Comment from ragamuffin

Excellent

Your presentations are always so well above and beyond average. I love Edgar Allen Poe. The man was a master of words and emotion. You've done his work quite an honor with your own in this piece. Quite the chilling image and feel comes from your work here. Well done!

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

Thanks very much, ragamuffin, I really appreciate that. I hope Poe would be proud. I truly admire the man's versatility. Although long dead and in the grave, his voice still speaks to us all after all these years.

Thanks so much, again!

Comment from brentman99

Excellent

A well-written poem that flows and rhymes nicely. The supporting picture and clip add to the overall feeling of the poem. Overall, a nice read. Thanks for sharing, Brent.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

Thanks for reading, Brent. It's very much appreciated!

Comment from Meta4ors

Excellent

Geez Dean,
So intense. As great as the poem was, I enjoyed your Author's notes even more. I do believe things/ideas come to us whilst sleeping. Your skill weaving dark story poems is amazing! In addition to all the great words and expressions, "Harbinger of sorrow" "Satin, Silk mist", "Quill kissed by the Sandman", many more! The photos/and or music always set the stage, perfectly. These are a treasure and well done!

Edgar Allen Poe-t, the 2nd!!!
-meta

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

Thanks a bunch, Meta4ors, I really appreciate that. The dream really sent a jolt through me. I began writing this right after it happened...

Comment from Sueellen11

Excellent

Now that's a haunting,, visited by the master poets desire,,, Lenora revisited,, to scary for my Dean,, but great write,, got goose bumps,, blessings to you,,sueellen

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

Thanks, SuemEllen. The dream really scared the bejeezus outta me!

reply by Sueellen11 on 19-Nov-2013

I bet it scared you,, I still got cold chills,,, the picture reminded me of a movie I saw as a kid,, about a a bride that just disappeared,, on her wedding day,,, set in about late 1800/ early 1900 they never found her body they thought the groom killed her he was killed by the people,, then they thought she threw herself on the cliff top as the creepy mansion sat on a cliff top shear drop,, the house went to ruin,, 100 yrs later a distant family member inherited the house,, they were fixing up the house,, they went up into the roof attic,, and there was a Hugh wooden and iron chest they open the chest and there she was still in her wedding dress,,, she was playing hi dings with the groom before the wedding,, climbed into the chest,, the lid slammed shut she was to small to life it and died in the chest,,, your poem brought the movie back so vividly,,scared the crap out of me,,blessings sue

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

Wow, I'll have to watch that. I've never seen it. See if you can remember the name of the movie, then get back to me. It sounds really creepy!

reply by Sueellen11 on 19-Nov-2013

Oh come on me mate,, I can't even remember my own name half the time,, your asking something here,, it was over 40 years ago,, I will ask mum in the morning she might remember,, if I can get the name of it I will let you know, , blessings sue

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

;)

Thanks, Sue Ellen. I thought I'd seen nearly every scary movie known to man, but I have never seen that one.

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Blimey, Dean - re: notes, I wish my nights were as eventful as yours. Hmm...maybe not. LOL.

Your posts usually make me jump when the music kicks in. For the first time I prepared myself, and it didn't arrive. :-)

"Oh raven, no Lenore lies here, she is now no more than dust..." Maybe a simple adjustment for better flow:

'she's-NOW-no-MORE-than-DUST'

I won't bore you with other meter suggestions, as this is thoroughly creepy and enjoyable as it is.

Excellent!

Cheers, Ted

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 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

Thanks for reading, Ted, and for that great suggestion. I have changed it. I really appreciate that, my friend. Many have said lately that I must not have enough confidence in my writing because I feel I have to add bells and whistles to make it appealing,. So, no music for this one. I wanted to prove that it could stand on it's own merit.

reply by Domino 2 on 19-Nov-2013

Thanks for your gracious reply, Dean.

Your writing is unique and interesting - with or without music.

Ted

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I love the artwork, those hands are haunting
solid use of rhyming couplets
I really like the proximate rhyme of murder/further
it's eyes, it's head - drop the apostrophes
good consonance and assonance in raven wavered
good consonance in parchment crumpled
what an eerie final stanza
Great detail that creates a creepy tone throughout
Brooke

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 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

Thanks very much, Brooke, much appreciated. I dropped those apostrophise too, thank you!