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Stories of the Dreamtime

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Aboriginal myths and legends.

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Comment from country ranch writer
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back in the day of magic it was said if one went against God that they would loose the will to live and soon would die of the infliction brought upon by the wrong doing. The saying also goes what goes around comes back around two fold.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013


reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
    Thanks for reading - there is good and bad in all cultures. Black Australians have their own way of dealing with those who break sacred law (see my notes.) Of course, through white eyes - whatever you do comes back to you threefold. Cheers, Kay.
reply by country ranch writer on 08-Nov-2013
    AMEN
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
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Yes, he deserved exactly what he got an more. There is a Heaven and Hell and his heart was full of sin so I'm sure him and satan have gotten acquainted by now. This is very interesting. I'm of the opinion we need to leave each culture as God created them to be. God loves you and so do we.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013


reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
    Hello Nana and Janie, Thanks so much for reading - yes, leave the aboriginal cultures alone - unfortunately, it is too late for your mob and my mob - most are drinking and live on welfare. God bless you girls!
Comment from mermaids
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This story reads like a movie. You bring the history of Australia to life. Native people everywhere work with the environment,not against it like the white man. The rape incident is horrible and I feel for Maraboo.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
    Thank you my friend. My people were treated like slaves in those days. Now, they are addicted to alcohol, live on welfare, and have lost their pride in their country. Blessings, K.
Comment from Eigle Rull
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I see by your award covered profile that you know this business very well. I salute you my friend.

Wow! This was a professional write for sure, and if I had a six start I would give it to you without question. This piece was intriguing and exciting. It was informative and it was interesting. It definitely held my attention very well. I loved it my friend. It was fantastic.

Always with respect,

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 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
    I don't recognise your name - but I do appreciate your review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed the chapter (only 25 more to write!) Blessings, Kay. XX
Comment from adewpearl
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it's dire consequences - drop the apostrophe
bone at the enemy, meant - drop the comma
stole the aboriginal's wife - add the apostrophe for possessive
clothing, which soon chafed - add comma
took everything. Pretending - everything, pretending
and made attend school - made to
Picking up his rifle, he made - add comma
You explain the customs and beliefs and laws of the Aborigines well and contrast them effectively with the ways the white men tried to force on them
This is a tragic tale of how arrogant some cultures can be in forcing themselves upon others but also an inspiring tale of how indigenous people will fight to retain their culture, laws and beliefs even when being bullied with people who have more powerful weapons like guns. Brooke

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 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
    Brooke, Thanks so much for reading and editing; will make your suggested changes. It is a tragic tale - they are treated as second-class citizens, even today. What makes me so mad - they are the original land owners and the whites have gotten rich on their beautiful paintings e.g. white sellers of their work charge tourists up to $6,000 for a painting and the artist gets $1,000 if they are lucky! Bless you girl, have a good day. :-) One day I will learn how to put my commas in the right places, you have taught me much and given me the courage to attempt a novel!