Stories of the Dreamtime
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Bone Magic"Aboriginal myths and legends.
15 total reviews
Comment from aryr
Wow, this was intensely enlightening. There a definitely similarities to the beliefs of the Aborigines and of the Native American Indians. Also similar are the treatments of the Peoples, the cruelties, the harshness, the shame and belittlement. Countries so far away yet infested by the white man's ways. (I am going to bookcase this if you don't mind.) Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Wow, this was intensely enlightening. There a definitely similarities to the beliefs of the Aborigines and of the Native American Indians. Also similar are the treatments of the Peoples, the cruelties, the harshness, the shame and belittlement. Countries so far away yet infested by the white man's ways. (I am going to bookcase this if you don't mind.) Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Way back when the whites were just infiltrating our ancestors, the magic man of the tribe pointed a bone at an enemy. White or black eventually died. Today, tribal blacks live in the Northern Territories and when a member has done something very bad, he is speared in the leg - no more bone magic!
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Gosh darn, just a spear to the leg. Hey that is bad enough, I am glad there is no more bone magic.
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The times they are changing!
Comment from jlsavell
Hello sweet Aussie, once again you deliver an exceptional write. You take something of legends and turn it into a great story that can be read over and over.. loved it... jimi
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Hello sweet Aussie, once again you deliver an exceptional write. You take something of legends and turn it into a great story that can be read over and over.. loved it... jimi
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Jiminy Cricket, Thank you for reading, I am writing a novel of sorts - about our legends. Glad you loved it! Glad you are back on FS - missed you girl! Blessed be, Kay.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Kay. This is another fascinating addition to your aboriginal stories. I agree with your final sentence. There was a feeling of satisfaction when I read how the people got revenge for the rape and other horrors. Interesting that such customs were prevalent around the world... has to be more to it than story-telling. Great job. Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Hi, Kay. This is another fascinating addition to your aboriginal stories. I agree with your final sentence. There was a feeling of satisfaction when I read how the people got revenge for the rape and other horrors. Interesting that such customs were prevalent around the world... has to be more to it than story-telling. Great job. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 08-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Hello Bev, Thanks for reading and glad you liked the story. I agree, same customs were prevalent around the world. Unfortunately, the black man came off second best. Whites have a superiority complex! My grandmother was aboriginal. Hugs, Kay XX
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You're very welcome. Whites are not only grandiose, but lethal as well. :0) Bev
Comment from jmdg1954
More and more interesting material poured out from that"'land down. This is the sort of stuff you see in movies.
Well written so that it grips the reader and has the reader asking for more.
Good writing... John
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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More and more interesting material poured out from that"'land down. This is the sort of stuff you see in movies.
Well written so that it grips the reader and has the reader asking for more.
Good writing... John
Comment Written 08-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Good morning John, thank you for reading and glad you enjoyed. More tales to come. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from write hand blue
An interesting read about Aboriginal folklore.
I can understand this happening in the early days of the European colonisation of Australia with the material that was shipped out here.
I always had a lot of respect and sympathy for the Aboriginal population while I was there. They have problems with modern society.
Well written and engaging, held me to the end. Quite original and entertaining...
:) mel.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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An interesting read about Aboriginal folklore.
I can understand this happening in the early days of the European colonisation of Australia with the material that was shipped out here.
I always had a lot of respect and sympathy for the Aboriginal population while I was there. They have problems with modern society.
Well written and engaging, held me to the end. Quite original and entertaining...
:) mel.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Hello Mel. Thanks so much for reading, you obviously understand the problems with our culture today. Glad this held your interest. Blessed be, Kay.
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My pleasure... mel.
Comment from Jendowoz
He sure did and you'vr described the story of pointing the bone beautifully. It is so great to see you writing in honour of our Indigenous and I am so pleased to read every one you write. The story about the origin of the digeridoo is one I'm looking forward to, If you are allowed to share it of course. It is one of my favourite instruments to listen to.
regards, Jen
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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He sure did and you'vr described the story of pointing the bone beautifully. It is so great to see you writing in honour of our Indigenous and I am so pleased to read every one you write. The story about the origin of the digeridoo is one I'm looking forward to, If you are allowed to share it of course. It is one of my favourite instruments to listen to.
regards, Jen
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Hello Jen, Thanks so much for reading; the didge is an ancient instrument made from the branch of a tree - only men are allowed to play it. It is now made by whites (not really allowed) and sold on to tourists who think it is the real deal! That makes me mad! Glad you enjoyed chapter 6. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Jean Lutz
You have told a tale both informative and entertaining. Every culture has both good and evil. I am glad this is a free standing chapter for the sake of time (which I seem to find less and less for reading and writing), but I do hope to get back to some of the other chapters that I have missed.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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You have told a tale both informative and entertaining. Every culture has both good and evil. I am glad this is a free standing chapter for the sake of time (which I seem to find less and less for reading and writing), but I do hope to get back to some of the other chapters that I have missed.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Hello Jean, Thanks for taking the time that you have little of! All the chapters are free standing. Glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Cookie333
I find it fascinating to learn of the customs of others. I feel in tune with many of their teachings, to take only what's needed and to connect with the soul of the 'one' providing the sustenance, it really does feel like that.
thank you for sharing these K
well written and an excellent storyline
karen
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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I find it fascinating to learn of the customs of others. I feel in tune with many of their teachings, to take only what's needed and to connect with the soul of the 'one' providing the sustenance, it really does feel like that.
thank you for sharing these K
well written and an excellent storyline
karen
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Hello my friend Karen, So pleased that you enjoyed - you are a nature buff and so are my people - loads more stories to come. Thinking of you. Blessed be, Kay.
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I can't wait to read more of these K! You do such a fine job of showing the connection between the people and their environment. How they give thanks and appreciation for all that they take/use/are given.
karen
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We are the original land owners and our feet walk slowly across our sacred lands - every living creature is our brother/sister - we are Australia! :-)
Comment from mumsyone
Another interesting story, Kay, and I love the artwork, too.
Being white, the man who stole the aboriginals (aboriginal's) wife thought himself immune.
The children were separated from their mothers and made (to) attend school
One night, right on sundown, McLeod got it into his head to go and pick a ripe peach (as he called the young women)(.) he (He)was drunk as a skunk.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Another interesting story, Kay, and I love the artwork, too.
Being white, the man who stole the aboriginals (aboriginal's) wife thought himself immune.
The children were separated from their mothers and made (to) attend school
One night, right on sundown, McLeod got it into his head to go and pick a ripe peach (as he called the young women)(.) he (He)was drunk as a skunk.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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G'day Lois, Thank you for reading and editing - I will go back and sort it out. More stories to come. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Consider:
"... like little children. Cruel and arrogant, slave masters..
"The 'people' were FORCED...
"Every day the men from the Bindaloo tribe were chained together. Marched out to the fields, they hoed vegetables for the white man's tables. FIELDS repeated 2x
"...(as he called young women). Drunk as a skunk,he stumbled down the hill to where some women were cooking dinner.
"... men stared in horror, unable to stop their 'Boss Cocky' who was armed.
"Knowing what the enraged white man wanted, Maraboo, wife of Bindar, stepped forward.
"...obscenities at HER in pigeon..
"With lips split and body bruised, Maraboo's cracked ribs crunched every time she moved.
"...He stood up. Flames from their fire lit up the...
OMIT: "...that virtually cooked their skin.
OMIT: "The tribe was far more advanced in caring for the land and...IS IRRELEVANT...use it somewhere else.
OMIT: "...right on sundown,
"...power of the 'fire-sticks'(rifles) that the overseers..
Most interesting indeed. Suggestions only..no disrespect intended.
Regards:
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Consider:
"... like little children. Cruel and arrogant, slave masters..
"The 'people' were FORCED...
"Every day the men from the Bindaloo tribe were chained together. Marched out to the fields, they hoed vegetables for the white man's tables. FIELDS repeated 2x
"...(as he called young women). Drunk as a skunk,he stumbled down the hill to where some women were cooking dinner.
"... men stared in horror, unable to stop their 'Boss Cocky' who was armed.
"Knowing what the enraged white man wanted, Maraboo, wife of Bindar, stepped forward.
"...obscenities at HER in pigeon..
"With lips split and body bruised, Maraboo's cracked ribs crunched every time she moved.
"...He stood up. Flames from their fire lit up the...
OMIT: "...that virtually cooked their skin.
OMIT: "The tribe was far more advanced in caring for the land and...IS IRRELEVANT...use it somewhere else.
OMIT: "...right on sundown,
"...power of the 'fire-sticks'(rifles) that the overseers..
Most interesting indeed. Suggestions only..no disrespect intended.
Regards:
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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G'day! Stephen, Thank you for taking the time to edit my story. I am a learner in the field of stories. Take into consideration that we speak in regional dialect. I have problems with American English and I guess you have trouble reading Australian grammar? This is chapter 6 and I am new to writing (poems on FS yes, novel, no!) Pleased with your interest. Cheers, Kay.
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Dear Kay: Keep at it. For helpful hints go to SPITFIRE's portfolio..last 2 posts. AS for myself I'm doing 100 poems on America. #55/56 out now. Will be away 3 days.
XX Steve C
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Stephen, I love to write about my land but I think that I will keep it simple and just write poetry! :-)
