The Voyager
A poem describing myself143 total reviews
Comment from Djeandebard
"Pilgrim's Progress" was very helpful to me in my early Christian life. Like you, I struggled to find my place in Christ. He gave you a wonderful talent to share with the world - writing poetry! I heard your heart's cry in your poem. Know this: there is nothing you can do to make Him love you more AND there is nothing you can do that will make Him love you less. He loves us but cannot bless us unless we are obedient.
This is a very good poem. The only correction needed is in the first stanza: should be "his" (no capital needed)
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"Pilgrim's Progress" was very helpful to me in my early Christian life. Like you, I struggled to find my place in Christ. He gave you a wonderful talent to share with the world - writing poetry! I heard your heart's cry in your poem. Know this: there is nothing you can do to make Him love you more AND there is nothing you can do that will make Him love you less. He loves us but cannot bless us unless we are obedient.
This is a very good poem. The only correction needed is in the first stanza: should be "his" (no capital needed)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent confession of one that is confused and uncertain, and looks for an external sign.
If one believes that he is born in God's imagine, and has free will, then he must leave the quest of continual inquiry as to what to do next.
Spend some time in a soup kitchen and see the depression of the souls that have lost their way, in seeking to help them you open a line to receive information as to what to do with your life.
Even praying in private does not create a mental email that will be responded to with a guide. You must move, overcome inertia, and get moving.
People want to be discovered and applauded for just showing up in life. But, when you lead, others follow, so figure out your path and your mantra.
No matter where you are the Holy Spirit can find you.
Be working when you hear the voice of loneliness and hunger, and see the face of despair.
Your intervention and spirit can be uplifting for those who seek the affirmation of others, and someone to follow who projects passion and confidence.
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Excellent confession of one that is confused and uncertain, and looks for an external sign.
If one believes that he is born in God's imagine, and has free will, then he must leave the quest of continual inquiry as to what to do next.
Spend some time in a soup kitchen and see the depression of the souls that have lost their way, in seeking to help them you open a line to receive information as to what to do with your life.
Even praying in private does not create a mental email that will be responded to with a guide. You must move, overcome inertia, and get moving.
People want to be discovered and applauded for just showing up in life. But, when you lead, others follow, so figure out your path and your mantra.
No matter where you are the Holy Spirit can find you.
Be working when you hear the voice of loneliness and hunger, and see the face of despair.
Your intervention and spirit can be uplifting for those who seek the affirmation of others, and someone to follow who projects passion and confidence.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
LOVE THESE BITS:
Gazes at the virgin sunlight.
Sitting next to a tranquil tree. RESTING BESIDE
Searching every orifice Orifice=great word
a Christ-given harmony.
Anything to alleviate "
monotonic Christian monotonic "
My spirit is so callous and cold. 'c' allits
In my deepest forebodings of fright 'f' "
I tried to sojourn to the forest, Love 'sojourn'
A tranquil 'Promised Land'.
And in its transformation I can feel.
NEXT LINE IS TOO LONG:
And no longer distinguish what is false or what is real.
A bit rough in places but the passion shines through.
Regards:
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LOVE THESE BITS:
Gazes at the virgin sunlight.
Sitting next to a tranquil tree. RESTING BESIDE
Searching every orifice Orifice=great word
a Christ-given harmony.
Anything to alleviate "
monotonic Christian monotonic "
My spirit is so callous and cold. 'c' allits
In my deepest forebodings of fright 'f' "
I tried to sojourn to the forest, Love 'sojourn'
A tranquil 'Promised Land'.
And in its transformation I can feel.
NEXT LINE IS TOO LONG:
And no longer distinguish what is false or what is real.
A bit rough in places but the passion shines through.
Regards:
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Dear Justin: Well deserved. Just posted #29-30, from aeries of short poems on Americana.
With Respect: Steve C
Comment from Emeka13
Hi Justin,
This poem which you said is about you shows that you are a typical children of God. We all go through what you went through or are still going through. Even Jesus did.You went through a long rough patch, with the devil determined to break you and then to relish your fall. I quite like the line,
In my deepest forebodings of fright
Demons surround me and I can't cry'. Your repeated cry for help to Jesus is our way of inviting the Lord of Hosts to fight for us. You were battered but not broken. I know that God will not forsake you because you have put your trust in Him. Your last couple of line is the best expression of faith in Him who does not fail. Keep believing. He will show up eventually if He hasn't already done so.
Wonderful. You managed to make me feel your anxieties, your fears, your near despair. A six for perfect handling of this most profound of subjects.
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Hi Justin,
This poem which you said is about you shows that you are a typical children of God. We all go through what you went through or are still going through. Even Jesus did.You went through a long rough patch, with the devil determined to break you and then to relish your fall. I quite like the line,
In my deepest forebodings of fright
Demons surround me and I can't cry'. Your repeated cry for help to Jesus is our way of inviting the Lord of Hosts to fight for us. You were battered but not broken. I know that God will not forsake you because you have put your trust in Him. Your last couple of line is the best expression of faith in Him who does not fail. Keep believing. He will show up eventually if He hasn't already done so.
Wonderful. You managed to make me feel your anxieties, your fears, your near despair. A six for perfect handling of this most profound of subjects.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much Emeka
Comment from Nosha17
A wonderful poem about your search for God. I think with faith and optimism you will find God and he will answer your prayers and protect you. This is like the baring of your innermost soul, you write very well and make good use of imagery and language. Commendable
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A wonderful poem about your search for God. I think with faith and optimism you will find God and he will answer your prayers and protect you. This is like the baring of your innermost soul, you write very well and make good use of imagery and language. Commendable
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Comment from Matoshka
I wish I had a six for you, for this is such an honest search for God, not watered down, but the true seeker. I think we all feel this way once in a while, but it is the full armor of God and walking in sometimes, blind faith, that keeps us safe. Trails will always come for they are a refinement and build up our strength and faith in God. I enjoyed your words very much. Blessings
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I wish I had a six for you, for this is such an honest search for God, not watered down, but the true seeker. I think we all feel this way once in a while, but it is the full armor of God and walking in sometimes, blind faith, that keeps us safe. Trails will always come for they are a refinement and build up our strength and faith in God. I enjoyed your words very much. Blessings
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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So welcome, Justin, a great poem. Blessings
Comment from livelylinda
Justin Chopin: an intense message about your search. In my life I made the same search. However, you must tread peacefully, leisurely rather than attempting to force it within your time allotments. Our God works at His own speed and when you least expect it, He'll be there for you.
I must comment on your punctuation and rhythm of this poem. I see a couple too many periods which disrupts the flow and a few word changes would keep the rhythm going in a manner better for this piece. If you are interested in the exact places, let me know and I'll make further comments. Thanks for writing. Linda
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Justin Chopin: an intense message about your search. In my life I made the same search. However, you must tread peacefully, leisurely rather than attempting to force it within your time allotments. Our God works at His own speed and when you least expect it, He'll be there for you.
I must comment on your punctuation and rhythm of this poem. I see a couple too many periods which disrupts the flow and a few word changes would keep the rhythm going in a manner better for this piece. If you are interested in the exact places, let me know and I'll make further comments. Thanks for writing. Linda
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
My heart is beating so intensely
With every step I take.
Jesus, I give you my spirit and my soul
For I know I am yours, never to forsake.
Struggling he cannot find[.] - lose period
Anything to alleviate
I lovely poem, Justin, your faith shining through your
words.
margaret
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My heart is beating so intensely
With every step I take.
Jesus, I give you my spirit and my soul
For I know I am yours, never to forsake.
Struggling he cannot find[.] - lose period
Anything to alleviate
I lovely poem, Justin, your faith shining through your
words.
margaret
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Comment from Princesseunice
Oh Justin, i totally relate.
My search started at 12, guess you have spent much time searching.
Glad you found your identity.
Good...excellent poem J.
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Oh Justin, i totally relate.
My search started at 12, guess you have spent much time searching.
Glad you found your identity.
Good...excellent poem J.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Comment from onkughosh19
IN his sarch for Jesus, the poet has been looking for him since he was a child.He has even gone to he forests but now he is really losing hope of ever finding the LOrd.In the last lines "MY heart is beating.....never to forsake" he seeks solace by surrrendering himself to GOd
Your thoughts regarding God have beem wonderfully penned here, with a lot of sincerity.THe title is good and the picture is great1!
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IN his sarch for Jesus, the poet has been looking for him since he was a child.He has even gone to he forests but now he is really losing hope of ever finding the LOrd.In the last lines "MY heart is beating.....never to forsake" he seeks solace by surrrendering himself to GOd
Your thoughts regarding God have beem wonderfully penned here, with a lot of sincerity.THe title is good and the picture is great1!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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