Stories of the Dreamtime
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Bora Ring."Aboriginal myths and legends.
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Comment from aryr
This was once again a fantastic chapter. It was very educational in describing the activities and the life style of the tribe. It was a great shame that Gindee was so self centered, selfish and did not learn the true values that had been given to him. It provided the basis for so many truths. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This was once again a fantastic chapter. It was very educational in describing the activities and the life style of the tribe. It was a great shame that Gindee was so self centered, selfish and did not learn the true values that had been given to him. It provided the basis for so many truths. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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The bora ring is still evident today. Ceremonies are held in sacred places. Coroberres they are called. For boys becoming men (their chest is scarred) bird dances for rain, birth celebrations and giving Bahaime thanks for food etc.
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As it should be, life and progress should be celebrated.
Comment from Alan K Pease
A good story of the coming of age in the Australian aboriginal culture. Unfortunately the young man did not follow the rules of his tribe nor of his god's on becoming a man and was banished from his tribe - transformed into his totem to be hunted by his own people. A fine story Aussie identifying your interests in your homeland's peoples.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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A good story of the coming of age in the Australian aboriginal culture. Unfortunately the young man did not follow the rules of his tribe nor of his god's on becoming a man and was banished from his tribe - transformed into his totem to be hunted by his own people. A fine story Aussie identifying your interests in your homeland's peoples.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Alan, Our culture goes back 54.000 years. These stories have been handed down through the families - we have no written language. The First Australians used cave paintings to illustrate such events as the British coming into Botany Bay - in the caves you can see the paintings of the First Fleet in 1788. My grandmother was aboriginal. Thank you for reading :-) Kay. XX
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Wow,this was awesome. Much of it is we're such cultural truth. I'm sure the fiction part is the boy being turned into a kangaroo. Very interesting story. I'm sure why your posts are being sent to us. I'm going out and check again and try accept you again and see what it does. God loves you and we do too.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Wow,this was awesome. Much of it is we're such cultural truth. I'm sure the fiction part is the boy being turned into a kangaroo. Very interesting story. I'm sure why your posts are being sent to us. I'm going out and check again and try accept you again and see what it does. God loves you and we do too.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Just go to my portfolio and click 'become a fan' - glad you enjoyed chapter 4! Blessed be you two XX.
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It told me I was already a fan. God loves you and I do too. Nana
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Kay,
Sorry I am a bit behind in my reviewing:)
This is an impressive post and so well penned. I loved your ability to teach me more about the ingenious tribes of the outback.
Excellent imagery, story telling, and deeper awareness of the spirit land and animals of the tribes.
I enjoyed reading this one - really excellent work.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Dear Kay,
Sorry I am a bit behind in my reviewing:)
This is an impressive post and so well penned. I loved your ability to teach me more about the ingenious tribes of the outback.
Excellent imagery, story telling, and deeper awareness of the spirit land and animals of the tribes.
I enjoyed reading this one - really excellent work.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Hello Maureen, Thanks so much for reading and I am so pleased that you found the story interesting; working on the next little story called Sweet Water Child. Blessings, Kay XX
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good story my friend very well told and a lesson to us all I think very nice picture and I like the end and the moral thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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This is a good story my friend very well told and a lesson to us all I think very nice picture and I like the end and the moral thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Hello my friend, Thanks so much for reading; glad you enjoyed. I'm now working on the next chapter called Sweet Water Child. Blessings, Kay XX
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Kay
An interesting and entertaining story. You have educated us on the ways and lore of the Australian Aboriginal and at the same time have conveyed a message which is relevant to any society or race.
As predominantly a poet, I feel the story is well penned and can find no spag other than the couple of glitches below. Your writing style is smooth in flow and contains excellent imagery. Much information is contained and you have inserted this knowledge in the story with aplomb.
"young girls that/(who)"
"presented to the women, to skin .." No comma required here.
"Where are you hunting these animals?" Father asked. - (his father asked.)
"he was sore(?) afraid ..." Did you mean sure?
Just a suggestion - I would use a new paragraph here - keeping it in similar size to your other paras.
"The didgeridoo has been used for centuries ..."
Excellent work here Kay. Great articulation and love the image selected. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Hi Kay
An interesting and entertaining story. You have educated us on the ways and lore of the Australian Aboriginal and at the same time have conveyed a message which is relevant to any society or race.
As predominantly a poet, I feel the story is well penned and can find no spag other than the couple of glitches below. Your writing style is smooth in flow and contains excellent imagery. Much information is contained and you have inserted this knowledge in the story with aplomb.
"young girls that/(who)"
"presented to the women, to skin .." No comma required here.
"Where are you hunting these animals?" Father asked. - (his father asked.)
"he was sore(?) afraid ..." Did you mean sure?
Just a suggestion - I would use a new paragraph here - keeping it in similar size to your other paras.
"The didgeridoo has been used for centuries ..."
Excellent work here Kay. Great articulation and love the image selected. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Bless you my friend - I voted for you in the last contest. "Sore afraid is a term basically used in Australian English. Meaning he was more than afraid. It is difficult, our language is different from American :-) LOL. Kay.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is such a brilliant story, Kay. I love that he was caught out, arrogance is not a nice thing. Your stories are lovely I enjoy reading them. I am sorry I am late, but mums back in hospital and my reviewing has spiralled out of control. Give me a nudge on the e-mails if I can't get there and I will go straight away. I love the moral in this story, it's a good one!! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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This is such a brilliant story, Kay. I love that he was caught out, arrogance is not a nice thing. Your stories are lovely I enjoy reading them. I am sorry I am late, but mums back in hospital and my reviewing has spiralled out of control. Give me a nudge on the e-mails if I can't get there and I will go straight away. I love the moral in this story, it's a good one!! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Sandra, Thank ewe so much for reading! Know you are busy. Glad you enjoyed. I wish someone would iron my nightie! Love, Kay.
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I would love to help out, but ironing is a hate job of mine!! LOL xx
Comment from Cookie333
So glad I found your lovely story K. What a great lesson- greed and respect could not be taught any better. Thank you so very much
Karen
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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So glad I found your lovely story K. What a great lesson- greed and respect could not be taught any better. Thank you so very much
Karen
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Hello Karen, I'm glad you found it too; appreciate you reading it for nothing - however, the next chapter you will be paid! Glad you liked the moral to the story. Love, Kay.
Comment from Carol Adele
You have woven an interesting story with so much detail about the aboriginal life. I like that he get his due, but I didn't understand the breaking of the sacred rule. I would like to know what he did.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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You have woven an interesting story with so much detail about the aboriginal life. I like that he get his due, but I didn't understand the breaking of the sacred rule. I would like to know what he did.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Carol, I thought it patently clear how he HUNTED animals on SACRED ground? Compare the Bible story - Eve ate of the Tree that God told them not to touch? Thanks for reading, perhaps you could read it again so you would understand? Blessed be, Kay.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Loved it, Kay - now this is more like it - the full chapter!
The ancient tribal rites are so interesting. Very similar to ancient African initiation rites I've read about.
Do you have indigenous roots? You seem to know so much.
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Sonali
I think this must be the shortest chapter I've ever read, Kay!
Young Gindee seems like a wonderful young man - a little rooster waiting to crow in the henhouse!
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Sonali
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Loved it, Kay - now this is more like it - the full chapter!
The ancient tribal rites are so interesting. Very similar to ancient African initiation rites I've read about.
Do you have indigenous roots? You seem to know so much.
xxx
Sonali
I think this must be the shortest chapter I've ever read, Kay!
Young Gindee seems like a wonderful young man - a little rooster waiting to crow in the henhouse!
xxx
Sonali
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Hello my friend, this is a work in progress! Should not have been released! Thanks, Kay.
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Hello Sonali, Thanks for reading the whole chapter! Yes, my grandmother was aborigingal. Blessings, Kay.
