History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "When Bugles Blow"Poems that tell stories of long ago
17 total reviews
Comment from The Death
Hi,
You have penned an excellent.
The theme is very different.
Excellent rhyming throughout and nice flow.
Nice use of alliteration throughout.
You did an amazing work !
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Hi,
You have penned an excellent.
The theme is very different.
Excellent rhyming throughout and nice flow.
Nice use of alliteration throughout.
You did an amazing work !
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much Anupam.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Treischel,
This is a wonderful poem and I enjoyed it from the first line t the last. Your author's notes are informative. Your rhyming scheme is solid and gives the lines a lilting quality.
The ground between is choking
With mortal clenching fear.
Officers, to the charge provoking
Reluctant troopers at the rear,
When bugles blow.
I like the entire poem but the above verse is especially powerful. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Hi Treischel,
This is a wonderful poem and I enjoyed it from the first line t the last. Your author's notes are informative. Your rhyming scheme is solid and gives the lines a lilting quality.
The ground between is choking
With mortal clenching fear.
Officers, to the charge provoking
Reluctant troopers at the rear,
When bugles blow.
I like the entire poem but the above verse is especially powerful. Well done, chey
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you Chey. I like to read about the Civil War.
Comment from CornishChick
A lot of pathos in your words. Well done. And a lot of depth. I particularly LOVE the last stanza. So true. "Best Guy" doesn't always win. Just the one who "doesn't yield." So well put! I do have to point out (can't help myself because this war is my 'specialty') that the war was NOT fought over slavery. Then, as now, the politicians masked their true goals w/ a common hot spot.
No reflection on your talent. The poem takes me to the battlefield. I have visited and studied many.
As usual.... fantastic work
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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A lot of pathos in your words. Well done. And a lot of depth. I particularly LOVE the last stanza. So true. "Best Guy" doesn't always win. Just the one who "doesn't yield." So well put! I do have to point out (can't help myself because this war is my 'specialty') that the war was NOT fought over slavery. Then, as now, the politicians masked their true goals w/ a common hot spot.
No reflection on your talent. The poem takes me to the battlefield. I have visited and studied many.
As usual.... fantastic work
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thank you. I agree. I went with the common interpretation, I know it was about States rights and that the South felt shut out of (ignored) by the government.
Comment from brentman99
An interesting poem with a good picture. I like the story it tells and find no fault with the format. It seems to flow well to me. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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An interesting poem with a good picture. I like the story it tells and find no fault with the format. It seems to flow well to me. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you Brent.
Comment from SteveY
Boy ain't that the truth! No wonder God has decided to use trumpets to announce His coming! The end of death and dying! Great job with this one.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Boy ain't that the truth! No wonder God has decided to use trumpets to announce His coming! The end of death and dying! Great job with this one.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you SteveY. Very good point.
Comment from KG Writes
Treischel I have been hoarding my sixes but do feel that this one is well deserved. Just a great piece. I think your five stanzas are just right. Enjoyable read. Well done. KG Writes
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Treischel I have been hoarding my sixes but do feel that this one is well deserved. Just a great piece. I think your five stanzas are just right. Enjoyable read. Well done. KG Writes
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank yoU very much KG Writes. I an honored you chose my poem to bestow it upon.
Comment from Selina Stambi
When bugles blow. ... this short, clipped refrain is very effective - a sort of bell-knell.
I could see the battlefield in my mind's eye, oh, skillful poet-tale-teller!
Sonali
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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When bugles blow. ... this short, clipped refrain is very effective - a sort of bell-knell.
I could see the battlefield in my mind's eye, oh, skillful poet-tale-teller!
Sonali
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sonali. I bow deeply to your accolade.
Comment from adewpearl
I like the abab rhyming with the additional refrain line
good alliteration in bugles blow
and in bloody battlefields
a thoughtful look at the price of victory in war
Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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I like the abab rhyming with the additional refrain line
good alliteration in bugles blow
and in bloody battlefields
a thoughtful look at the price of victory in war
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you Brooke, you're a gem.
Comment from robina1978
Nice photo you made of this historical play. And I liked the form of the poem, did you invent it yourself? Sounds and looks good. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Nice photo you made of this historical play. And I liked the form of the poem, did you invent it yourself? Sounds and looks good. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you Ine, yes, just experimenting with form.
Comment from Sueellen11
Yes friend,,, the civil war was a bloody war,,, how the just marched to their deaths,,, their was a great movie on the civil,,, where the first platoon of all African Americans who took the hill,,, 90% of them were wiped out even their white platoon leader,,, oh what was that movie call,,,,anyway,,, your poem brought back my small knowledge on civil war,, being from Australia,,, Great write,,blessings,,sueellen. Ahhh got it,,, the movie was Glory
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Yes friend,,, the civil war was a bloody war,,, how the just marched to their deaths,,, their was a great movie on the civil,,, where the first platoon of all African Americans who took the hill,,, 90% of them were wiped out even their white platoon leader,,, oh what was that movie call,,,,anyway,,, your poem brought back my small knowledge on civil war,, being from Australia,,, Great write,,blessings,,sueellen. Ahhh got it,,, the movie was Glory
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sueellen. Yes, I was going to say Glory, but you came up with it on your own. That was an excellent movie.
