Stories of the Dreamtime
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Googarh Twins"Aboriginal myths and legends.
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Comment from Cookie333
I just live a happy ending- see? We all get what we need, sometimes it just takes time. We often have ewes who will adopt a lamb should the need arise- some are better than others. Just a lively story line my friend
Thank you
Karen
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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I just live a happy ending- see? We all get what we need, sometimes it just takes time. We often have ewes who will adopt a lamb should the need arise- some are better than others. Just a lively story line my friend
Thank you
Karen
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Thanks for reading Karen - our myths and legends all have lessons and would you believe - some run parallel with the Bible teachings? Bless you, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
looked at the ghost gum tree, - I would change that to a period
sleep in my branches," Gum knew - I would change that to a period
the carpet snake, slyly - I added a comma
asleep in seconds, his meal - I would change to a period
"I can smell meat," one of the twins sniffed - change comma to period. You only use a comma with dialogue if you have a speech tag, like he said. Sniffing is not a speech tag.
Your mother was speared by a hunter, you should know - change comma to period
Excellent dialogue, good character development - I really like the happy ending :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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looked at the ghost gum tree, - I would change that to a period
sleep in my branches," Gum knew - I would change that to a period
the carpet snake, slyly - I added a comma
asleep in seconds, his meal - I would change to a period
"I can smell meat," one of the twins sniffed - change comma to period. You only use a comma with dialogue if you have a speech tag, like he said. Sniffing is not a speech tag.
Your mother was speared by a hunter, you should know - change comma to period
Excellent dialogue, good character development - I really like the happy ending :-) Brooke
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Good Morning Possum, Thanks so much for reading and editing; glad you liked the story and I will edit. Cheers, K.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi K,
This is a delightful story with a good message. I have never heard of goannas before so you taught me something new today. I like the Googarh twins and am glad they found a mother to replace theirs as she can't come back. The carpet snake sounds like a creature to steer clear of! Well done.....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi K,
This is a delightful story with a good message. I have never heard of goannas before so you taught me something new today. I like the Googarh twins and am glad they found a mother to replace theirs as she can't come back. The carpet snake sounds like a creature to steer clear of! Well done.....blessings, chey
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hello Mrs Wyoming, Thanks so much for reading and the six shiny stars! Blessings, K.
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Your are so welcome, K...hugs, chey
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I don't think I like your carpet snake! I loved this little story, it was wonderful, Kay. I am so pleased the Mother Googarh looked after the twins. I am going to enjoy this series, you make them so interesting! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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I don't think I like your carpet snake! I loved this little story, it was wonderful, Kay. I am so pleased the Mother Googarh looked after the twins. I am going to enjoy this series, you make them so interesting! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hullo Mrs Seagull, Thanks so much for reading and the sixer - much appreciated. Bless you, K.
Comment from tedanytime
Very nice story to record the tales of dream times.
These myths are very interesting to read. Reader believes that many of these stories were told to children in the beginning but then became near-truth over centuries.
I have wondered how such a diverse people were only found in Australia. There are only about four or five major people groups on the planet, of which the Australian aborigines are one.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Very nice story to record the tales of dream times.
These myths are very interesting to read. Reader believes that many of these stories were told to children in the beginning but then became near-truth over centuries.
I have wondered how such a diverse people were only found in Australia. There are only about four or five major people groups on the planet, of which the Australian aborigines are one.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hello Ted, Thanks for reading; we believe the tribes came by canoe from the Pacific Islands. As there were 10,000 dialects, there must have been a real melting pot. Aboriginal history goes back 54,000 years! Blessings, K.
Comment from Taffspride
Another delightful tale to delight, or send chills down one's spine.
We have tiny lizards called Anoles all over our yard in Florida, snakes too, but nothing like your carpet snake thank goodness.
I like the way you introduce the species, and adding human interest to the tale with the story of the mother googarh adopting the twins.
The moral to the story in the last line was great.
Looking forward to reading the next installment.
Keep em coming.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Another delightful tale to delight, or send chills down one's spine.
We have tiny lizards called Anoles all over our yard in Florida, snakes too, but nothing like your carpet snake thank goodness.
I like the way you introduce the species, and adding human interest to the tale with the story of the mother googarh adopting the twins.
The moral to the story in the last line was great.
Looking forward to reading the next installment.
Keep em coming.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hello Ann, Thanks so much for reading; glad you enjoyed part 2. this is the first time I have attempted to write a series. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Aussie
You have written a great story here I think children would enjoy reading or listening to it.
I do not have a phobia of snakes but I would not like to be near one at all. This story adds the message of adoption and community caring for each other. Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Aussie
You have written a great story here I think children would enjoy reading or listening to it.
I do not have a phobia of snakes but I would not like to be near one at all. This story adds the message of adoption and community caring for each other. Well done. Mary
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Mary, Thanks so much for reading - glad you enjoyed. All my stories will have lessons. Bless you, K.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Oh God Lord i don't need to be around any kind of a snake, even a rubber one (play/pretend). I freak out. This one sounds horrid. I'm not fond of lizard creatures either. This was a well-written piece and very educational for sure. Good piece. God loves you and so we.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Oh God Lord i don't need to be around any kind of a snake, even a rubber one (play/pretend). I freak out. This one sounds horrid. I'm not fond of lizard creatures either. This was a well-written piece and very educational for sure. Good piece. God loves you and so we.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Big baby Evelyn, Australia has the most venomous snakes in the world - carpet snake isn't. Just for you I will write a happier story next time. LOL - blessings, Kay.
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OH thank you. Please warn me if there is any snake ones. I (Janie)have a remarkable phobia bout them. Miss Evelyn is just listening to me read the pieces and can't see them because she doesn't have a computer. When i was in a college first aid class i sat in the front row. the teacher told us to open to a certain page we were going to study about snake bites. When I opened the book and it had a picture of a snake i threw the book in the floor and somewhat screamed. She picked the book up and put it closed back on my desk and tole me she recommended I leave my book closed. I'm the whimp. Love ya, Janie (sigh)
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Janie, Australians live with snakes - even in the suburbs. I hate them and have killed many with a shovel (even tho they are protected) snakes and crocodiles are my big hate them!
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Why in heavens name would a snake be protected? I don't like crocodiles, lizards, anything creepy. I can't even stand worms. When my dad would take us fishing he would put the worms in the trunk of the car because I'd freak out if they were inside the car. I love gummie bears but I cannot bear the idea of eating a gummie worm (candy). I had a friend that had a real looking rubber snake and I knew it was fake and come up on it one day and had chest pain for two hours. I've never come up and a rela one and I do pray with my heart and soul I never do. Love ya, janie
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They are part of the eco system - just as saltwater crocodiles are; keep killing them and we break the chain that god gave us - they provide food for our people (aborigines) grilled croc tail or roasted snake - Help! Where is Macca's?
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They eat them? Oh my God. Oh what an awful thought. I don't eat a whole lot of meat anyway but that's beyond my capability. Oh my. Love ya, Janie
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Our tribal aborigines still live off the land. They are hunters and gatherers. The women collect berries and yams (sweet potato) the men kill kangaroo, wallaby, snake and other animals (they are allowed because it is their sacred land.) On the coastal plains the tribes fish for dugong (very large animal) turtle, shark, and so on. Our people are fit and healthy - unlike western culture. White man invaded in 1788 and now, our people living near to cities are living off welfare and are drunks. I'm sure you see parallels with native Americans?
Comment from country ranch writer
I DO NOT THINK I WANT TO LIVE OVER THERE I AN NOT FOND OF SNAKES OR OTHER THINGS THAT CAN MAKE A MEAL OFF OF ME, I HAVE A BIG CASE OF CHICKEN RUNNING DOWN MY BACK.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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I DO NOT THINK I WANT TO LIVE OVER THERE I AN NOT FOND OF SNAKES OR OTHER THINGS THAT CAN MAKE A MEAL OFF OF ME, I HAVE A BIG CASE OF CHICKEN RUNNING DOWN MY BACK.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Ha!Ha! Australia has the most venomous snakes in the world; old man carpet snake isn't venomous - next chapter will be happier! LOL. Kay XX
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carpet snake I think is like our rat snakes as I call them . WE HAVE COTTON MOUTH, AND RATTLERS, BOAS AND PYTHON
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More like your pythons - swallow prey whole.
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HUM
Comment from lancellot
I think this will work very well as a children's story. It adds the message of adoption and community caring for each other after tragic events. Well done.
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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I think this will work very well as a children's story. It adds the message of adoption and community caring for each other after tragic events. Well done.
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much friend; glad you liked the lesson. Each chapter will have different lessons, did you read chapter 1.? Blessings, Kay.
