha! Many favorites include,"Blazing fast blistering past, ripples writing adventures, his beloved blind with love" I'm not going to put the whole poem here, Lol!! Great tempo, masterful alliterations (personal favorite) and the repetition of the little boy gives it so much flavor. Glad I could check this out. Feel free to stop meta4ors portfolio if you wish. Humor, romance and subject specifics with a few contest driven entries as well if you have time. This piece will do ya proud!
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Mcahill,
Super Free Style! Little boy's got mad skills, Ha-Ha! Many favorites include,"Blazing fast blistering past, ripples writing adventures, his beloved blind with love" I'm not going to put the whole poem here, Lol!! Great tempo, masterful alliterations (personal favorite) and the repetition of the little boy gives it so much flavor. Glad I could check this out. Feel free to stop meta4ors portfolio if you wish. Humor, romance and subject specifics with a few contest driven entries as well if you have time. This piece will do ya proud!
-meta
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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What an awesome review. So very appreciated. I have voted for a couple of your entries. I will wander by soon and check some pieces out. You have made my day. Thank you very much!! mikey
Comment from Nosha17
Lovely illustration to complement your poem. This is rather like an extra terrestrial poem with superb vivid imagery of celestial beings. You have a wonderful imagination and have used just the right language and imagery to create your poem. Faye
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Lovely illustration to complement your poem. This is rather like an extra terrestrial poem with superb vivid imagery of celestial beings. You have a wonderful imagination and have used just the right language and imagery to create your poem. Faye
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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High praise. So very appreciated. I am very pleased that you enjoyed this and with the great compliments and review. much thanks, mikey
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is an interesting poem comparing what she sees in (you?) as an adult versus what you see in yourself as a child.
a blazing-blast, blistering-fast, free-flight beam - that is quite a tongue twisting line but I like it:)
~teresa~
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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This is an interesting poem comparing what she sees in (you?) as an adult versus what you see in yourself as a child.
a blazing-blast, blistering-fast, free-flight beam - that is quite a tongue twisting line but I like it:)
~teresa~
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Yes. Kind of her seeing me as an adult but, me seeing myself as a little boy. Not too far from reality really. I worked on that awhile. Then another long while to make sure I could actually say it!! Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow Michael! The king of alliteration today!
lustrous light, blazing-blast, blistering, beam, free-flight,boisterous boy, Saturn's swirling!
And that is just in th first stanza! Vry cleaverly done my friend. Well done .Nancy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Wow Michael! The king of alliteration today!
lustrous light, blazing-blast, blistering, beam, free-flight,boisterous boy, Saturn's swirling!
And that is just in th first stanza! Vry cleaverly done my friend. Well done .Nancy
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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You have me so thrilled and happy! What wonderful compliments. Sometimes it is easy and sometimes it is so hard. This was hard. I took a long time and I am so delighted that you like it. Thank you so very much! Mikey
Comment from tbacha58
that skims rocks
from shore to distant shore unseen
watching ripples write adventures
on the water's flustered face
My dearest Mike, this verse gave me the imagination of you standing alone on a shore throwing your heartfelt towards the ocean with tears in your eyes. What a sensitive man you are, your spirit and soul are so CLEAR, so beautiful, so correct, so loving, so pure, so kind. God loves you Mike, He brought you up full of so much to share. My love to both of you. Terry What an amazing poem you wrote, they are getting lovelier to be read. xoxo
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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that skims rocks
from shore to distant shore unseen
watching ripples write adventures
on the water's flustered face
My dearest Mike, this verse gave me the imagination of you standing alone on a shore throwing your heartfelt towards the ocean with tears in your eyes. What a sensitive man you are, your spirit and soul are so CLEAR, so beautiful, so correct, so loving, so pure, so kind. God loves you Mike, He brought you up full of so much to share. My love to both of you. Terry What an amazing poem you wrote, they are getting lovelier to be read. xoxo
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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I am so happy you chose that part. That is the part I was so happy with. I kept nudging Donna and saying "Hey, read this, it's pretty good." hahaha!! Poor girl. So happy you liked this one so much. I will tell Donna you send your love. Love back from both of us, mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. Little boys first love is their mother. Mothers let them think they can conquer the world. Mothers thinks their sons are great. Their sons know it. Great work.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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I love the picture. I love the poem. Little boys first love is their mother. Mothers let them think they can conquer the world. Mothers thinks their sons are great. Their sons know it. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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I am so pleased that you liked this one. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from CR Delport
Love sure can make you do many things that you would not ordinarily do. No wonder they say that love is blind :) Another well written poem.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Love sure can make you do many things that you would not ordinarily do. No wonder they say that love is blind :) Another well written poem.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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That is something that works out very well for me! mikey
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
'wow and nicely done. I think this is a message in a message but I just love the simplicity of it. The cute little boy and his admiration and imagination of his lady love.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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'wow and nicely done. I think this is a message in a message but I just love the simplicity of it. The cute little boy and his admiration and imagination of his lady love.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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I am a lucky little boy. Glad you liked it. Thank you, mikey
