~Lenore Revisited~
She came to me last night...126 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
ok so you found another one of my ex girlfriends for the little film at the bottom how do you do it love your work my friend gazza
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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ok so you found another one of my ex girlfriends for the little film at the bottom how do you do it love your work my friend gazza
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Hah, yeah, gazza...she's a real sweetheart!
Thanks so much for the great review, my friend. Your reviews always crack me up about as much as your hilarious poetry does!
Comment from barkingdog
You can look at this visitation two ways. First you have a fine poem as a result. Secondly, you may think twice about reading Poe'work as a bedtime story. LOL
-I know your creed now, please, just go"(You hadn't closed these remarks.)
- Also, the ellipses don't seem necessary in the following:
'he tore...
...a parchment,'
unless you wanted a pause. It reads fine without a pause and enjambment carries the reader from one stanza to the next.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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You can look at this visitation two ways. First you have a fine poem as a result. Secondly, you may think twice about reading Poe'work as a bedtime story. LOL
-I know your creed now, please, just go"(You hadn't closed these remarks.)
- Also, the ellipses don't seem necessary in the following:
'he tore...
...a parchment,'
unless you wanted a pause. It reads fine without a pause and enjambment carries the reader from one stanza to the next.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, Ellen, and you're absolutely right. No more Poe before bedtime!
I'll get on those edits you gave me too, right away.
Thanks again.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Jeepers Dean - what ya trying to do scare the life out of me. Good god this nightmare, would have killed me for sure.
Then your clip below scared me half to death as well.
I deserve some chocolate now - I'd suggest no Poe past 6pm, maybe something a wee bit lighter. Though it has allowed you to scare us at FS:)
Great work my friend.
Thanks for sharing - I think:)
Maureen
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Jeepers Dean - what ya trying to do scare the life out of me. Good god this nightmare, would have killed me for sure.
Then your clip below scared me half to death as well.
I deserve some chocolate now - I'd suggest no Poe past 6pm, maybe something a wee bit lighter. Though it has allowed you to scare us at FS:)
Great work my friend.
Thanks for sharing - I think:)
Maureen
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Ha ha, thanks, Maureen, I sincerely appreciate that!
Nope, no more Poe for me before bedtime. In my defense, though, I fell asleep, right on top of my laptop, as I was trying hard to decipher Poe's structuring of The Raven. Just passed out like someone turned off a switch! I believe I'll start studying Frost, or Dickinson that late at night from now on...geesh!
Comment from 9999pool
Yes, I have read parts of "The raven" a few months back after I was told that one had to memorize the part of "The raven' in English literature class.
Why did Edgar wrote this piece? Was it the exact dream that you had before he penned in "The Raven" - there is an uncanny connection somehow, smiles.
Is that why the raven had been painted to be such a dark creature although in nature, the ravens are great parents, smiles.
As for me, I seldom dream because they will come to me somehow when I write. I got goose pimples as i tried my hand in a dark write (first ever) called "Insidious", smiles.
"Insidious"
Gruesome and horrifying images conjuring
The truth is out there terrifying
We tiptoe to the kitchen silently
Afraid there are ghosts lurking darkly
Did we hear those eerie sounds reverberating?
Somewhere a call woke us up inviting
No, it is not a dream at night
They haunt with gory intentions without sight
Intending to entrap our souls into the abyss
Dark and eternal fires surrounding our oasis
There is no escape as the devil took hold
Our evil deeds bought and sold for gold
There is not escape or exit route
The evil beguiling path has taken root
Each drip of treacherous blood glorifying humanity
Do boldly step forward admonishing evil in totality
Excellent wrtie and the word weaved was excellent and eerie too in your story. Smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Yes, I have read parts of "The raven" a few months back after I was told that one had to memorize the part of "The raven' in English literature class.
Why did Edgar wrote this piece? Was it the exact dream that you had before he penned in "The Raven" - there is an uncanny connection somehow, smiles.
Is that why the raven had been painted to be such a dark creature although in nature, the ravens are great parents, smiles.
As for me, I seldom dream because they will come to me somehow when I write. I got goose pimples as i tried my hand in a dark write (first ever) called "Insidious", smiles.
"Insidious"
Gruesome and horrifying images conjuring
The truth is out there terrifying
We tiptoe to the kitchen silently
Afraid there are ghosts lurking darkly
Did we hear those eerie sounds reverberating?
Somewhere a call woke us up inviting
No, it is not a dream at night
They haunt with gory intentions without sight
Intending to entrap our souls into the abyss
Dark and eternal fires surrounding our oasis
There is no escape as the devil took hold
Our evil deeds bought and sold for gold
There is not escape or exit route
The evil beguiling path has taken root
Each drip of treacherous blood glorifying humanity
Do boldly step forward admonishing evil in totality
Excellent wrtie and the word weaved was excellent and eerie too in your story. Smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, Ritchie. I can't say why I had such a dream, really, other than I was studying the formatting and styling of The Raven right before I had fallen asleep. It seemed so real!
Thanks for showing me "Insidious", as well. It was excellent.
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Hi Dean,
Welcome.
I am of the opinion that your wrtie is excellent from the standpoint of the language and the word weave it contained.
i am usually of of sixers as is now, so a Virtual ****** Stars if I may. Be assured my Virtual sixers are as good as the FS ones, maybe better, smiles.
There was a fine line between reality and a dream in this one as the raven appeared beside the bed. The dark rose was creepy too, yikes. Defintiely an excellent write to me.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment from elchupakabra
I really enjoyed this write, Dean. I thought your use of contracted words and the classic vocabulary was truly reminiscent of Poe's work and helped to accentuate your theme/dream. You also used really strong imagery and assonances within the linework such as the ebony onyx deep peep connection to really amp up the flow here. I loved it. Great work once again, Dean, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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I really enjoyed this write, Dean. I thought your use of contracted words and the classic vocabulary was truly reminiscent of Poe's work and helped to accentuate your theme/dream. You also used really strong imagery and assonances within the linework such as the ebony onyx deep peep connection to really amp up the flow here. I loved it. Great work once again, Dean, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, 'Chup. I'm really glad that you did!
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch
Poe really liked the dark side, I never really developed a taste for it though. Your poem is certainly in his mode, and filled with bleak dark imagery.
A spectral visit indeed. I'd say lighten up on the pre-slumber cheese consumption.
Patrick
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Hi Dean Kuch
Poe really liked the dark side, I never really developed a taste for it though. Your poem is certainly in his mode, and filled with bleak dark imagery.
A spectral visit indeed. I'd say lighten up on the pre-slumber cheese consumption.
Patrick
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Yeah, that, and never read Poe after ten o'clock at night! Maybe I should switch to studying Mark Twain instead, whaddaya think?
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Twain is much less troubling, but perhaps not Huckleberry Finn with his escape from the feud ...
Patrick
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Oh yeah, I almost forgot about that part...
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I always found Mark Twain's social commentary fascinating, though it wasn't until I read a lot more American history that I understood most of it. A fascinating man. Have you ever read the Australian author of the same period, Henry Lawson? His short story, The Loaded Dog is a side-splitter, and a commentary on the Australian 'digger' of his period. Most of his work is a fantastic window on Australia of the late 19th Century, but his descriptive prose is, like Twain's, unbeatable for putting the reader inside the scene and the story.
Patrick
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No, I haven't, Patrick. But I will seek him out now. Thanks for the recommendation.
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You can find The Loaded Dog online. But be prepared to have aching sides ...
Patrick
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Thank you, I will.
Comment from Dawn Munro
"L--e--n--o--r--e---..." Aaaahaaahaaahahahahehehe. Repeat after me-e-e-e-e.... Darn and tarnation, you're good at this! You're going to give me nightmares with this one, Dean. No kidding!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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"L--e--n--o--r--e---..." Aaaahaaahaaahahahahehehe. Repeat after me-e-e-e-e.... Darn and tarnation, you're good at this! You're going to give me nightmares with this one, Dean. No kidding!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Hah, thanks, Dawn. A nightmare is what inspired me to write this in the first place! Scared the livin' crap outta me (Yes...me!!)
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I believe it! Hmmm, maybe time for a change of pace. Let's see now, what can I challenge you with.... (*grin*)
Comment from Darkhorse555
really beautifully penned dear friend i loved the ending were a black rose never turns to dust very enjoyable piece of reading
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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really beautifully penned dear friend i loved the ending were a black rose never turns to dust very enjoyable piece of reading
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks so very much, my friend! I'm really glad to get your opinion on this one.
Comment from joneau2
Hmm, this was a scary poem ... so typical of your writing. But, I wonder, perhaps you are reading too much poetry (but that's not possible). I find it amazing that you have such a dark side, but equally a bright white side as evidenced by your spiritual writings. Ha, the everlasting battle between good and evil ... familiar, isn't it.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Hmm, this was a scary poem ... so typical of your writing. But, I wonder, perhaps you are reading too much poetry (but that's not possible). I find it amazing that you have such a dark side, but equally a bright white side as evidenced by your spiritual writings. Ha, the everlasting battle between good and evil ... familiar, isn't it.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Hah, yes, it sure is, John. I think I even make mention of that struggle in my bio on my profile page. It's always been that way for me. My wife often tells me, one day I can bring her to tears with what I've written, and the next make the blood freeze in her veins like ice water. She doesn't understand how I can "switch gears" like that. Heck, I don't fully understand it my self!
Comment from livelylinda
Halloween is over, big guy. . .But, the terror continues with creepy picture (where was the music?)and hair raising words of Edgar. The blood drop slowly falling from the dead and blackened rose is a very nice touch. Brilliant as usual from Mr. Kuch. Linda
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Halloween is over, big guy. . .But, the terror continues with creepy picture (where was the music?)and hair raising words of Edgar. The blood drop slowly falling from the dead and blackened rose is a very nice touch. Brilliant as usual from Mr. Kuch. Linda
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Linda, I am very glad you liked this one.
I decided not to include music with this one for a couple of reasons. One, because of Poe and his unique style, and two, because some have said that I must have very little confidence in my writing if I feel I have to include a musical score all of the time. So, I thought I'd let this one stand on it's own merits. You know, just to show 'em!
