Good Plan, Bad Timing
Even the simple plans need a little thought19 total reviews
Comment from TallySally
Beth, what a cute story, and well executed. Hit the prompt on all points, seamlessly. Liked the 'description' sentence you chose - sets up the story well. Light had dawned, but wasn't the sunlight ... great choice.
Nicely done,
God bless and my best,
Relda
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
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Beth, what a cute story, and well executed. Hit the prompt on all points, seamlessly. Liked the 'description' sentence you chose - sets up the story well. Light had dawned, but wasn't the sunlight ... great choice.
Nicely done,
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment Written 02-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much. I wrote that years ago and don't even remember it. I just got back on FanStory from about nine years ago and haven't posted anything yet. I hope to soon.
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Well, I hope you write, write, write. Will be looking for it.
Relda
Comment from rtobaygo
You did the prompt well. You were able to convey much to the reader in so many words as did you with the scene.
Take care,
Ray
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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You did the prompt well. You were able to convey much to the reader in so many words as did you with the scene.
Take care,
Ray
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much for the review. I've been away so long you probably don't even remember writing it. My apologies.
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Hey, Beth!
I hope this means you're back in action.
take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment from Samuel Dickens
Well, hopefully, they still had a great time. Young lovers need little else than themselves, anyway, do they? This is clever and amusing, Beth.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Well, hopefully, they still had a great time. Young lovers need little else than themselves, anyway, do they? This is clever and amusing, Beth.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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I appreciate the review although I'm about a year late in respondin.g. I've been away a while. My apologies
Comment from EMB
For people who sounded like they knew something about Sunset Rock, they sure didn't appear to know too much about Sunset Rock. Haha! At first, I thought you were gonna say that they forgot about daylight savings time. :)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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For people who sounded like they knew something about Sunset Rock, they sure didn't appear to know too much about Sunset Rock. Haha! At first, I thought you were gonna say that they forgot about daylight savings time. :)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thank you Edward. I've not ready anything you've written lately but I've been a bit behind. I'm trying to catch up.
Beth
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
Nice job with the writing. Well anticipated and well delivered. I like the sense of humor on the last couple of lines. Best of luck with the contest. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Nice job with the writing. Well anticipated and well delivered. I like the sense of humor on the last couple of lines. Best of luck with the contest. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hah, well, at least they had the right idea, and their intentions were good. However, my Grandma always used to tell me when I did something she didn't particularly care for..."The road to hell is paved with good intentions!"
Oh well, Dave meant well, and that has to count for something, right?
Great story. I hope they didn't freeze their arses off!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Hah, well, at least they had the right idea, and their intentions were good. However, my Grandma always used to tell me when I did something she didn't particularly care for..."The road to hell is paved with good intentions!"
Oh well, Dave meant well, and that has to count for something, right?
Great story. I hope they didn't freeze their arses off!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Thank you Dean. I appreciate the review and nice comments.
Smiles
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Sure thing!
;)
Comment from nelliesellie
That turned out to be a not so romantic morning,. I hope his partner forgave him. The mistake shown he had not brought only other girls to this romantic spot. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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That turned out to be a not so romantic morning,. I hope his partner forgave him. The mistake shown he had not brought only other girls to this romantic spot. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Thank you. I apprecate the review and your encouraging comments.
Comment from Leineco
OMG! This is so funny (though I am sure it wasn't for your family member...except maybe in retrospect when it became fodder for entertaining story telling LOL)
You did a nice job on this proscribed word prompt :-)
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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OMG! This is so funny (though I am sure it wasn't for your family member...except maybe in retrospect when it became fodder for entertaining story telling LOL)
You did a nice job on this proscribed word prompt :-)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm glad you liked the humor.
Comment from MarjorieAnne
This story has it all--characters, dialogue, setting and plot with a clever surprise ending. The required words are used well, though I might say "alarm clock" instead of "the alarm on my clock".
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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This story has it all--characters, dialogue, setting and plot with a clever surprise ending. The required words are used well, though I might say "alarm clock" instead of "the alarm on my clock".
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. You're right about the alarm clock.
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You're welcome
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Funny..........we all have 'duh' moments now and then. You certainly got all the required words, and used them very well in your interesting story. Good luck, Carolyn
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Funny..........we all have 'duh' moments now and then. You certainly got all the required words, and used them very well in your interesting story. Good luck, Carolyn
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Thank you Carolyn. I really appreciate the review and comments.
