Stories of the Dreamtime
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Wishes come True."Aboriginal myths and legends.
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Comment from mumsyone
Hi Kay!
Thanks for sharing another legend passed down from the Aborigine. A good lesson to be learned from it.
Hugs,
Lois
The guardian touched his beaming face and told him:
"now(Now), run home and find your tribe at peace."
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Hi Kay!
Thanks for sharing another legend passed down from the Aborigine. A good lesson to be learned from it.
Hugs,
Lois
The guardian touched his beaming face and told him:
"now(Now), run home and find your tribe at peace."
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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G'day Lois, Thanks so much my dear friend; glad you enjoyed and I will edit. Love, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
his tormentor's never came near - drop the apostrophe
He thought to himself, "Mingga - add the comma
"What is this place?" The young man thought - the young
He was awed by what he saw, and yet - add comma
A woman floated above the ground, and - add comma
You have come a long way, child - add comma for direct address
want to go home to my family, but - add comma
A well-told story with a thoughtful message :-) I like the mythic quality of your tales. Brooke
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his tormentor's never came near - drop the apostrophe
He thought to himself, "Mingga - add the comma
"What is this place?" The young man thought - the young
He was awed by what he saw, and yet - add comma
A woman floated above the ground, and - add comma
You have come a long way, child - add comma for direct address
want to go home to my family, but - add comma
A well-told story with a thoughtful message :-) I like the mythic quality of your tales. Brooke
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for reviewing and I will edit according to your edits! Only 27 more stories to go ZZZzzzz Blessed be, Kay.
Comment from Thatguypk
This is a beautiful story, beautifully told. I know a similar old fable from Ireland, where a leprechaun offers a wish to a crippled boy who is being taunted. The boy wishes that the other children would ignore disability and play with him. The leprechaun asks "Wouldn't you rather lose your disability?" The child replies "But that would benefit only me. By changing the way the other children think, I'll be helping all the disabled children." Such wisdom! Thank you for sharing your lovely story.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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This is a beautiful story, beautifully told. I know a similar old fable from Ireland, where a leprechaun offers a wish to a crippled boy who is being taunted. The boy wishes that the other children would ignore disability and play with him. The leprechaun asks "Wouldn't you rather lose your disability?" The child replies "But that would benefit only me. By changing the way the other children think, I'll be helping all the disabled children." Such wisdom! Thank you for sharing your lovely story.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much; your Irish story draws a parallel to our dreamtime story. If we forget our own problems and think of others instead - blessings come back to us in mysterious ways. Blessed be, Kay.
Comment from Millibrad
This is a wonderful story for young adults. I like that it contains such a wonderful message with the boy being rewarded for his unselfish wish.
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This is a wonderful story for young adults. I like that it contains such a wonderful message with the boy being rewarded for his unselfish wish.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for reading and so pleased that you enjoyed. Blessed be, Kay.
Comment from Princesseunice
Indeed a story for reflection and change.
Good choice of words and great narration.
I do hope that we all learn to take note of the person, not the body.
Good work. Presice. Clear.
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Indeed a story for reflection and change.
Good choice of words and great narration.
I do hope that we all learn to take note of the person, not the body.
Good work. Presice. Clear.
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you friend; the body is only a suitcase for the soul and we need to think more about the needs of others before ourselves. Blessed be, Kay.
Comment from noronradss55
Fantasy has always been a good source
for literature and you present an interesting
story about the golden tree and its legend.
Check out my poems Blue Bird and Whats wrong
with the world.
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Fantasy has always been a good source
for literature and you present an interesting
story about the golden tree and its legend.
Check out my poems Blue Bird and Whats wrong
with the world.
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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You marked this as good (4 stars) does my story need improvement? Thanks, K.
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Read my poems you will realise what poetry
is suppose to look and sound like.Good luck!
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I am a recognized writer - when I get time I will have a look at your work. I write about Australia and my grandmother was an aborigine. Blessings, Kay.
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Have a look at my portfolio friend. Aussie.
