To Cherish Thorns
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Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
An so it is. In life the hardest role to play is being oneself.
Not being confident of his own worthiness, man seeks to copy and emulate those who are often on pillars because self-serving bravado.
But many are the side effects when trying to copy the affects of those who seem most worthy.
Although the "Green green Grass of Home is a welcome sight, the grass on the other side of the fence, looking more enticing and fulfilling, may be only days away for infestation by the locust's.
Neither a borrower nor a lender be" ;"To thine own self be true") and Act 2 Scene 2 Hamlet.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Excellent.
An so it is. In life the hardest role to play is being oneself.
Not being confident of his own worthiness, man seeks to copy and emulate those who are often on pillars because self-serving bravado.
But many are the side effects when trying to copy the affects of those who seem most worthy.
Although the "Green green Grass of Home is a welcome sight, the grass on the other side of the fence, looking more enticing and fulfilling, may be only days away for infestation by the locust's.
Neither a borrower nor a lender be" ;"To thine own self be true") and Act 2 Scene 2 Hamlet.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Most insightful and thought provoking comments. So pleased you liked my piece. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Cookie333
The reader senses that the writer wishes that those imaginary moments he/she created for the reader were true, or at least perhaps that the reader might read within those words. I must admit, my mind took a bit of a deviant turn with the 'naked/collar' image, but I shall go no deeper than that
Thanks Mike
Jaren
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The reader senses that the writer wishes that those imaginary moments he/she created for the reader were true, or at least perhaps that the reader might read within those words. I must admit, my mind took a bit of a deviant turn with the 'naked/collar' image, but I shall go no deeper than that
Thanks Mike
Jaren
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Should have warned your husband!! Oh well. Too late. ha! Glad you liked it. Isn't that a cute picture of me? mikey
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So was that a self portrait? Or just you before your 'snicker candy bar? Haha good one!
Comment from amanda98653
Another awesome one, Mikey:)
"when my heart was a cathedral made of organ pipes shinning brass tubes untarnished"
A brilliant metaphor you've written there. Very unique.
The words are lyrical and go well with the flow.
very nice use of enjambment- depicting stream of consciousness.
"I am hungry tarnished and alone"
I am certain that your hunger ain't related to lack of food to eat..
it's more of an emptiness..a vacancy..something's missing in your life..thus making you feel alone..
"I remember being poetic long ago"
that's why you say "long ago"..it's no long there with you.
"when my heart was a cathedral"
the word "was" suggests the past..
the existence of " colorful dreams" is gone
it's the past.
you want them back (just my interpretation)..
that's why you're using "hunger"..you're striving..trying to get back something from the past..something that fulfills your life purpose and make you feel less lonely.
Just an interpretation from me:)
I enjoyed reading it.
Hugs
Amanda
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Another awesome one, Mikey:)
"when my heart was a cathedral made of organ pipes shinning brass tubes untarnished"
A brilliant metaphor you've written there. Very unique.
The words are lyrical and go well with the flow.
very nice use of enjambment- depicting stream of consciousness.
"I am hungry tarnished and alone"
I am certain that your hunger ain't related to lack of food to eat..
it's more of an emptiness..a vacancy..something's missing in your life..thus making you feel alone..
"I remember being poetic long ago"
that's why you say "long ago"..it's no long there with you.
"when my heart was a cathedral"
the word "was" suggests the past..
the existence of " colorful dreams" is gone
it's the past.
you want them back (just my interpretation)..
that's why you're using "hunger"..you're striving..trying to get back something from the past..something that fulfills your life purpose and make you feel less lonely.
Just an interpretation from me:)
I enjoyed reading it.
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This is so much fun being around artists that understand me. I remember growing up around blank stares and rolling eyes. Wonderful analysis that is everything I had in mind. I love reading your review. It really delights me hearing such a perfect understanding. thank you very much. the old monkey is smiling now. mikey
Comment from Lylise
Sins of youth or survival of youth? I think because in the end you are 'hungry, tarnished and alone' that you have expended a great deal of yourself in the grand lie. Busted.
With your writing it is difficult to tell if it is biographical or not. You pull from both sides of your brain so well. Either way, you are no liar.
I love your bold presentation. This I think means that this post is important to you and you want it to be in the reader's face from the second the link is clicked.
"...When my heart was a cathedral.." Man, this is such a beautiful phrase! The content of this free verse is easily read and consumed yet is strong in your style. Always your style.
This is a strong write, Michael, and yet another object from your chest greets the light of day. Or the firing squad depending on how the stars fly.
Excellent. Lynda
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Sins of youth or survival of youth? I think because in the end you are 'hungry, tarnished and alone' that you have expended a great deal of yourself in the grand lie. Busted.
With your writing it is difficult to tell if it is biographical or not. You pull from both sides of your brain so well. Either way, you are no liar.
I love your bold presentation. This I think means that this post is important to you and you want it to be in the reader's face from the second the link is clicked.
"...When my heart was a cathedral.." Man, this is such a beautiful phrase! The content of this free verse is easily read and consumed yet is strong in your style. Always your style.
This is a strong write, Michael, and yet another object from your chest greets the light of day. Or the firing squad depending on how the stars fly.
Excellent. Lynda
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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I keep forgetting I am surrounded by artists. I am so used to blank stares that people understanding me still surprises. Your review would make me blush were my blood not a black viscous oil. mikey
Comment from CR Delport
Ok, I must admit. I have no idea what this poem is about. I can probably makes something up, but don't know what your thoughts was behind it though. It is well written though.
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Ok, I must admit. I have no idea what this poem is about. I can probably makes something up, but don't know what your thoughts was behind it though. It is well written though.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
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A lot of pieces don't really mean anything specific exactly. Just kind of feelings of getting old and regrets for being foolish in the past. things like that. A lot of the interpretation is just what you said: making something up! glad you liked the writing. mikey
Comment from ann marie mazz
good morning mikey
exceuse me
good morning mr. free verse
have a seat
let me ramble for a moment
this is a six star
why
certain elements of poetry are
words emotion and illusion
this entry has that
the free verse is fabulous and always will be
the theme has merit and a message
equally so are your chosen words
your very carefully crafted words
they make the theme come alive with emotion
I would never think or begin to take those words apart
thank you for sharing your talent
wonderful work and execution in all areas
never did you stray from the excellent title
have a great morning
ann marie
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good morning mikey
exceuse me
good morning mr. free verse
have a seat
let me ramble for a moment
this is a six star
why
certain elements of poetry are
words emotion and illusion
this entry has that
the free verse is fabulous and always will be
the theme has merit and a message
equally so are your chosen words
your very carefully crafted words
they make the theme come alive with emotion
I would never think or begin to take those words apart
thank you for sharing your talent
wonderful work and execution in all areas
never did you stray from the excellent title
have a great morning
ann marie
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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I love that! Mr. Free Verse. I need a costume!! Stopping crime by befuddling the criminal with unexpected twists and turns while my trusting partner slaps the cuffs on!! I am so happy that you enjoyed my piece and understood it so perfectly. I shall have a great morning after reading this wonderful encouraging review. thank you so very much. I will be smiling all day. mikey
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you are most welcome
truly
the credit belongs to you
your words tell a story
I see and hear so much humanity within them
be proud of this entry
have a wonderful afternoon
ann marie
Comment from Sueellen11
Micky where did you get that poor worn out picture of that monkey,,, it is sad but goes with your write,,I see past, present and future within your poem,,, and a present tiredness in the subjects heart and soul,, wanting the years of youth,,, and its Wayness ,, but knowing a time in youth that was wasted,,, but the present bring tiredness only to be rejuvenated in its travel to the future,, where the heart and soul,, is no longer weary,,sorry for going on,, Gret write,,,blessings,,suellen
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Micky where did you get that poor worn out picture of that monkey,,, it is sad but goes with your write,,I see past, present and future within your poem,,, and a present tiredness in the subjects heart and soul,, wanting the years of youth,,, and its Wayness ,, but knowing a time in youth that was wasted,,, but the present bring tiredness only to be rejuvenated in its travel to the future,, where the heart and soul,, is no longer weary,,sorry for going on,, Gret write,,,blessings,,suellen
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
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You are totally on the same page. I was looking for pictures of monkeys performing acrobatics. ha! I don't know what he was doing in that mix but, he was perfect. So glad you liked this, mikey
Comment from reconciled
Brilliant writing brother....-smile- ..always spark a smile when reading you....Yea, this alone shit will drive a guy crazy. ....I must say I'm I'm tired of trying to pretend I enjoy it..... Hey...you ever see a movie called "Lars and the real girl"....ahh just doing some deeper contemplating lately...forgive me. alright...buckle up its a safari out there....love Michael
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Brilliant writing brother....-smile- ..always spark a smile when reading you....Yea, this alone shit will drive a guy crazy. ....I must say I'm I'm tired of trying to pretend I enjoy it..... Hey...you ever see a movie called "Lars and the real girl"....ahh just doing some deeper contemplating lately...forgive me. alright...buckle up its a safari out there....love Michael
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Alone is good to a point. But, when it ceases to be a choice then.... or it is everyone else's choice....worse! Haven't seen that sounds interesting. I got my buddy in the picture to protect me or at least to make me look better. mikey
Comment from kenni
I really like this and think the picture of the weary monkey is the perfect accompaniment for the jaded soul in witness. The first stanza's describes the exhalation of youth, and the second--a flagrant misuse of power, the finale an ensemble of self revealing and repenting thought of the misspent youth, and lonely soul. I like the bold imagery and language of the poem. The entire work, art and verse is good enough to frame. kenni
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I really like this and think the picture of the weary monkey is the perfect accompaniment for the jaded soul in witness. The first stanza's describes the exhalation of youth, and the second--a flagrant misuse of power, the finale an ensemble of self revealing and repenting thought of the misspent youth, and lonely soul. I like the bold imagery and language of the poem. The entire work, art and verse is good enough to frame. kenni
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This is a wonderful review to read indeed. You understand perfectly which is the best news a poet can possibly hear. I am most delighted that you enjoyed my piece. I thank you very kindly for your insights and very encouraging comments, mikey
Comment from rouskin
Wow... Such a confession, such a happy
life and incredible artwork. The crossroad of our
life ...Some of us are looking exactly like your fellow
from the artwork. From my point of view it is just a simple break, not more than 12 bars and your cathedral will be
filled with music again.
Your poem deserves at least 6* Next Sunday I will edit my review and you will get them.
I couldn't wait till then
to tell you how I'm feeling about your write.
Have a nice week.
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Wow... Such a confession, such a happy
life and incredible artwork. The crossroad of our
life ...Some of us are looking exactly like your fellow
from the artwork. From my point of view it is just a simple break, not more than 12 bars and your cathedral will be
filled with music again.
Your poem deserves at least 6* Next Sunday I will edit my review and you will get them.
I couldn't wait till then
to tell you how I'm feeling about your write.
Have a nice week.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
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Oh. I will gladly take the praise and wonderful review now. So pleased you liked this. That picture is a kick. I love it. Thank you so kindly, mikey
