Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

As he thought about the morrow, - add comma
Kay, just a heads up to let you know you released this before you were finished. Let me know when it's finished and I'll review the rest of it :-) Brooke
only men are allowed to visit, a ring of stones - replace the comma with a semicolon or period
Nor, are they allowed to play - drop the comma
a special meal for the men, on their return - change comma to period
do dance at the gathering, but - add comma
sought shelter, he was - change to period or semicolon
surrounded Gindee, and - add comma
I really like this story and the moral it teaches. You describe the ceremony and its purpose in excellent detail. I am really enjoying and learning from this series. Brooke


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 Comment Written 16-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013

Hello Brooke, I don't know why this was released - no where near finished. Thanks, K.

reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013

Thank you Brooke; glad your are enjoying the little stories. I will edit. Blessings, Kay.