Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

A very well written Lune poem.
Cleverly crafted to suit your chosen picture and a fine picture it is.
Those beautiful rich colours sit there proudly for all to see and are really eyecatching.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013

Thanks Shirley

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

A beautiful array of flowers and grains blowing in the wind - opening a showcase of nature's beauty atop a welcoming pillar.
Visitors will like the welcome this beauty show brings to them. In hues of yellow, red, brown and green, this bouquet will bring a happy feeling in our hearts, smiles.
Cheerio, good write, Ritchie. :))

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013

Thanks Ritchie. Also, flying the flag is known as "showing the colors". The nickname of the US flag is "Old Glory". So grains and Glory blowing in the wind and showing colors.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Thank you for that little piece of information. it was informative.

A nice little write, and a complimentary colourful image.

I like the colours in amongst the concrete.

A great image which depicts the subject matter.

Short, sweet , simple.

Well done,

RG

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013

Thank you RG. Just a Lune for Lunatics

Comment from Sueellen11

Excellent

Well done true to its form and count,,you know I have never written a lune,, how odd,,, but I enjoyed this one,,, nice picture,,,what a great potted array of coloured plants,,, ,, blessings,,,sueellen

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013

Thank you Shirley. You should give one a try, I'm sure you'd do well.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent lune meeting the line/ syllable requirements of the form. It expresses a coherent thought. While the alliteration in the third line is good I am not sure of the meaning of "grains"
Preston

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013

Thanks Preston, the grains refers to the grass seeds bent and blowing at the top of those flowers, just like the flag in the background.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

A lune poem with some irony. And it's in the photograph too. Lovely picture. Great Lune. Creative with good visual imagery. Nice work.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013

Thank you sunnnilicious. I'm glad you fought the irony.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Does a lune-master qualify to be a LUNE-atic??

I love .. grains and GLORY .. it says it all! :)

Hurrah for autumn!

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013

Thanks Sonali. Very good question. I do think you on to something there.

Comment from FrannyG

Excellent

I love this lune and appreciate your explanation of what it is. This one is superb and the inspiration from the photo is clear. I love 'colours show/ in grains of glory'. A great metaphor. Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013

Thank you FrannyG

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Your poem is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013

Thank you c_lucas

reply by c_lucas on 24-Oct-2013

You're welcome,