Winter Is Here
Winter out wits the sun(shape Poem)29 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
fun shaping of the snowman with top hat and stick arms
good alliteration and strong verbs in bluster and blow
vivid descriptive detail with good sensory appeal
Excellent use of personification
good internal rhyme in places like done and fun and in tight and right
a delightful poem with great seasonal appeal
Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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fun shaping of the snowman with top hat and stick arms
good alliteration and strong verbs in bluster and blow
vivid descriptive detail with good sensory appeal
Excellent use of personification
good internal rhyme in places like done and fun and in tight and right
a delightful poem with great seasonal appeal
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much Brooke, was very fun to write. =} Rox
Comment from Righteous Riter
First of all I would like to say that I think this is a well thought out and prepared piece. I like the word choice. I like the description within the piece. I like the shape of the piece. I think you have done a great job with this piece. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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First of all I would like to say that I think this is a well thought out and prepared piece. I like the word choice. I like the description within the piece. I like the shape of the piece. I think you have done a great job with this piece. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much. Rox
Comment from ericawrites
This is a very good poem and a worthy contest
entry. I'm not exactly sure about the layout,
I think it detracts from your lovely rhyming
scheme.
Best of luck in the competition.
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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This is a very good poem and a worthy contest
entry. I'm not exactly sure about the layout,
I think it detracts from your lovely rhyming
scheme.
Best of luck in the competition.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much Erica. I just can't seem stop myself from makeing shapes. =}
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good personification of winter and a good display you have created of the snowman in his top hat. Very well done. You describe how children love the snow and the fun it brings them and how mothers would like to be rid of it. But whatever people think he tells us it is his time. Time for him to begin. In your last line you lose the personification - maybe 'Time for ME to begin' or something similar. But a lovely read Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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A good personification of winter and a good display you have created of the snowman in his top hat. Very well done. You describe how children love the snow and the fun it brings them and how mothers would like to be rid of it. But whatever people think he tells us it is his time. Time for him to begin. In your last line you lose the personification - maybe 'Time for ME to begin' or something similar. But a lovely read Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 08-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much Dorothy. =}
Comment from michaelcahill
a well written poem that meets the requirements perfectly succeeding where many have failed. love the form of this. very cool snowman. works fine with no picture, the poet has provided one. well done. gets my vote, mikey
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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a well written poem that meets the requirements perfectly succeeding where many have failed. love the form of this. very cool snowman. works fine with no picture, the poet has provided one. well done. gets my vote, mikey
Comment Written 08-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much Mikey. =}
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. The form enhances the piece. The word choice is strong. The tone is appropriate to the theme. Barbara
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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This is a wonderful poem. The form enhances the piece. The word choice is strong. The tone is appropriate to the theme. Barbara
Comment Written 08-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much Barbara.
Comment from nelliesellie
It does look like a snowman. You have winter as a fun playmate. He does not care what the old folks think. He just wants to see his playmates run about. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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It does look like a snowman. You have winter as a fun playmate. He does not care what the old folks think. He just wants to see his playmates run about. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much Nellie. =}
Comment from Dean Kuch
I really enjoyed this entry in the personification of winter contest. The formatting of the words into a snowman certainly took a great deal of effort, one would think, and I for one really appreciate that effort. it really makes the lovely words you've written stand out that much more!
Good luck...
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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I really enjoyed this entry in the personification of winter contest. The formatting of the words into a snowman certainly took a great deal of effort, one would think, and I for one really appreciate that effort. it really makes the lovely words you've written stand out that much more!
Good luck...
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Thank you Dean. I love the animated cartoon you put in your review. How did you do that?
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Ha, didn't anyone tell you? I'm a magician, LOL...;D
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No they didn't but I believe it. =}
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;D
Comment from Liilia
You describe winter really well. It's been a long time since I put coal in the eyes of a snowman since I live in Florida, but your poem brings to mind those days of youth when we didn't mind winter and looked for the fun side of it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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You describe winter really well. It's been a long time since I put coal in the eyes of a snowman since I live in Florida, but your poem brings to mind those days of youth when we didn't mind winter and looked for the fun side of it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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I live in Florida too, so this is make believe. =} Thanks so much.
Comment from jandeck
This is a great personification of winter with her dropping temperatures and beautiful snow fall. I loved the images of the children with sleds and snow men and also the cute word sculpture. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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This is a great personification of winter with her dropping temperatures and beautiful snow fall. I loved the images of the children with sleds and snow men and also the cute word sculpture. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much.
