~Lenore Revisited~
She came to me last night...126 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Dean. You are some writer, my friend. Lenore is creepy and you like it that way. LOL..I like these lines in particular btw:
"A parchment, crumpled, in quivering hand, grasped betwixt my fist,
written whilst I slumbered, as my quill the sandman surely kissed.
Lenore, Revisited was all it said, then the raven turned to go,
taking flight atop my cozy bed, he cawed a note--so low."
I have no idea of how you do these graphics but they are amazing to me at least. Bob
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hi, Dean. You are some writer, my friend. Lenore is creepy and you like it that way. LOL..I like these lines in particular btw:
"A parchment, crumpled, in quivering hand, grasped betwixt my fist,
written whilst I slumbered, as my quill the sandman surely kissed.
Lenore, Revisited was all it said, then the raven turned to go,
taking flight atop my cozy bed, he cawed a note--so low."
I have no idea of how you do these graphics but they are amazing to me at least. Bob
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hah, thanks, Bob. Sometimes I wonder how I get it all in there, myself, LOL. I have to give a nod to Treischel for helping mw with some of the old English. His suggestions really made a big difference.
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Well done. I love this and think you are a very fine poet with a knack to package your work nicely with great music. I see a very fine ability to weave your work in the archaic
format. My only question is the proper use of the archaic thee, Thou, Thy and so on in place of the modern usage. I am not an expert and mention this because I have wrestled with this before. It is a minor query, sine as it stands I think it is beyond words. You are very talented my friend. Keep these gems up.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Well done. I love this and think you are a very fine poet with a knack to package your work nicely with great music. I see a very fine ability to weave your work in the archaic
format. My only question is the proper use of the archaic thee, Thou, Thy and so on in place of the modern usage. I am not an expert and mention this because I have wrestled with this before. It is a minor query, sine as it stands I think it is beyond words. You are very talented my friend. Keep these gems up.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Kingsrookviii, I appreciate that.
I used the "Olde English" in this particular poem to give a nod to Edgar Allen Poe, the amazing poet who wrote The Raven, which inspired this poem. I usually don't use it, but this one seemed to cry out for it.
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You sure served up a great tribute. Great job.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Nevermore will I doubt your talent; nevermore will I fear the fear; nevermore will my heart-door close to the raven's
squawking sneer" - doesn't make any sense but couldn't help dash in a rhyme- Your poem heightened my interest in the paranormal which is an experience you may have had. Poe was a macabre artist - I enjoy your poetry! Very interesting author notes, too!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Nevermore will I doubt your talent; nevermore will I fear the fear; nevermore will my heart-door close to the raven's
squawking sneer" - doesn't make any sense but couldn't help dash in a rhyme- Your poem heightened my interest in the paranormal which is an experience you may have had. Poe was a macabre artist - I enjoy your poetry! Very interesting author notes, too!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, Eleanor. That dream truly scared this white boy even whiter!
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I can believe that! ;0
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Dean Nice couplet
Now are you sure that Edgar Allen Poem send Lenore, and told you to write a poem about her.
It looks like Edgar wants you to continue on telling his poems through your skilled pen.
Gert
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hello Dean Nice couplet
Now are you sure that Edgar Allen Poem send Lenore, and told you to write a poem about her.
It looks like Edgar wants you to continue on telling his poems through your skilled pen.
Gert
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Gert. I don't know "who" sent her, but I pray they don't do it again! (LOL).
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So you didn't like the idea of been inspired so you could write such a good poem
which I liked
Gert
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Heh, I don't know. I'm just happy that it was only a dream, LOL...at least, I think?
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Smile
Dean
Comment from JM daSilva
I think you'll like this. Great poem, a sixer you deserve.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2013
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I think you'll like this. Great poem, a sixer you deserve.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2013
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Thanks, JM, that was great! I appreciate the fantastic rating and review, I'm really glad you liked it. That dream, it really shook me up!
I posted the video on my profile page, thanks again!
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Welcome. Great pleasure. I'm glad you like the video.
Comment from teafor2
Dean Kuck--At first your preface gave me pause, because I
thought "Lenore" had "visited" you in the form of succubus,
and you being the upstart citizen, albeit lover of horrific
"STUFF," that you took an inordinate amount of time trying
to get her off of you or you out of her (if you know what I mean).
After your initial fright...I hope it was good for both of you. :)))))) teafor2
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Dean Kuck--At first your preface gave me pause, because I
thought "Lenore" had "visited" you in the form of succubus,
and you being the upstart citizen, albeit lover of horrific
"STUFF," that you took an inordinate amount of time trying
to get her off of you or you out of her (if you know what I mean).
After your initial fright...I hope it was good for both of you. :)))))) teafor2
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hah, well, I don't know about her, teafor2, but it wasn't too great for me. I really scared the heck outta me! I turned on every light in my house. Thanks for the great review...
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You are welcome.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Dean,
It's getting dark outside and think it will probably rain. The perfect atmosphere for reading this poem.
'As my quill the sandman surely kissed' is a terrific line.
Such a delightfully spooky write inspired by a dream. Or was it? When we play with the supernatural, we open up portholes for spirits to mingle with us in one way or another.
So, I submit that perhaps your so called dream was really an alternate reality experience. Cool thought, huh? But it was probably just your subconscious mind... If I were your wife, I'd be tempted to leave some dirt on your floor tonight. Pleasant dreams!
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hi Dean,
It's getting dark outside and think it will probably rain. The perfect atmosphere for reading this poem.
'As my quill the sandman surely kissed' is a terrific line.
Such a delightfully spooky write inspired by a dream. Or was it? When we play with the supernatural, we open up portholes for spirits to mingle with us in one way or another.
So, I submit that perhaps your so called dream was really an alternate reality experience. Cool thought, huh? But it was probably just your subconscious mind... If I were your wife, I'd be tempted to leave some dirt on your floor tonight. Pleasant dreams!
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Ahhhhhhhh, don't give her any ideas, Louise. If she'd have done that after me telling her about the dream, even the next morning, I would have croaked over from a heart attack! (LOL)
Thanks for an outstanding review...
Comment from pickthorn
Ah, I think you have Poe's intricate structures down pat, Dean. He would be proud of you! He is also one of my favorites. I have always liked The Raven and this is a great follow up to it. (Did you really have that dream... and vision?) hmmm Maybe Lenore brought you a message from Poe, transferring this great poem.. do you think? :o)
pickthorn
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2013
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Ah, I think you have Poe's intricate structures down pat, Dean. He would be proud of you! He is also one of my favorites. I have always liked The Raven and this is a great follow up to it. (Did you really have that dream... and vision?) hmmm Maybe Lenore brought you a message from Poe, transferring this great poem.. do you think? :o)
pickthorn
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, pickthorn, I really appreciate it. And, yes, I really did have that dream (Nightmare!), and it scared the bejeezus out of me! No more reading Poe after ten PM for me!
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That makes the poem even more meaningful. I don't know if there is anything to what I've read about communicating with the dead, but who knows? :-)
Comment from phoenix13447
If I didn't know otherwise I would insist that you are a 'scary dude'. Such darkness in this poem I am glad it is still only early evening. May I suggest that you read something a little less ominous before you sleep in future. Nightmares are not good for the complexion!!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2013
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If I didn't know otherwise I would insist that you are a 'scary dude'. Such darkness in this poem I am glad it is still only early evening. May I suggest that you read something a little less ominous before you sleep in future. Nightmares are not good for the complexion!!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2013
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Nan, not too scary in the daytime, but everyone avoids me at night because I'm usually writing then, and I'm a dastardly beast when my concentration is broken. Ever seen the Shining, with Jack Nicholson? (LOL)
Thanks for the wonderful review phoenix13477!
Comment from amahra
Wow, what a dream or should I say nightmare. I love the poem for its great word choice and phrasing. It was so well crated, he actually reminded me of Poe a little. I loved the images; not at all as frightening as the others. I also love Beethoven's Moonlight Sonata. It went so well with the writing.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2013
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Wow, what a dream or should I say nightmare. I love the poem for its great word choice and phrasing. It was so well crated, he actually reminded me of Poe a little. I loved the images; not at all as frightening as the others. I also love Beethoven's Moonlight Sonata. It went so well with the writing.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2013
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Thanks a bunch, amarha, I'm really glad that you liked it. I appreciate your thoughts and comments.
