~Lenore Revisited~
She came to me last night...126 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline1616
Shivers up and down my spine. If only Stephen King had you as inspiration. WOW! Again, creepy.... very very creepy and fabulous!
Yeah, FanStory has me reading lots of poetry too. It's been wonderful and sad. Yesterday I read an absolutely beautiful poem a women wrote about being there as her frail aging mother passed from this earth. I was bawling for five minutes.
Your poetry has opened me to a realm in myself I did not know existed. It's dark and a bit scary. But the language is beautiful.
Just as when I read the King James version of the bible instead of the new English version... or whatever they call it. I forget.
I have this appreciation for the beauty of the language that entices my mind more to read.
Such it is reading your poetry. I love the subject, but am even more enticed by the language.
Thank you SO much for sharing this. It's great!!
Jackie
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Shivers up and down my spine. If only Stephen King had you as inspiration. WOW! Again, creepy.... very very creepy and fabulous!
Yeah, FanStory has me reading lots of poetry too. It's been wonderful and sad. Yesterday I read an absolutely beautiful poem a women wrote about being there as her frail aging mother passed from this earth. I was bawling for five minutes.
Your poetry has opened me to a realm in myself I did not know existed. It's dark and a bit scary. But the language is beautiful.
Just as when I read the King James version of the bible instead of the new English version... or whatever they call it. I forget.
I have this appreciation for the beauty of the language that entices my mind more to read.
Such it is reading your poetry. I love the subject, but am even more enticed by the language.
Thank you SO much for sharing this. It's great!!
Jackie
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thanks for checking out my revival, Jackie. This was one of the first poems I'd ever written and posted here on FS.
I sincerely appreciate your kind comments and six stars.
Have a fantastic weekend, my friend.
Take care...
~Dean :}
Comment from robyn corum
I wish I could peel back your skull and watch that brain at work. --sigh--
What a marvelous machine!
Forget the computer and all the modern devices - I'll take Dean Kuch's brain! (she cried)
I'm assuming Lenore said 'Nevermore'...? Loved it!
And I ADORED the bleeding rose, you bloody fool.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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I wish I could peel back your skull and watch that brain at work. --sigh--
What a marvelous machine!
Forget the computer and all the modern devices - I'll take Dean Kuch's brain! (she cried)
I'm assuming Lenore said 'Nevermore'...? Loved it!
And I ADORED the bleeding rose, you bloody fool.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Yeah, this is one of my very first poems I posted on FanStory in 2013, when I first began writing poetry, Robyn.
I simply dusted it off and reposted it as a revived post.
I'm really glad to know you enjoyed it.
Thanks for reading.
~Dean
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh damn...no six...I don't want to wait till tomorrow and forget this wonderful piece.
Excellent, haunting, mystical, one that sticks because of the imagery and flow.
Wow the master at work
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Oh damn...no six...I don't want to wait till tomorrow and forget this wonderful piece.
Excellent, haunting, mystical, one that sticks because of the imagery and flow.
Wow the master at work
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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This is one of my very first poems I posted on FanStory in 2013, when I first began writing poetry, Barb.
I'm really glad to know you enjoyed it.
Thanks for reading.
~Dean
Comment from Eric1
Hi Dean, this is a beautifully written poem in the mould of that other great poet Edgar Allen Poe, I don't read enough of his stuff but after reading your poems I feel it would be a bit of a let down my friend.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Hi Dean, this is a beautifully written poem in the mould of that other great poet Edgar Allen Poe, I don't read enough of his stuff but after reading your poems I feel it would be a bit of a let down my friend.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thanks for checking out my revival, Eric. This was one of the first poems I'd ever written and posted here on FS.
I sincerely appreciate your kind comments.
Have a fantastic weekend, my friend.
Take care...
~Dean :}
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You too Dean.
Comment from evilynne
Your dream resulted in a chilling piece of poetry. Your work is well written (as always). The artwork and music add an extra haunting touch. Sorry that I'm out of sixers right now. Evi
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Your dream resulted in a chilling piece of poetry. Your work is well written (as always). The artwork and music add an extra haunting touch. Sorry that I'm out of sixers right now. Evi
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thanks for checking out my revival, Evi. This was one of the first poems I'd ever written and posted here on FS.
I sincerely appreciate your kind comments.
Have a fantastic weekend, my friend.
Take care...
~Dean :}
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A dream that touched you deeply enough to take notice of is affecting your senses, it seems to be so real as if it happens for real. I was touched too.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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A dream that touched you deeply enough to take notice of is affecting your senses, it seems to be so real as if it happens for real. I was touched too.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thanks for checking out my revival, Sandra.
This was one of the first poems I'd ever written and posted here on FS.
I sincerely appreciate your kind comments.
Have a fantastic weekend, my friend.
Take care...
~Dean :}
Comment from Aussie
Ooh...what a dreadful critter. I liked the ye olde English in your poem. She wasn't a very nice Sheila (Oz for woman.) When we have a vivid dream (and can retain it) it makes for good fodder for poetry. Most enjoyable my friend. Some prophetic dreams can scare the pants off you!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Ooh...what a dreadful critter. I liked the ye olde English in your poem. She wasn't a very nice Sheila (Oz for woman.) When we have a vivid dream (and can retain it) it makes for good fodder for poetry. Most enjoyable my friend. Some prophetic dreams can scare the pants off you!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thanks for checking out my revival, Kay. This was one of the first poems I'd ever written and posted here on FS. Gungalo helped me with the rhyme and meter.
I sincerely appreciate your kind comments.
Have a fantastic weekend, my friend.
Take care...
~Dean :}
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Maybe Pam (gungalo) is still helping you :-) XX
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That very well could be, Kay.
Thanks so much again...
~Dean
Comment from tfawcus
What an astoundingly good opening line, "O'er satin veil, silk horizon's mists..." and then, when you followed it with "sunlight kissed black eyes, so darkly vast", I was hooked. The fact that one of my favorite piano pieces was softly playing in the background was a bonus. 'The Raven' is such a deeply atmospheric poem that I would be hesitant to frame another poem around its theme. However, you have managed to do so quite remarkably.
There are two minor things that you might like to re-visit.
In "t'was as if my voice, he doth not trust" you have a change of tense from 'was' in the past to 'doth' in the present. 'Didst' would be more consistent.
Also, throughout the poem you refer to the raven as 'him' except in the line "Its eyes--an ebony onyx, deep-- rolled back into its head."
Those minor edits apart, this is a fine poem. My congratulations.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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What an astoundingly good opening line, "O'er satin veil, silk horizon's mists..." and then, when you followed it with "sunlight kissed black eyes, so darkly vast", I was hooked. The fact that one of my favorite piano pieces was softly playing in the background was a bonus. 'The Raven' is such a deeply atmospheric poem that I would be hesitant to frame another poem around its theme. However, you have managed to do so quite remarkably.
There are two minor things that you might like to re-visit.
In "t'was as if my voice, he doth not trust" you have a change of tense from 'was' in the past to 'doth' in the present. 'Didst' would be more consistent.
Also, throughout the poem you refer to the raven as 'him' except in the line "Its eyes--an ebony onyx, deep-- rolled back into its head."
Those minor edits apart, this is a fine poem. My congratulations.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thanks very much for your suggestions and comments, Tony.
This was one of the first ever poems I'd ever written and posted here on FanStory, I dug it up and revived it, then reposted it as is. Gungalo, may she rest in peace, she helped me with the structure.
I'll be sure to make those edits you mentioned, and thanks again for reading.
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How I miss Gungalo.
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Oh, so do I Tony. She was a wonderful person.
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Oh, so do I Tony. She was a wonderful person.
Comment from danpald
Nevermore shall it be said
To repeat the word of dread
For it is hard to sleep with care
When the word is nevermore to be said
So with the poem we cast the dread
What if we read and dream instead
To hold for ever the dream of life
That calls for Leonore to return nevermore to life
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Nevermore shall it be said
To repeat the word of dread
For it is hard to sleep with care
When the word is nevermore to be said
So with the poem we cast the dread
What if we read and dream instead
To hold for ever the dream of life
That calls for Leonore to return nevermore to life
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Dan
Comment from Nika2016
Five stars for the poet who cannot fathom why he dreams of death and ravens when his signature is blood..Like Stephen King, he mistrusts his own shadow. King has books locked away that he cannot read penned by his own hand.So this was a fun jaunt through your nightmare...Lenore..There..I said it. Get over it. Smile. Great job!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Five stars for the poet who cannot fathom why he dreams of death and ravens when his signature is blood..Like Stephen King, he mistrusts his own shadow. King has books locked away that he cannot read penned by his own hand.So this was a fun jaunt through your nightmare...Lenore..There..I said it. Get over it. Smile. Great job!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Haha, thanks for taking a look at this, Nika. I sincerely appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Take care...
