Ocean And Life
This poem says the relation between sea and life.77 total reviews
Comment from mperez
Nice work with your poem. I personally have never tried writing a poem while restricted to syllables but you have done a fine job here. With such few words I was able to grasp the overall message.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Nice work with your poem. I personally have never tried writing a poem while restricted to syllables but you have done a fine job here. With such few words I was able to grasp the overall message.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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thank you
Comment from zanya
This 5-7-5 has a nice ebb and flow 'feel' to it as it exhorts us to accept life as it unfolds for us on our earthly journey
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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This 5-7-5 has a nice ebb and flow 'feel' to it as it exhorts us to accept life as it unfolds for us on our earthly journey
Comment Written 28-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Comment from lakeport
Ocean and life, indeed the powerful ocean, I wonder how many ships are down there, that's very nice expressed 5/7/5
poem,thanks for sharing it,God bless you,lakeport.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Ocean and life, indeed the powerful ocean, I wonder how many ships are down there, that's very nice expressed 5/7/5
poem,thanks for sharing it,God bless you,lakeport.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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your welcome.Lakeport.
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your welcome.lakeport.
Comment from dipanjanm
very well written.The ups and downs of life, you have described perfectly. Specially keeping the format in mind, hats off to you. I just feel 1st line is missing a punctuation.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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very well written.The ups and downs of life, you have described perfectly. Specially keeping the format in mind, hats off to you. I just feel 1st line is missing a punctuation.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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thank you
Comment from Glasstruth
The waves show that life's a constant place where time waits for no one, and grabbing on will sometimes have the opposite effect. The ocean is such a perfect metaphor for life. Good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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The waves show that life's a constant place where time waits for no one, and grabbing on will sometimes have the opposite effect. The ocean is such a perfect metaphor for life. Good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
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thank you
Comment from MarjorieAnne
These brief lines use ocean tides to give a warning and instruction about handling life's ups and downs. I wonder why lines two and three start with a capital letter, but not line one. Using words like "don't" and "because" make this more prosaic than poetic.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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These brief lines use ocean tides to give a warning and instruction about handling life's ups and downs. I wonder why lines two and three start with a capital letter, but not line one. Using words like "don't" and "because" make this more prosaic than poetic.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Comment from GracieAnn
nivedh, this 5-7-5 Poetry Contest contest entry fulfills the requirements of the contest with perfect syllable count and engages a pithy piece of wisdom in not forcing something in life. The motion of the sea is palpable in the words you use. Nice. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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nivedh, this 5-7-5 Poetry Contest contest entry fulfills the requirements of the contest with perfect syllable count and engages a pithy piece of wisdom in not forcing something in life. The motion of the sea is palpable in the words you use. Nice. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
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Comment from Treischel
A lovely comparison of the ups and downs of life, with the ebbs and flows of the ocean done in an expressive 5-7-5 format that comes in a well composed package.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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A lovely comparison of the ups and downs of life, with the ebbs and flows of the ocean done in an expressive 5-7-5 format that comes in a well composed package.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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thank you
Comment from Jean Lutz
This says so much it so few lines. Sometimes it is better to just let go and ride the waves. I hope you will submit more offerings like this.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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This says so much it so few lines. Sometimes it is better to just let go and ride the waves. I hope you will submit more offerings like this.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2013
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thank you
Comment from emjaihammond
Hi. I am, more often than not amazed at how well some authors do with this form of poetry. This one has a beautiful message, or maybe it is a warning. We sometimes destroy what we cling to.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Hi. I am, more often than not amazed at how well some authors do with this form of poetry. This one has a beautiful message, or maybe it is a warning. We sometimes destroy what we cling to.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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thank you
