Creepy Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "All Hallow's Night"A touch of Fear
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Comment from RGstar
All Hallows night, originally derived from the Celts when they reused to back down on their traditions it was written into the christian faith who then organized a special day to honor the saints, and then, you know the rest.
A good Sonnet, with great imagery, and good usage of both verb and adjective.
I couldn't quite make out your image, but that is the beauty of it.
The shrouded canopy with represents things unwell should be difficult to recognize.
Your final couplet is good, though I would have liked to see a little more detraction from the body of the poem, as it stays in line with the rest of it.
I always like to see a sonnet with the turn at the end extreme.
I am no expert at sonnets.
In-fact a mere novice. So it is good when I can learn from masters such as you.
A very visual piece, well done,
RGstar
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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All Hallows night, originally derived from the Celts when they reused to back down on their traditions it was written into the christian faith who then organized a special day to honor the saints, and then, you know the rest.
A good Sonnet, with great imagery, and good usage of both verb and adjective.
I couldn't quite make out your image, but that is the beauty of it.
The shrouded canopy with represents things unwell should be difficult to recognize.
Your final couplet is good, though I would have liked to see a little more detraction from the body of the poem, as it stays in line with the rest of it.
I always like to see a sonnet with the turn at the end extreme.
I am no expert at sonnets.
In-fact a mere novice. So it is good when I can learn from masters such as you.
A very visual piece, well done,
RGstar
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you RGstar. Very good points. I far from a Master, just a novice too, but I appreciate the compliment.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Treischel,
I love sonnets especially when they are perfect like this one. You should have entered it in the Halloween contest. Your rhyme is solid, the flow is smooth, descriptive words, good alliteration in some/sick/soul, ghoulish/games and the theme is a bit creepy. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Hi Treischel,
I love sonnets especially when they are perfect like this one. You should have entered it in the Halloween contest. Your rhyme is solid, the flow is smooth, descriptive words, good alliteration in some/sick/soul, ghoulish/games and the theme is a bit creepy. Well done, chey
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you Chey. Creepy is what I intended.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a wonderful Halloween poem, Treischel, with all the ghouls and ghosties, and the rotting bodies, goodness, what an imagination you have! This would have been a good one for the Halloween contest. How is your wife doing? Is she home? xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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This is a wonderful Halloween poem, Treischel, with all the ghouls and ghosties, and the rotting bodies, goodness, what an imagination you have! This would have been a good one for the Halloween contest. How is your wife doing? Is she home? xsx Sandra
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sandra. She is home and doing very well.
Comment from amanda98653
Definitely an exceptional one.
The rhyme scheme is flawless and the poetic lines go well with the flow.
Words like "evil", "rots", and "filth" really depict an unpleasant scenery.
Just something that's worthwhile mentioning..I am pretty sure "All Hallow's Night" is a shakespearean sonnet" (correct me if I am wrong)
"A night that's since denoted Halloween."
I Don't know if that line follows the iambic pentameter or not..since "denoted" is daDUM
"Halloween" is a three syllable word so it's DUMdaDUM
"denoted Halloween"= daDUMDUMdaDUM
I really like the last two lines ..A rhyming couplet:
"For some may find there's more than playful fright,
In darkened shadows on All Hallow's Night."
God bless,
Amanda
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Definitely an exceptional one.
The rhyme scheme is flawless and the poetic lines go well with the flow.
Words like "evil", "rots", and "filth" really depict an unpleasant scenery.
Just something that's worthwhile mentioning..I am pretty sure "All Hallow's Night" is a shakespearean sonnet" (correct me if I am wrong)
"A night that's since denoted Halloween."
I Don't know if that line follows the iambic pentameter or not..since "denoted" is daDUM
"Halloween" is a three syllable word so it's DUMdaDUM
"denoted Halloween"= daDUMDUMdaDUM
I really like the last two lines ..A rhyming couplet:
"For some may find there's more than playful fright,
In darkened shadows on All Hallow's Night."
God bless,
Amanda
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you Amanda, Denoted is three syllables daDUMda. So,
deNOted HALlowEEN
Excellent review. Really appreciate all the Stars,
Yes, Shakespearean Sonnet.
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Oops my bad. I didn't notice the 'ed'
Anyway;)
It's brilliant.
Amanda
Comment from marycec
Good sonnet with an unsettling message for trick or treaters.'For some may find there's more than playful fright,' good rhyme scheme and perfect rhythm in this timely offering.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Good sonnet with an unsettling message for trick or treaters.'For some may find there's more than playful fright,' good rhyme scheme and perfect rhythm in this timely offering.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you Mary.
Comment from mfowler
That's it no more fun on Halloween! This is one scary poem definitely for adults consumption. It reads really well through skillful rhyme and rhythm. And it builds its tension really well to the well placed warning at the end.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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That's it no more fun on Halloween! This is one scary poem definitely for adults consumption. It reads really well through skillful rhyme and rhythm. And it builds its tension really well to the well placed warning at the end.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you mfowler.
Comment from SaluteDobby
And so, this night some sick soul may arise,
Engaged in ghoulish games of fear and dread.
To cause some trick-or-treater great surprise,
When finding they are dabbling with the dead
This was excellent, Trieschel! Creepy and macabre, to say the least!
You should have entered this in the Halloween poetry contest! Beautiful and unique rhyme scheme.
Have a great day! :)
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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And so, this night some sick soul may arise,
Engaged in ghoulish games of fear and dread.
To cause some trick-or-treater great surprise,
When finding they are dabbling with the dead
This was excellent, Trieschel! Creepy and macabre, to say the least!
You should have entered this in the Halloween poetry contest! Beautiful and unique rhyme scheme.
Have a great day! :)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you SaluteDobby. Already entered a different one.
Comment from emjaihammond
A frightful dark warning about Halloween night. Unfortunately what used to be a fun night where children just dressed up and knocked on doors for candy has become a bit more fearsome. We have had to stop going door to door and use other methods for Halloweening. Thanks for this.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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A frightful dark warning about Halloween night. Unfortunately what used to be a fun night where children just dressed up and knocked on doors for candy has become a bit more fearsome. We have had to stop going door to door and use other methods for Halloweening. Thanks for this.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you emjailhammond.
Comment from Sueellen11
Aussies don't do Halloween ,,, so I am wondering how it really come to be a holiday,,, and the reasons,,, is it part there in your poem,, great write,, excellent sonnet,, enjoyed the read,,have a blessed weekend,,sueellen
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Aussies don't do Halloween ,,, so I am wondering how it really come to be a holiday,,, and the reasons,,, is it part there in your poem,, great write,, excellent sonnet,, enjoyed the read,,have a blessed weekend,,sueellen
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sueellen.
Comment from sunnilicious
I'm not sure what to see in the artwork, however, I like the colors. And that is a scary poem. It is focused too. Creative with excellent visual imagery. GOod form. Nice work.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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I'm not sure what to see in the artwork, however, I like the colors. And that is a scary poem. It is focused too. Creative with excellent visual imagery. GOod form. Nice work.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you sunnilicious. I see evil firming in the ether.
