Comment from brentman99

Excellent

A nice poem and picture. I've never seen this format, so it was nice to see something different. Thanks for sharing, Brent.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2013

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

both poems are in good syllable count for this form
good use of strong rhymes
you convey well the desire to own one of these coveted cars :-) Brooke

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 Comment Written 09-Nov-2013

Comment from fafa

Excellent

beautiful and short poetry, I liked, thank you very much for allowing to read his work, is important to me these readings that teach me your language and sense of phrases and
How to use the phrases, congratulations and happy week.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013

Thank you fafa.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is well written my friend you have done very well using this form I can see why you'd like to own one of these cars well done I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013

Thank you very much Jill

Comment from fidud

Excellent

really enjoyed this poem, though had never heard of the form. I think you have been very clever in your use of language...I'm sure there's a word for it, but the way in which the actual words (rather than the meaning of the words) conveys or at least supports the slickness of the subject matter. Blimey, did that make any sense? I know what I'm trying to say! Good work!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013

Thank you fidud. It does, I think.

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

You seem to have followed the form faithfully, most unusual. It is a lovely little poem about one of the best yet, the corvette. It reads smoothly and evokes memories of better times in vehicles.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013

Thank you mfowler.

Comment from marycec

Excellent

I'm certainly learning about poetic forms asI follow your posts.After reading y our posts I can see you've nailed the form perfectly. You seem to have a passion for cars too. Maybe if you get a job composing advertising lunatikas you will be able to afford one!

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thank you Mary, not a bad idea.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

I enjoyed your poetic versatility in choosing and writing these two unfamiliar poetry styles so well.
Each format works perfectly alone but is also quite effective together.
A good subject choice and effective presentation.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013

Thank you Shirley..

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

It sounds as though you had as much fun creating the La Lunatika as you did attending the car show. I follow sunnilicious and must have missed her posting her new form while I was traveling. Thanks for calling it to my attention and sharing your lust for the Vette along with your rhymes. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013

Thanks Joan E. She posted her first 4 yesterday.

reply by Joan E. on 15-Oct-2013

Ah, ha--that explains my not yet knowing about her new form. You were quite inspired to make the vehicle yours so quickly! More cheers- Joan

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

I love this form - it's jaunty and peppy!

And, oh, the boyish yearning in the lines ...

I hope you'll be able to afford one - sometime!

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013

Thanks Sonali. Maybe when I win the Lottery. :-}